issue41 让我写的好痛苦，V6，请大家帮忙看看

nickaaronleeUID: 183378

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Such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science.
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Nonmainsteam areas such as astrology and fortune-telling came into existence since ancient times. It it true that they played a vital roll in the past. However, in my opinion, with the development of modern science, the mainstream areas play a more vital role than the nonmainstream areas.

First of all, people, in the ancient times, were satisfied by nonmainstream areas to meet their needs due to the limitation of science and nonmainstream areas such as astrology did have its effects on some cultures. Astrology, knowledge of apparent positions and celestial bodies, is held to be useful in understanding and interpreting the reality and human existence on earth. It was believed that the positions of celestial bodies influenced and correlated people's personality and important traits in their lives. People, in the past, held this belief in that they did not have a thorough understanding of the astronomy. In fact, astrology is not a science, but a intuitive discipline. Moreover, it is true that astrology had some effects on the western culture. For example, the word influenza was called by doctors because they considered it to be caused unfavorable planetary influences. Also the sevens days of a week was named by the traits of planets. Thus, people, in the past, required needs from nonmainstream areas due to their little understanding of the nature. Meanwhile, nonmainstream areas such as astrology have their positive effects on some cultures.

Furthermore, in the present, people began to realize the limitation of nonmainstream areas and the prediction is more suitable for the objective world. With the development of science, people began to know the world with thorough comprehension. And they realized that the nonmainstream areas such as fortune-telling are not creditable. For instance, fortune-telling, a practice of predicting future, is usually for commercial aim. Nowadays, there are a lot of websites or magazines about fortune-telling. They always use vague terms and tell people what they wish to hear, also their statements can be equally applied to several people. The fundamental of fortune-telling's goal is to make money, instead of predicting people's future. Moreover, scientists regard fortune-telling as pseudoscience. Actually, the stuff human can predict is usually the objective world rather than human beings themselves. Take weather forecast as an example. With the modern technology, people can foresee the weather in the future with solid evidence. However, there is hardly any convictive evidence to predict a person's future. Therefore, with the development of science, people, in the present, begin to understand the essence of nonmainstream areas.

Finally, as a matter of fact, in contemporary society, mainstream areas play a vital role in satisfying human needs. With the progress of modern science, there are a lot technological innovations accessible for people, which have improved human's living standards a lot. For instance, different people in different nations can have the same meeting instantaneously through internet. The assemble line have increased the production significantly. People can go to anywhere by air, ship or train. All these have been achieved by the technological innovations based on science. In addition, the mainstream areas have substituted nonmainstream ones to help people to explore the unknown world. Take astronomy as an example. Science has enabled people to know much more about the outer space than before. NASA has launched several satellites to explore the Mar and other planets. All these contributions will provide people correct and premise understanding of the celestial bodies rather than astrology. Hence, mainstream areas play a more vital role in meeting human needs than nonmainstream ones in the modern time.

To sum up, due to limitation of science, nonmainstream areas served as prophet for people in the past. Nevertheless, in the present, mainstream areas play a vital role in satisfying human needs on the basis of modern science and technological innovations.

mkb57288UID: 2105771

我来，正好天下午写了同一篇

mrealUID: 201732

我也写过，来看看~

mrealUID: 201732

1，过去人们因为主流科技的落后而更加青睐非主流内容，而且有些非主流内容促进文化发展。
2，随着科技的发展，人们开始认识到非主流内容的本质和其局限性。
3，现代社会主流文化代替非主流帮助人们了解未知世界。

我觉得文章的结构还是很好的，但是感觉事例的选择和表述不太好，比如b3说科技的那部分，没说清楚科学怎么就代替非主流了。应该可以改进一下的~讨论讨论哈！

mkb57288UID: 2105771

Nonmainsteam areas such as astrology and fortune-telling came into existence since ancient times. It it true that they played a vital roll in the past（题目好像说的是现状，最好就题目回应）. However, in my opinion, with the development of modern science, the mainstream areas play a more vital role than the nonmainstream areas.

First of all, people, in the ancient times, were satisfied by nonmainstream areas to meet their needs due to the limitation of science and nonmainstream areas such as astrology did have its effects on some cultures. Astrology, knowledge of apparent positions and celestial bodies, is held to be useful in understanding and interpreting the reality and human existence on earth（我明白你想表达的意思但这么写太模糊了,最好改一下）. It was believed that the positions of celestial bodies influenced and correlated people's personality and important traits in their lives.（这么解释一下好多了） People, in the past, held this belief in that they did not have a thorough understanding of the astronomy. In fact, astrology is not a science, but a intuitive（这个说法不确定） discipline. Moreover, it is true that astrology had some effects on the western culture. For example, the word influenza was called by doctors because they considered it to be caused unfavorable planetary influences. Also the sevens days of a week was named by the traits of planets. Thus, people, in the past, required needs from nonmainstream areas due to their little understanding of the nature. Meanwhile, nonmainstream areas such as astrology have their positive effects on some cultures.（个人认为题目实际有几层，什么问题主流科学解决不了，为什么主流科学解决不了非主流能解决的问题，和这一情况是否会改变，而上面这一段都是在讲以前非主流科学的作用--那时候主流科学不存在，没有能够到达题目的核心部分）

Furthermore, in the present, people began to realize the limitation of nonmainstream areas and the prediction is more suitable for the objective world. （这一段感觉和题目的对应有一点远但是还相关）With the development of science, people began to know the world with thorough comprehension. And they realized that the nonmainstream areas such as fortune-telling are not creditable. For instance, fortune-telling, a practice of predicting future, is usually for commercial aim. Nowadays, there are a lot of websites or magazines about fortune-telling. They always use vague terms and tell people what they wish to hear, also their statements can be equally applied to several people. The fundamental of fortune-telling's goal is to make money, instead of predicting people's future. Moreover, scientists regard fortune-telling as pseudoscience. Actually, the stuff human can predict is usually the objective world rather than human beings themselves. Take weather forecast as an example. With the modern technology, people can foresee the weather in the future with solid evidence. However, there is hardly any convictive evidence to predict a person's future. Therefore, with the development of science, people, in the present, begin to understand the essence of nonmainstream areas.

