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2010年8月23日综合写作

TPO6

The reading material mentions three reasonsfor why online encyclopedias are inferior to traditional, printed ones. In thelecture, the professor disputes these reasons respectively.

In the first place, the passage states thatthe contributors of an online encyclopedia usually lack the academic backgroundto compose credential entries, so mistakes are normal practices. However, theprofessor points out that traditional encyclopedias are not only can avoidmaking mistakes, but also taking decades to correct them. Even though onlineones would have errors, it just takes relatively short time for a community tocorrect them.

Additionally, the professor refutes thestatement in the passage that people can easily tamper with the online encyclopedia,even if it is correct at the first place. She mentions two strategies to counterthis potential danger: setting crucial fact of the entries to “read only”status and hiring specific people to monitor all the changes. Using thesemethods, online encyclopedia can effectively prevent malicious actions towardit.

Finally, the professor argues that onlineencyclopedias can reflect people’s interest, which challenges the third pointof the passage concerning the problem of contents of the communalencyclopedias. The professor said that traditional encyclopedias have solimited space that it needs compilers to select contents. And in this manner,these encyclopedias cannot truly reflect people’s interests. However, onlineones do not have this drawback; it can accommodate various topics and contents.

In sum, the professor doubts all threereasons the passage provided, and maintains that the communal encyclopediashave advantages that traditional ones do not possess.

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The reading material mentions three reasons for why online encyclopedias are inferior to traditional, printed ones. In the lecture, the professor disputes these reasons respectively/accordingly.- ~; ^7 q% H) ~" q5 h& J- A

In the first place, the passage states that the contributors of an online encyclopedia usually lack the academic back ground to compose credential entries, so mistakes are normal practices. However, the professor points out that traditional encyclopedias can not only avoid making mistakes, but also require decades to correct them.(此处应该用让步状语从句(你本身not only...but also里面的谓语也用错啦),不是递进从句啊..可以考虑改成:However, even though traditional encyclopedias may contain less mistakes, the professor points out that they require more time to be modified.) Even though(呃...才发现这里又有even though,略显重复,despite能加从句么?) online ones would/may have errors, it just takes relatively short time for a community to correct them.

Additionally, the professor refutes the statement in the passage that people can easily tamper with the online encyclopedia,even if it is correct(考虑换个词,accurate/right) at the first place. She mentions two strategies to counter this potential danger: setting crucial fact of the entries to “read only” status and hiring specific people to monitor all the changes. Using these methods, online encyclopedia can effectively prevent malicious actions toward it.

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Finally, the professor argues that online encyclopedias can reflect people’s interest, which challenges the third point of the passage concerning the problem of contents of the communal encyclopedias. The professor said that traditional encyclopedias have so limited space that it needs compilers to select contents. And in this manner,these encyclopedias cannot truly reflect people’s interests. However, onlineones do not have this drawback; it can accommodate various topics and contents.

In sum, the professor doubts all three reasons the passage provided, and maintains that the communal encyclopedias have advantages that traditional ones do not possess.

写的真好...学习学习...词汇很华丽,句子很高端,结构很清晰,无懈可击啊！我要向你学习!MARKED~~

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1# SilentScorpius

The reading material mentions three reasonsfor why online encyclopedias are inferior to traditional, printed ones. In thelecture, the professor disputes these reasons respectively.# {' l8 ?6 e: W! C

排版稍微注意下~开头很明确~

In the first place, the passage states that the contributors of an online encyclopedia usually lack the academic backgroundto compose credential entries, so mistakes are normal practices. However, theprofessor points out the fact that traditional encyclopedias are not only can avoidmaking mistakes, but also taking decades to correct them. Even though onlineones would (maybe) have errors, it just takes relatively short time for a community tocorrect them. : H& P4 S4 s4 s1 t$ p! N: s0 B8 s

Additionally, the professor refutes thestatement in the passage that people can easily tamper with the online encyclopedia,even if it is correct at the first place. She mentions two strategies to counterthis potential danger: setting crucial fact of the entries to “read only”status and hiring specific people to monitor all the changes. Using thesemethods, online encyclopedia can effectively prevent malicious actions towardit.! |6 L5 R/ k7 I2 V; ]/ Y2 q

