Issue83 保护野生地区

bnugirlUID: 2103958

Issue83
提纲：
1．        保护野生地区具有生态价值
2．        保护野生地区具有经济价值（这两者并不矛盾）
3．        对于人及罕见的地方，鉴于其无可估量的潜在价值，更要进行保护
------题目------
Government should preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in their natural state, even though these areas are often extremely remote and thus accessible to only a few people.
------正文------
I strongly agree that government should spare no effort in preserving publicly owned wilderness area in their natural state, for the reason that the wild area does not only contribute to our ecosystem, but also have the economic value. Even these areas which are so extremely remote that we cannot find any ecological or economic benefit there today, we should also protect it.
   
    The wildness areas contribute to our society in two respects. First, the wild area plays an important role in the balance of the earth ecosystem. One important factor of the ecosystem is the species diversity. The wildness areas are seldom impacted by human beings; their sole evolutions endow themselves with specific species which are essential in keeping the ecosystem stable. But as human's power becomes everywhere, these abundant species are in danger unless we preserve these public owned wildness areas. An example is the Madikwe Game Reserve in South Africa. Before the preservation, the wild dog faced with extinction due to the destroy of the natural environment and only exist in Madikwe Game Reserve. But situations have changed after the protection to the reserve, the number of the wild dog increases dramatically and even other districts are reported to have found the valuable wild dog. As a result of the workers' effort, the Madikwe Game Reserve is now the best place to view the Big Five of Africa.Assuming that the species in the reserve were not well preserved, the ecosystem may not be so prosperous today and may endanger our human’s life.  In short, preserving the species in the wildness area is preserving the ecosystem, which includes our human beings.

    Second, the wildness areas are valuable resources for that they can improve our economy. Not only the rare species in the preserve, but also the ecosystem all together appeals visitor to come and contribute to the development of the economy. Also take the Madikwe Game Reserve for example. It was once an unknown desert land. But after following some ecologists' advices, the government turned it to be the best place for wild animals. Since the visitors vary from the South Africa citizens to international tourists, the local residents build a lot of luxury hotels and restaurants to meet the demands. As a result, the travel industry provides many jobs for the locals and more hope for the poor. From this example, we can found that the wildness areas also have economic values. Moreover, the ecological value and the economic one are not against with each other, the government can make a comprehensive plan to attain the two goals which are beneficial not only to our contemporary society but also to our future. For these reasons, the government should spare no effort to preserve the wilderness areas in their natural state.

      Even when it comes to those extremely remote areas which are accessible to only a few people, the government also has the responsibility to protect them. Just because it is difficult for human beings to reach, the species in it should be very rare and its ecosystem is vulnerable to the outside's effect. We should be cautious when trying to approaching these areas, for the reason that one of our small behaviors such as throwing a cigarette may cause a disaster for them. Maybe it is hard for us to discover whatever ecological or economic value they have at present, their potential values is invaluable. Thus, the government should preserve these extremely remote areas for the long-term consideration.

     In sum, government should try its best to preserve public owned wilderness areas in their natural state, for these areas will bring about both ecological and economic values to our society. Moreover, even some areas are so extremely remote and could only be reach by a few people, the government should also protect them considering the potential values.

[ Last edited by bnugirl on 2005-8-5 at 13:02 ]

clearbabyUID: 2114410

I strongly agree that government should spare no effort in preserving publicly owned wilderness area in their natural state, for the reason that the wild area does not only contribute to our ecosystem, but also have the economic value. Even these areas which(where) are so extremely(so本身就表示程度了，这里extremely可以省掉了） remote that we cannot find any ecological or economic benefit there today, we should also protect it.（最后这一句不通，而且感觉有点罗嗦了。可以跟上句连起来，前句单数变复数，句号边逗号：although such areas where are extremely remote have not appeared their ecological and economic benefits today。）   
   
The wildness（wilderness） areas contribute to our society in two respects. First, the wild area plays an important role in the balance of（balancing） the earth ecosystem. One important factor of the ecosystem is the species diversity. The wildness areas are seldom impacted by human beings; their sole evolutions endow themselves with specific species which are essential in keeping the ecosystem stable. But as human's power becomes everywhere, these abundant species are in danger unless we preserve these public owned wildness areas.（既然说人迹罕至了，就不要再说人的因素了，可以直接引你下面的例子，说环境） An example is the Madikwe Game Reserve in South Africa. Before the preservation, the wild dog faced with extinction due to the destroy of the natural environment and only exist（existed） in Madikwe Game Reserve. But situations have changed after the protection to the reserve, the number of the wild dog increases dramatically and even other districts are reported to have found the valuable wild dog. As a result of the workers' effort, the Madikwe Game Reserve is now the best place to view the Big Five of Africa.Assuming that the species in the reserve were not well preserved, the ecosystem may not be so prosperous today and may endanger our human’s life.  In short, preserving the species in the wildness area is preserving the ecosystem, which includes our human beings.（重复了，写成一句就行）
   
Second（sencondly）, the wildness areas are valuable resources for that they can improve our economy. Not only the rare species in the preserve, but also the ecosystem all together appeals visitor to come and contribute to the development of the economy. Also take the Madikwe Game Reserve for example. It was once an unknown desert land. But after following some ecologists' advices, the government turned it to be the best place for wild animals. Since the visitors vary from the South Africa citizens to international tourists, the local residents build a lot of luxury hotels and restaurants to meet the demands. As a result, the travel industry provides many jobs for the locals and more hope for the poor. From this example, we can found that the wildness areas also have economic values. Moreover, the ecological value and the economic one are not against with each other, the government can make a comprehensive plan to attain the two goals which are beneficial not only to our contemporary society but also to our future. For these reasons, the government should spare no effort to preserve the wilderness areas in their natural state.
怎么说呢，你这段的TS感觉说的不是wilderness area，而是undeveloped area，MW上对wilderness area的解释是an often large tract of public land maintained essentially in its natural state and protected against introduction of intrusive artifacts (as roads and buildings)，所以感觉你的TS有点偏了。     

Even when it comes to those extremely remote areas which are accessible to only a few people, the government also has the responsibility to protect them. Just because it is difficult for human beings to reach, the species in it should be very rare （这个犯了argu里的错误，假性因果）and its ecosystem is vulnerable to the outside's effect（why？）. We should be cautious when trying to approaching these areas, for the reason that one of our small behaviors such as throwing a cigarette may cause a disaster for them.（写这句是什么意思啊？） Maybe it is hard for us to discover whatever ecological or economic value they have at present, their potential values is invaluable（只是在说结果，而没有论证）. Thus, the government should preserve these extremely remote areas for the long-term consideration.

     In sum, government should try its best to preserve public owned wilderness areas in their natural state, for these areas will bring about（bring） both ecological and economic values to our society. Moreover, even some areas are so extremely remote and could only be reach by a few people, the government should also protect them considering the potential values.（这句有点别扭，意思好象也不大对）

clearbabyUID: 2114410

整体来说，思路很清晰，但你的切入点不够准确，应该再仔细读读题目
再就是各段顶格写就好了

我的同主题，请指教啦
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D1