Finally, as a matter of fact, in contemporary society, mainstream areas play a vital role in satisfying human needs. With the progress of modern science, there are a lot technological innovations accessible for people, which have improved human's living standards a lot. For instance, different people in different nations can have the same meeting instantaneously through internet. （个人认为这个点，关键要写出一个replace才能和题目观点扣起来）The assemble line have increased the production significantly. People can go to anywhere by air, ship or train. All these have been achieved by the technological innovations based on science. In addition, the mainstream areas have substituted （对，就这样）nonmainstream ones to help people to explore the unknown world. Take astronomy as an example. Science has enabled people to know much more about the outer space than before. NASA has launched several satellites to explore the Mar and other planets. All these contributions will provide people correct and premise understanding of the celestial bodies rather than astrology. Hence, mainstream areas play a more vital role in meeting human needs than nonmainstream ones in the modern time.

To sum up, due to limitation of science, nonmainstream areas served as prophet for people in the past. Nevertheless, in the present, mainstream areas play a vital role in satisfying human needs on the basis of modern science and technological innovations.
这篇确实比较难，感觉主要问题在B2
下面是我的同主题，欢迎讨论
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nickaaronleeUID: 183378

我觉得文章的结构还是很好的，但是感觉事例的选择和表述不太好，比如b3说科技的那部分，没说清楚科学怎么就代替非主流了。

mreal地分析概括能力好强啊，赞：）对于这个我也比较困惑，找不出很合适的例子说明。只好从科学能够更加满足人们的需要来说了。

林森森UID: 163922

Nonmainstream areas such as astrology and fortune-telling came into existence since ancient times. It it (was)true that they played a vital roll in the past. However, in my opinion, with the development of modern science, the mainstream areas play a more vital role than the nonmainstream areas.(支持正方观点)

First of all, people, in the(可删) ancient times, were satisfied by nonmainstream areas to meet their needs due to the limitation of science and nonmainstream areas such as astrology which did have its effects on some cultures. Astrology, knowledge of(as) apparent positions and celestial bodies(天体?呵呵 不知道哦), is held to be useful in understanding and interpreting the reality and human existence on earth. It was believed that the positions of celestial bodies influenced and correlated people's personality and important traits in their lives. People, in the past, held this belief in(删) that they did not have a thorough understanding of the astronomy. In fact, astrology is not a (删)science, but a intuitive discipline. Moreover, it is true that astrology had some effects on the western culture. For example, the word influenza was called by doctors because they considered it to be caused unfavorable planetary influences. Also the sevens days of a week was named by the traits of planets. Thus, people, in the past, required needs from nonmainstream areas due to their little understanding of the nature. Meanwhile, nonmainstream areas such as astrology have their positive effects on some cultures.  (既然支持正方为什么还要用这么大一段说明非主流方面的积极作用呢  要不你就把TS改成中立的?)
Furthermore, in the present, people began (现在时)to realize the limitation of nonmainstream areas and the prediction is more suitable for the objective world. With the development of science, people began to know the world with thorough comprehension. And they realized that the nonmainstream areas such as fortune-telling are not creditable. For instance, fortune-telling, a practice of predicting future, is usually for commercial aim. (这种名词解释型句式还是别多用啊 是童老师的学生吧  呵呵?)  Nowadays, there are a lot of websites or magazines about fortune-telling. They always use vague terms and tell people what they wish to hear, also their statements can be equally applied to several people. The fundamental of fortune-telling's goal (the fundamental goal of...)is to make money, instead of predicting people's future. Moreover, scientists regard fortune-telling as pseudoscience. Actually, the stuff human can predict is usually the objective world rather than human beings themselves. Take weather forecast as an (for)example. With the modern technology, people can foresee the weather in the future with solid evidence. However, there is hardly any convictive evidence to predict a person's future. Therefore, with the development of science, people, in the present, begin to understand the essence of nonmainstream areas.(此句可以写得自然一点 有点晦涩了哦)
Finally, as a matter of fact, in contemporary society, mainstream areas play a vital role in satisfying human needs. With the progress of modern science, there are a lot technological innovations accessible for people, which have improved human's living standards a lot. For instance, different people in different nations can have the same meeting instantaneously through internet. The assemble line have increased the production significantly. People can go to anywhere by air, ship or train. All these have been achieved by the technological innovations based on science. (这个论据显得牵强了点 与论点扯远了啊  要证明认识未知世界的话就要尽量对比这是非主流所不能提供的 )In addition, the mainstream areas have substituted nonmainstream ones to help people to explore the unknown world. Take astronomy as an example. Science has enabled people to know much more about the outer space than before. NASA has launched several satellites to explore the Mar and other planets. All these contributions will provide people correct and premise understanding of the celestial bodies rather than astrology. Hence, mainstream areas play a more vital role in meeting human needs than nonmainstream ones in the modern time. (呵呵 觉得这段有点牵强 )

To sum up, due to the limitation of science, nonmainstream areas served as prophet for people in the past. Nevertheless, in the present, mainstream areas play a vital role in satisfying (meeting)human needs on the basis of modern science and technological innovations.  结尾很干净利落:)
你是在武汉学的么?  对了 我今天也写了这篇  帮忙拍拍哦 先谢谢拉!https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... type%26typeid%3D101

nickaaronleeUID: 183378

谢谢林森森 的批改，我是在上海学的，呵呵