issue157 V6 同主题12期 改过后的，请大家多提意见（16号就要考了）

GladysryUID：198609

这也是3号写的一篇，是同主题的内容。当时写着觉得有些绕，后来自己又改了一些，觉得似乎比以前清楚，但是感觉很晕，希望战友们多来批一下，我这篇一休的致命点在何处。谢谢~
ps：同主题的哈，写过的大家都讨论一下好么？字放这么大，为方便大家看的，可以不用盖原文，提出自己的想法也很欢迎~

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There is no such thing as purely objective observation. All observation is subjective; it is always guided by the observer's expectations or desires.

提纲：
1，承认纯粹客观的观察不存在；
2，但是说所有的观察都是主观的太绝对。要分情况来看。
3，对……是主观的，（举例）
4，对有大家认同的准则的领域，观察是客观的（举例）
5，总结。
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Everyday, we observe the world with our eyes and unconsciously make our own judgment for them. Descriptions from different individuals can hardly be the same. Then is observation, whether the action itself or the result of it objective or subjective? From my point of view, purely objective observation does not exist, but the assertion that all observation is guided by the observer's expectations or desires and thus subjective is too arbitrary.

Admittedly, purely objective observation does not exist in the world, no matter from what condition. First we can take a look at the action "observation", it is completed by observers, different observer must have different way to observe certain things thereby the result of the observation must be influenced by certain observer's perspective due to various experiences, habits and characters. What's more, if we look further into the observer's description about his or her observation, no matter how allegiant the observer's attitude toward the trueness, his or her certain characteristics on describing them will definitely vary a lot. Even with highly developed machines, the operation of the observer can have some effect on the observation itself. Therefore, due to it is human who observe certain thing and express them to the world rather than things themselves, there is not an observation can be purely objective.

However, if we get the statement that all observation will be subjective just because all observers will unconsciously or purposely have their own expectations and desires and routes to observe and judge the observation, it will be too haste and arbitrary. Because observation consists of both the behavior of observing and the result it can represent to others. Now that the result varies from situation to situation, whether the observation is subjective or not would undoubtedly varies.

In situations or areas where people's own feelings dominate the observation or some behavior itself is to express people's attitude toward the world, observations will be subjective because the origins of these observations are extremely subjective. For example, a politician's observation and the following judgment of it will absolutely reflect his or her own attitude towards it. In fact, from the very beginning, the observation is totally dominated by the politician's own political thinkings, whether for certain benefits or from unconsciously vocational analysis. Additionally in areas like art, artists' observations of the world could never be objective since it is the artists' spiritual root to observe everything in a freely subjective condition. Therefore when we observe the completed art, what we observe and feel could not the same as the natural one.

But in areas where cold numbers and truth agglomerate together to build a science and there are quite admissive standards for representing observations, observations are not likely to be affected by individual's subjections. Take biology for example, when researchers are doing experiments, all the statistics, all the phenomena, all the processes are observed and described in a scientific way rather than an individual's habit. Therefore the phenomenon or process itself just reveals what the truth goes rather than what the scientists have planned. What's more, with the development of technology, some accurate observations have already turned to machines' work and thus minimize the difference can be made by different people. So no matter how scientist deal with the observation, the final result will never be changed and and then be judged by other scientists in a scientific way. In a word, in realms where there is a standing criterion to judge everything, the observation could be objective because it reveals the truth.

To sum up, due to the observers' operations and attitudes, purely objective observation does not exist, but since whether the final results' departure from the natural condition or not rely on different situations, to judge all observations are subjective is not reasonable.

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-8-5 at 02:38 ]

11yvetteUID：2102418

呵呵,学习了一下

发现为什么会觉得很绕的原因了:
B1,先承认没有绝对客观的观察;        B2, 反过来说,没有绝对的客观并不意味者都是主观;
B3, 承认,在人文方面,观察是主观的;  B4, 但是(一个转折),在自然科学方面,观察是主观的.  

假设客观是(-),主观是(+):   那么这篇文章的各段的主体词大致是这样的:
否认绝对(-)——>否认全部都是(+)——>承认(+)——>承认(-)
感觉我自己也说不清了，反正的确很拗口。。。

建议将B2与B1合起来写，可以  on the one hand,。。。。; on the other hand,。。。这样来说，因为B2中有一些文字是反复炒，合起来也不会显得一个段落特别长，大致与B3B4的长度差不多。同时可以避免转折让步过多～

另外，B3，B4写得还是很好的，发现gladysry尤其擅长举有关生物的例子，赞～

[ Last edited by 11yvette on 2005-8-5 at 17:36 ]

namevainUID：208813

我回来了...好久不见阿
给你的文章提点建议~~~~
1. 在结构上，似乎第二段是论证主观性是不可避免的
   然后用第三段带领，分别在第4，5段落论证客观性的可能
   个人意见，既然如此，第3段应该对此有所介绍，起到逻辑上提挈一下的作用
   乍看上去，确实有一点乱，尤其是第三段，独立论证不明显
2.文中的句子衔接貌似有点问题，表达意思的时候不是非常的连贯，跳跃性比较强。建议注意一下句子的结构。最近看了很多北美范文，抛开晦涩的地方不谈，表意通顺是值得我们学习的~~~
3。我听一个比较牛的师弟说，文章不用担心写得过短，倒是写长了容易出问题，字数有500多就够了...只要明确提出论点，支持的足够好就行了...这一点你的文章一直不错的^_^
To Sum Up...最近有事一直没来，看到你进步so fast， congratulate一个...嫉妒ing~~

有空帮我评一下吧，谢谢了
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