linran0108的写作贴，请指教~~

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Thanks

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整体感觉是一篇很不错的文章。第三段的阐述很充分，相对而言第四段关于持续的换工作带来的缺点，阐述的不是很够。最后一段可以和结尾段分开来写。

大家一起努力~~~

By crystal5841

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不好意思，实在是很抱歉，网络出了点问题，今天才能看，所以现在才上来gter
看了评价了，其实那个，额，我没用模板，纯粹是自己想了就写了
而且我先写的最后一段，看字数不太够再加了最后第二段的，所以，结论比较有问题。
断句多是因为思维混乱。。额~~
非常感谢^^
希望今天还能赶得及改以及写今天的作业:)
一起加油，谢谢。 2# dandan17

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3# crystal5841
嗯，好的好的，
本来没有当结尾写的，因为是第一次正儿八经练，所以。。
谢谢：）
十分抱歉现在才上来，所以自己的修改任务都还没做，赶紧赶紧去了。。不好意思额~~
一起加油^^

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7.31作文
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Newspapers and magazines are the best ways to learn about a foreign.

With the rapid development of communication, the globalization of the world economics and the obvious improvement of life condition, the whole world are becoming an earth village. As a result, we have more chances to get to know a foreign country. But problem subsequently and come. Although we read about the country, get touch with the residents, even travel to the country, we also find the country still remain stranger for us. As we all know, to know a new country begins with its culture. Also, I hold the view that newspapers and magazines are the best way to learn about a foreign country.

First, the newspapers and magazines are pools of information, including the current affairs, the economics and the hot gossip of amusement circle. Rather than the politics, we can also know more about the daily life of the common people and the focus they pay attention to. In a word, we can get touch with the life of the natives, all sorts.

Besides, the newspapers and magazines provide the information up to the date. They endow us with the monitors to grasp the pulse of the times. In addition to the latest report and the most popular fashion, the critical comments enable us to know the views they hold, what’s more, the culture and spirit of the nation. For a instance, the New York Times let us know how American view the world in the perspective of politics, while the play boy give out American opinions of sex.

Last but not least, the newspapers and magazines offer the news and comments brief but to the point, as was exactly what we wanted. Limited by time and energy, we have no choice but read the essence. The newspapers and magazines always do a serious report around one topic, which allow us to know deeper, at the same time, the brief articles can save time.

To sum up, the newspapers and magazines offer all sorts information up to the date, the critical comments reflecting world view. Furthermore, the terse, short but forceful article is proper to read. Based above all, I am favor to get to know a new country with the assistance of them.

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见附件

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其实the problem subconsequently and comes 是对的。。
虽然我也觉得语法有问题
但是我好多地方都看到了。。
7# anitaxja

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啊..不好意思..我错了..
不过the problem subconsequently and comes 什么意思啊...没看明白额..

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8.3独立写作小组
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation time.

The life style is witnessing radical changes at an unprecedented pace. In the modern society, people are pushed by endless desire and lead a life on the go with a higher salary and a less vacation time. However I hold the view firmly that a job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation time.
Obviously, more relaxed time allow a person to devote more energy and time to the interest area, endowing they with the wing to pursue dream. I have a closed aunt who hopped from a top company to a small workshop. Beyond expectation, the only thing she does is to devote all free time to hang out and take photos during the relaxed work. Actually, she has been awarded by some genius photographs and it seems that she really enjoyable. I learn an impressive lesson from her that a job with more time at our own disposal will contributes greatly to realize the real meaning of life.
Secondly, more vacation time enables us spend more time together with family and friends. To tell the truth, it is very closest relations, like parents, that we are always ignore when bothered with tough affairs. We would share more happiness time with the real important persons should we are set free from the busy bored work. Prevalent stereotypes are that filial piety occurs to the youth, while the parents are passed away. I bear it in mind that the family should always be first.
By contrast, a job with a high salary always means heavy burden, less time with family and friends, less holiday to relax. However, more material possession can never be equaled to more happiness. A research conducted by a famous psychological professor indicates that the average happiness index of the riches is less than the middle class, even less than the general wage earners.
To sum up, considering a job with more vacation implies more free time to dispose and a high salary at a cost of heavy burden and less time with family is not worthwhile, I am convinced that a decent job is a job with more relaxed time, though it’s less paid.

