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Issue150:
Because of television and worldwide computer connections, people can now become familiar with a great many places that they have never visited. As a result, tourism will soon become obsolete.

The speaker asserts that the television and computer will soon make tourism obsolete because they can provide information so that people do not need tourism any longer. A close scrutiny reveals that such assertion ignore the value of tourism beyond getting information. In fact, information provided by television and computers attracts more people to have tourism.

First, people tour not only because they want to be familiar with the certain place, instead, they want to having experience, enjoying living in fresh air and beautiful forests, or participating the festivals or parties with local people. or chatting with local people to know their fascinating culture. We often see people go to Alps in winter, skiing along the narrow roads in white world, tasting the unique experience they have never had before. In other cases, many people go to Yunnan to take part in their Water-splashing Festival, experiencing the interesting party in which people splash water to each other. It is obviously that we cannot achieve these purposes merely through television or computer.

In addition, tourism is a way for people to “get away” from their familiar surroundings. It is just like people will have dinner at restaurants instead of eating at home, or people will go to cinema rather than seeing movie in their own room. It is a human need for variety and exploration and tour provides us such chance. Television and computer can only provide information such as pictures of the view, or introduction to culture and customs which can merely give us some knowledge far from familiarity. Therefore, how can we satisfy our purpose of experiencing new surroundings, and how can we enjoy the different lives only sitting before a cool machine? Thus, to satisfied need for various lives, tourism will continue to thrive even we can get more information through television and computers.

On the other hand, instead of making tourism obsolete, the information provided by television and computer will attract more people to take tourism and make tourism more convenient than ever before. The introduction on the television can raise people's curiosities. It is entirely possible that a man decide to take a tour to Egypt because he was attracted by the mystery of the pyramid through a report of tourism. Besides, the information often contains the introduction of local traffic, hotel, restaurant and other things which provide a lot of convenience. Thus, these information people getting through television and computer can promote tourism rather than make it obsolete.

Admittedly, television and computer connection will reduce some people travel for certain purpose other than tourism. For instance, those who having business in other countries can reduce their travels by solving the problems through internet, or those who merely collect some information what can find on internet also can save great amounts of time and energy.

In sum, the television and computer connection really can provide us a lot of information about many places, however, these information will not make tourism obsolete, because the purpose of tourism is not simply to obtain information, besides, people take tourism for experience and the need of altering conditions. To the country, tourism was promoted by the information which attracts people and make tourism more convenient

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The speaker asserts that the television and computer will soon make tourism obsolete because they can provide information so that people do not need tourism any longer. A close scrutiny reveals that such assertion ignore (overlook/neglect, ignore是带感情色彩的词最好不用，新东方老师语) the value of tourism beyond getting information. In fact, information provided by television and computers attracts more people to have tourism.

First, people tour not only because they want to be familiar with the certain place, instead, they want to having experience, enjoying living in fresh air and beautiful forests, or participating the festivals or parties with local people, or chatting with local people to know their fascinating culture. We often see people go to Alps in winter, skiing along the narrow roads in white world, tasting the unique experience they have never had before. In other cases, many people go to Yunnan to take part in their Water-splashing Festival, experiencing the interesting party in which people splash water to each other. It is obviously that we cannot achieve these purposes merely through television or computer.

In addition, tourism is a way for people to “get away” from their familiar surroundings. It is just like people will have dinner at restaurants instead of eating at home, or people will go to cinema rather than seeing movie in their own room. It is due to (a) human needs for varieties and explorations, and tour provides us such chance. Television and computer can only provide information such as pictures of the view, or introduction to culture and customs which can merely give us some knowledge far from familiarity. Therefore, how can we satisfy our purposes of experiencing new surroundings? (And how) Can we enjoy the different lives only by sitting before a cool machine? (两个问句应该语气不一样吧，前一个问怎么样？后一个是反问，难道我们只能…)Thus, to satisfied (satisfy) needs for various lives, tourism will continue to thrive even we can get more information through television and computers.

On the other hand, instead of making tourism obsolete, the information provided by television and computer will attract more people to take tourism and make tourism more convenient than ever before. The introduction on the television can raise people's curiosities. It is entirely possible that a man decide to take a tour to Egypt because he was attracted by the mystery of the pyramid through a report of tourism. Besides, the information often contains the introduction of local traffic, hotel, restaurant and other things which provide a lot of convenience. Thus, these information people getting through television and computer can promote tourism rather than make it obsolete.

Admittedly, television and computer connection will reduce some people travel for certain purpose other than tourism. For instance, those who having business in other countries can reduce their travels by solving the problems through internet, or those who merely collect some information what can find (which can be found) on internet also can cancel their travels and save great amounts of time and energy.

In sum, the television and computer connection really can provide us a lot of information about many places, however, these (such) information will not make tourism obsolete, because the purpose of tourism is not simply to obtain information, besides, people take tourism for experience and the need of altering conditions. To the country, tourism was (will be) promoted by the information which attracts people (and make tourism more convenient省掉吧？罗嗦了)

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