' s4 d3 u) X: D- x. Q) U2 jFinally, the professor argues that onlineencyclopedias can reflect people’s interest, which challenges the third pointof the passage concerning the problem of contents of the communalencyclopedias. The professor said that traditional encyclopedias have solimited space that it needs compilers to select contents. And in this manner,these encyclopedias cannot truly reflect people’s interests. However, onlineones do not have this drawback; it can accommodate various topics and contents.8 T$ `  a, Z- |) U' X( i* ]7 y


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模板~~套得不错，逻辑清晰~
继续保持~

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8.24 独立写作

（09.01.23 NA） Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people should try several different jobs before they take a long term career.

I completely agree with the statement that young people should take several jobs before they commit to a particular one, because as youth, they may not have a clear thought about their career, and experiences from various specialities can beneficial their career lives.

Admittedly, devoting to one job from the beginning have certain advantages, such as matering special knowledge quickly, maintaining a stable social network, and even getting a promotion fast. However, there are inevitable drawbacks we can never ignore.

In the first place, experience from various jobs may shape a wonderful career. For instance, working as a reporter can give an excellent chance to take to different people, therefore one would gain communication skills; experience from teaching could give one valuable experience about how to present an idea transparently and convincingly. All these experiences would assist one who want to be a marketing manager. Therefore, taking different jobs could give one precious experence that can greatly benefit one’s future career.

In addition, nowadays we live in a world which provides enormous opportunities. When someone graduates for department of electronic engeneering, he can choose to be a engeneer of course, or attend a web design company. Chooses are available. However, there is a question that which job should be the one that we can devote a life in it. Hard to say, especially for younth. Since they are just stepping into the society, maybe they have clear thoughts once then, but when they try jobs, which they were longing for, they would feel disappointed. That is the gap between the ideal and reality. Thus, only through trying several jobs can a person find one that truly suits him.

In sum, experience acquired from different jobs can give a young people an invaluable lesson for future career. And choose about career is diffcult to make, it is desirable to taste various ones and finally find one that can be devoted to it in a life time.

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4# SilentScorpius
I completely agree with the statement that young people should take several jobs before they commit to a particular one, because as youth, they may not have a clear thought about their career, and experiences from various specialities can beneficial（benefit） their career lives.


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Admittedly, devoting to one job from the beginning have certain advantages, such as matering special knowledge quickly, maintaining a stable social network, and even getting a promotion fast. However, there are inevitable drawbacks we can never ignore.) H4 [6 {. O- Q/ R; l$ l1 [

In the first place, experience from various jobs may shape a wonderful career（感觉怪怪的，总觉得有点chinglish 也可能是我平常积累的少？ 如果不是很确定，觉得不要冒险）. For instance, working as a reporter can give an excellent chance to take（这两个词多余） to different people, therefore one would gain communication skills; experience from teaching could give one valuable experience about how to present an idea transparently and convincingly（表达觉得有些奇怪，换成clearly 也许比较好）. All these experiences would assist one who want （wants）to be a marketing manager. Therefore, taking different jobs could give one precious experence（experience）that（改成which） can greatly benefit one’s future career.& C0 d4 k' t# M
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In addition, nowadays we live in a world which provides enormous opportunities. When someone graduates for department of electronic engeneering（engineering）， he can choose to be a engeneer （engineer）of course, or attend a web design company. Chooses are available. However, there is a question that which job should be the one that we can devote a life in it（in改成to）. Hard to say, especially for younth.（这句话缺乏主语，应该是It is hard to say, ……但是我觉得这样子表达会不会太中国化， it is hard to say, especially for the youh, that everything is possible） Since they are just stepping into the society, maybe they have clear thoughts once then, but when they try jobs(口语化了), which they were longing for, they would feel disappointed. That is the gap between the ideal and reality（好实用的句子，赞）. Thus, only through trying several jobs can a person find one that truly suits him.


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In sum, experience acquired from different jobs can give a （a 删掉）young people an invaluable lesson for future career. And choose （choices）about career is（are） diffcult（拼写错误difficult） to make, it is desirable to taste various ones and finally find one that can be devoted to it in（for） a life time.

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4# SilentScorpius