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The life style is witnessing radical changes at an unprecedented pace. In the modern society, people are pushed by endless desire and lead a life on the go (?) with a higher salary and a less vacation time. However I hold the view firmly that a job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation time.0 S( K1 A  t4 T" W9 `8 K+ }/ E; e. e
Obviously, more relaxed (relax) time allow a person to devote more energy and time to the interest area, endowing they (him) with the wing to pursue dream. I have a closed aunt who hopped from a top company to a small workshop. Beyond expectation, the only thing she does is to devote all free time to hang out and take photos during the relaxed work. Actually, she has been awarded by some genius photographs and it seems that she really enjoyable. I learn an impressive lesson from her that a job with more time at our own disposal (good) will contributes greatly to realize the real meaning of life.4 S8 ~4 s) p6 x8 m
Secondly, more vacation time enables us spend more time together with family and friends. To tell the truth, it is very closest relations, like parents, that we are always ignore when bothered with tough affairs. We would share more happiness time with the real important persons should we are set free from the busy bored work. Prevalent stereotypes are that filial piety occurs to the youth, while the parents are passed away. I bear it in mind that the family should always be first.
By contrast, a job with a high salary always means heavy burden, less time with family and friends, less holiday to relax. However, more material possession can never be equaled to more happiness. A research conducted by a famous psychological professor indicates that the average happiness index of the riches is less than the middle class, even less than the general wage earners.
To sum up, considering a job with more vacation implies more free time to dispose and a high salary at a cost of heavy burden and less time with family is not worthwhile (?), I am convinced that a decent job is a job with more relaxed time, though it’s less paid.

Elaborate well
Minor grammer error

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8.5独立写作小组
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Younger school children (ages five to ten) should be required to study art and music in addition to math, science, history and language.

Views vary with regard to whether or not send children aged from 5 to 10 to study art. Some parents believe the it’s children’s right to enjoy childhood without heavy study burden, while others argue that though the children has learnt math, science, history and language, they should learn more about art and music in order to enjoy a advantage over the competitors when growing up. Personally, I am favor of the latter group, in spite of less entertainment in childhood.

It’s a truth universally acknowledged that the early children get touch with art and music, the higher achievement they will make. Children are of great flexible who are easier to be acquired knowledge and skills about art and music. Most genius musicians and artisans start their practice and make the first step to success in their childhood, including Mozart, Liszt, Brahms, Da Vinci and so on.

Secondly, the most debated points of the hot issue are to pressure children too much and to ignore the children’s interest. It’s the problems worth pondering. But to cite my story as example, I think it’s incredibly exaggerated. When I was a little girl at 7, I began to learn the Guzheng, a Chinese traditional musical instrument. After the fresh time, I was tired of the boring practice and told my parents I did thirst for giving up. But they didn’t take my suggestion into consideration. I was forced to learn for another 4 years and got 10th lever at length, marked excellent. It’s the highest certificate for an amateur. To others’ surprise, rather than hate, I take a great interest in it and I would be regret forever were my parents allowed me to give up. Interest will change and can be cultivated. As to the heavy burden, it totally depends on personal style of education, not on whether learn art or not. Art and music can be considering as another way to entertain.

Last but not least, learning art and music in childhood will endow an adult with more competitive strength, as well as cultivating taste. It also enables us to make more friends with similar interest and experience. Nowhere has the meaning of the state of mind been so vividly and accurately expressed as in “A young idler, a big beggar.”I think the endeavor in the early years will be returned in the future.

In a word, accounting for the advantages of sending children to learn art and music early outweigh the disadvantages, I am firmly in favor of the former group of parents.

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8.7作文
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students should not take part-time jobs while they are studying in universities.

There is a heated discussion nowadays about whether or not take part-time jobs while they are studying in universities as students. Some people argue that students should pay attention to study and part-time jobs will separate their limited energy and time. Others believe that part-time jobs are best way for student to put theory into practice and get the knowledge of newness. As a sophomore faced with the problem directly, I strongly hold to the idea that students are supposed to take part-time jobs while studying in universities.

Admittedly, the university is a bridge connected the real society and the ideal tower of ivory. I think the part-time jobs offer a rare opportunity to get touch with the specific work affairs. To cite my personal experience as an example, I ever do a part-time job as a Chinese teacher of a class with over 30 senior high school students, from which I learnt a key lesson. To my surprise, after a semester’s work, I am equipment with various skills, not only how to fulfill tasks perfectly, but also how to handle human relationship tactfully.

Secondly, there is no denying that taking a part-time job will be a good way to earn money to cover the cost, light the economic burden of family and be independent. Most students in the university are adults who should be responsible for own life and be more independent. Besides, the tuition fee of universities, especially in three level schools in china. So taking part-time job is always regarded as a better way to balance study and money. Part-time job wouldn’t occupy too much time were it properly assigned. And its burden laid on the students is exaggerated by the objectors.

Last but not least, part-time job can be the start of long term career. There are numerous success examples that start an undertaking in the universities. The legend experience of Dell illustrates it vividly. Dell made his first spot of gold as a freshman by selling and redeploying computer. Then he built up a huge Dell Computer Company. Also, taking part-time job can be also regarded as work experience which is often required when hunting for jobs.

In conclusion, taking part-time job enable students in the university to get touch with the society, gain valuable practice experience and enhance ability to be independent, as well as earn money to light the burden of family. Obviously, its benefits outweigh its drawbacks, so I am firmly in favor of taking a part-time job.