Issue7 第6篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！

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Issue7  第7篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
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从2005年6月15日19时31分到2005年6月15日20时45分
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The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records.
不完全同意
数码媒体有它的好处，可以提供生动翔实的记录，包括声音等。
但是数码也有其缺点，首先它无法给观众提供想象的空间，而这对于文学literature 来说重要。
不是在所有事情发生时都会有video camrea在现场
Video camera对历史的场景记录无能为力。
所以就目前来看，video 和 writen record两者都是很重要的。
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Although the video camera provides an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life not only for the nowadays persons but for our descendents, it is unfair to claim that the video has become a more important form of documentation than written records after shortcomings of it are revealed by a close scrutiny.

No one is able to deny that video camera, combining the image and sound together, is one kind of great innovations of recording contemporary life. Video documents could provide people vivid and authentic description of what has happened; thus be able to put the audiences into the real scenario of the past events. It will provide, not only for us ourselves but for our descendents, the most reliable information of the history. Consider, for instance, ten years ago on my birthday party, my parents filmed the process of the party, so I could review the happiness of that time thanks to the result of the advanced technology. In short, the video camera serves as an innovative form of documentation.

On the other hand, there are several inherent foibles of this form of documentation. Firstly, the vivid video might fail to provide as much imagination as written records could, which is very important under some circumstances, especially literary works such as fictions and poetry. The video documentation provides us the authentic events; however it is too real to the literary works, which require the imagination of readers. As a famous writer once said (as I paraphrased) "different people have different opinion of the same fictions ". As a result, it is not hard for us to understand the result of a recent survey, conducted by the Chinese Social Academy, which shows that nearly 66% percent of respondents are not satisfied with the new teleplay transcribed from a famous fiction in China.

Secondly, unlike pens and notebooks, the video camera, at least now, is not easy to carry; thus it can not ensure that people could use video camera to record every important event. Common sense tells us that it is not possible for people to carry the camera everyday no matter where he or go. However you may not foresee when and where a valuable event will happen, so it is almost impossible to record everything in video. On the contrary, pens and notebooks may be more accessible than cameras when urgency happens. Even if there is no pen and notebooks at hand at all, people could remember it and write it afterwards which is impossible for a video documentation.

Thirdly, there are a great number of historical records which are documented as written records that are hard to convey to video documents. Prior to the 20th century, there was also a lot of historic information, almost all of whom are written records. It is not practical or not economical to convey them all to the video camera.

In sum, although the video camera provides us an innovative alternative for documentation, it is gratuitous to claim that it is more important than written records as both media own advantages and disadvantages. It is more sensible for us to combine them together since none of them could replace each other.

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The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records.
提纲：不完全同意。
1、数码媒体有它的好处，可以提供生动翔实的记录，包括声音等。
2、但是数码也有其缺点，首先它无法给观众提供想象的空间，而这对于文学literature 来说重要。
3、不是在所有事情发生时都会有video camera在现场。Video camera对历史的场景记录无能为力。
4、所以就目前来看，video 和 written record两者都是很重要的。

Although the video camera provides an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life not only for the nowadays persons [present people] but [also] for our descendents, it is unfair to claim that the video has become a more important form of documentation than written records after shortcomings of it are revealed by a close scrutiny. [开头提出观点很明确。]

No one is able to deny that video camera, combining the image and sound together, is one kind of great innovations of recording contemporary life. Video documents could provide people vivid and authentic description of what has happened; thus be able to put the audiences into the real scenario of the past events. It will provide, not only for us ourselves but [also] for our descendents, the most reliable information of the history. Consider, for instance, ten years ago on my birthday party, my parents filmed the process of the party, so I could review the happiness of that time thanks to the result of the advanced technology. [这里举身边的例子，很贴切。] In short, the video camera serves as an innovative form of documentation.

On the other hand, there are several inherent foibles of this form of documentation. [就这句话以及下面的内容来看，感觉改写一下，然后合并到上一段末会更好。] Firstly, the vivid video might fail to provide as much imagination as written records could, which is very important under some circumstances, especially [when reading] literary works such as fictions and poetry. The video documentation provides us the authentic events; however it is too real to the literary works, which require the imagination of readers. As a famous writer once said (as I paraphrased) "different people have different opinion of the same fictions ". As a result, it is not hard for us to understand the result of a recent survey, conducted by the Chinese Social Academy, which shows that nearly 66% percent of respondents are not satisfied with the new teleplay transcribed from a famous fiction in China. [感觉这段后面没有和开头处所提到的“imagination”很好地联系上。只是指出了video camera有缺陷，不能带给观众以想象力；但是却没有明确地指出written form，或者更确切的，文学作品是如何体现出想象力来的。而结尾处的survey也只是说了观众对于一本由小说改编的电影不满意。那么是如何不满意呢？怎么样和imagination联系起来呢？这些都可以深入下去。]

Secondly, unlike pens and notebooks, the video camera, at least now, is not easy to carry; thus it cannot ensure that people could use video camera to record every important event. Common sense tells us that it is not possible for people to carry the camera everyday no matter where he or go. However you may not foresee when and where a valuable event will happen, so it is almost impossible to record everything in video. On the contrary, pens and notebooks may be more accessible than cameras when urgency happens. Even if there is no pen and notebooks at hand at all, people could remember it and write it afterwards which is impossible for a video documentation.

Thirdly, there are a great number of historical records which are documented as written records that are hard to convey [be converted] to video documents. Prior to the 20th century, there was also a lot of historic information, almost all of whom are written records [改写了一下：which was in the written form]. It is not practical or not economical to convey them all to the video camera. [这里三段讲三个缺点，段落结构安排地不错。]

In sum, although the video camera provides us an innovative alternative for documentation, it is gratuitous to claim that it is more important than written records as both media own advantages and disadvantages. It is more sensible for us to combine them together since none of them could replace each other. [结尾中规中矩。]