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Merely based on unsounded assumptions and dubious evidences, the arguer draws a conclusion that in order to help Mira Vista's graduates find employments, they should offer more courses in business and computer technology and hire additional job counselors. Although the conclusion seems appealing and convincing at the first glance, in fact it is ill-received after close scrutiny of the assumption and evidence, from my perspective, there are at least three flaws.

First and foremost, the arguer assumes that it is simply that Green Mountain College has those extra courses that led better employment among their graduates, which may be possible in some degree, while the arguer fails to illustrate any solid evidence to confirm the crucial assumption. Actually it is possible that it is the situation and basis between the two colleges that result in the different rate of employment. It’s
also likely that Green Mountain College has more effective teachers, facilities which can give a more favorable studying circumstance, and the student resource may be better, which means graduates in Green Mountain College have high level of abilities, or maybe Green Mountain College is more famous than Mira Vista College, and it is equally possible the major focus of Green Mountain College that make it have to open more business and other classes cited above. With out ruling out such possibilities, it is vague to say that the function of the classes that makes Green Mountain College better.

In the second place, even if these two colleges are in the same basis level other than the opening of the classes cited above, it is still unscientific to assume the employment that 70 percentages of seniors' jobs in MC is worse than that of 90 percentages in GC. There is no denying that seniors in MC got full-time job in three months after their graduation, and only half of jobs were in seniors’ major, while there is also no guarantee that the 90 percentage of graduating seniors got the jobs were in their major fields. What's more it is also reasonable that MC's students are full-qualified which can be an advantage, they can do relative jobs as well, or they just do not want to find an occupation in their major fields. While neither any conclusive scientific evidence nor any anecdotal evidence is proved to affirm the assumption.

Finally and may be the most importantly, the arguer hasty to draw the conclusion that he assumes it is sure to be effective if MC incite more business and computer technology classes and job counselors,
while there are alternative methods that can be more efficiently and more effectively than the former strategy,
as opening such classes can also take a great mount of money, instead they can use this money to enhance the educational facilities, providing more internship opportunities and so on.

In conclusion, the argument, which is seems logical at first, fails to substantiate the speaker's claim, because the evidence cited in the analysis do not provide strong and credible support to what the arguer indicates, in order to make the conclusion more acceptable, the arguer should cite more persuasive evidence and reason more convincing, and take every possibilities into account.