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发表于 2010-8-2 13:52:08 |显示全部楼层
首先感谢和我互改作文的同学~!
这篇作文居然又写了这么长时间,不应该啊不应该,照理说现在应该开始掐时间了吧?一开始以为是个比较好写的题目,写着写着却发现思路不清晰了,于是先看了两篇范文再写的。。。好吧我错了。。。
后半部分个人感觉比较拖沓,请大刀阔斧地改吧!
嗯~请使劲拍砖~再次感谢~

TOPIC: ISSUE103 - "The study of history has value only to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives."
WORDS: 639          TIME: 01:30:00          DATE: 8/2/2010 1:20:33 PM


History is a collection of our predecessors' experiences and worths studying. I fundamentally agree with the speaker that the study of history is valuable when it concerns about our day-to-day activities. However, the speaker's statement is rather shallow that studying history would benefit not only us individuals but also companies and even the whole earth.

The study of history provides us of objectives and propels us towards the way to success. A student inspired by the feat of the famous explorer Columbus is likely to be interested in the fields of study relevant to exploring, and may finally pursue a career in oceanography, astronomy or geology. This decision can in turn affect the student's daily life in school and beyond. From another perspective, a depressed person can also be inspired by studying history, for he could read about the achivements attained by past people. They have succeeded, and why not have a try? After asking himself this question, his confidence is reassured and the study of history is now propelling him towards his way to success. As we can see, by learning about grand accomplishments in the past can we clarify our objectives and walk through difficulties in our daily lives.

However, the benefit of studying of history exceeds the realm of daily lives, and could be adopted in decisions in companies. On one hand, a company with more tactics and experiences is more likely to survive in the fierce and complex competition nowadays. Company managers keep attention on previously proven efficient techniques and adopt them. Moreover, some even refer the ancient Chinese book "The Art of War" for inspirations of effective and efficient operation and countermeasures in competition with other companies. On the other, the operation of a company requires not only efficient techniques but also the awareness of past failure. The financial crisis in 2008 caused by the seemingly profitable Financial Derivatives sweeps down series of companies over the world. The later companies are sure to learn this lesson and would not be credulous of the promised profit of Financial Derivatives. In this way, history could direct the way of operation of companies, and could serve as lessons for long-time development.

Moreover, the study of history is of crucial importance for long-time interest of us human kind and the environment protection of the whole earth. The World War I and World War II has brought forth millions of deaths and unmeasurable miser. These catastrophies in history warn us that we must seek for other moderate methods to resolve conflicts, because no one would like to suffer a world war again. The history thus stresses the responsibility for peace in all countries and consequently plays an important role in assuring the long-time happiness of human kind. Meanwhile, there are times that science, as a two-edged weapon, did great harm on our environment. Looking back to the past can we learn valuable lessons that what would happlen if no proper measures were taken. The nuclear accidents at Chernobyl and Tree Mile have been studied to make sure that the same accident would not happen again. The ozone hole in Antarctic makes people aware of the potential danger of Freon and urges people to find a substitution. The photochemical smog which killed thousands in the Europe put people into consideration of sustainable development. All these examples point to the same fact that the study of history is beneficiary to the world not only for daily lives of ourselves but also for our offsprings.

In sum, the speaker's point is biased that he fails to recognize the vast beneficiary of studying history that are not directly relevant to our daily lives. In the final analysis, the study of history could benefit out daily lives together with companies and even the whole earth, and I could hardly image a more meaningful approach.
如果GRE这么点事都做不好,以后还做得了什么?

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History is a collection of our predecessors' experiences and worths studying. I fundamentally agree with the speaker that the study of history is valuable when it concerns about our day-to-day activities. However, the speaker's statement is rather shallow that studying history would benefit not only us individuals but also companies and even the whole earth.
(恩?貌似有歧义。就是说不只造福个人还造福全人类。。。题目理解偏差了!)

The study of history provides us of objectives and propels us towards the way to success. A student inspired by the feat of the famous explorer Columbus is likely to be interested in the fields of study relevant to exploring, and may finally pursue a career in oceanography, astronomy or geology. This decision can in turn affect the student's daily life in school and beyond. From another perspective, a depressed person can also be inspired by studying history, for he could read about the achivements attained by past people. They have succeeded, and why not have a try? After asking himself this question, his confidence is reassured and the study of history is now propelling him towards his way to success. As we can see, by learning about grand accomplishments in the past can we clarify our objectives and walk through difficulties in our daily lives.


However, the benefit of studying of history exceeds the realm of daily lives, and could be adopted in decisions in companies. On one hand, a company with more tactics and experiences is more likely to survive in the fierce and complex competition nowadays. Company managers keep attention on previously proven efficient techniques and adopt them. Moreover, some even refer the ancient Chinese book "The Art of War" for inspirations of effective and efficient operation and countermeasures in competition with other companies. On the other, the operation of a company requires not only efficient techniques but also the awareness of past failure. The financial crisis in 2008 caused by the seemingly profitable Financial Derivatives sweeps down series of companies over the world. The later companies are sure to learn this lesson and would not be credulous of the promised profit of Financial Derivatives. In this way, history could direct the way of operation of companies, and could serve as lessons for long-time development.

Moreover, the study of history is of crucial importance for long-time interest of us human kind and the environment protection of the whole earth. The World War I and World War II has brought forth millions of deaths and unmeasurable miser. These catastrophies in history warn us that we must seek for other moderate methods to resolve conflicts, because no one would like to suffer a world war again. The history thus stresses the responsibility for peace in all countries and consequently plays an important role in assuring the long-time happiness of human kind. Meanwhile, there are times that science, as a two-edged weapon, did great harm on our environment. Looking back to the past can we learn valuable lessons that what would happlen if no proper measures were taken. The nuclear accidents at Chernobyl and Tree Mile have been studied to make sure that the same accident would not happen again. The ozone hole in Antarctic makes people aware of the potential danger of Freon and urges people to find a substitution. The photochemical smog which killed thousands in the Europe put people into consideration of sustainable development. All these examples point to the same fact that the study of history is beneficiary to the world not only for daily lives of ourselves but also for our offsprings.

In sum, the speaker's point is biased that he fails to recognize the vast beneficiary of studying history that are not directly relevant to our daily lives. In the final analysis, the study of history could benefit out daily lives together with companies and even the whole earth, and I could hardly image a more meaningful approach.

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