issue208 寄托4人组 8.12作业

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Issue208  The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people.

分析：
1＋1 结构。两句构成因果关系。

观点：
同意

提纲：
1．        理论：外表反映了价值取向。然后举两个例子：
2．        民主社会: 个人的价值得以自由表达，所以衣着多丰富多彩
3．        集权社会：价值由上控制，并表现在衣着上，所以常单调一致。

Issue208  第3篇
------摘要------
作者：     共用时间：93分44秒     373 words
从2005年7月12日14时20分到2005年7月12日15时93分
------题目------
The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people.
------正文------
The speaker holds that one can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people since external appearance reveals internal attitudes; this is an idea I also agree with.

To begin with, people in many cultures have long found the correlation between appearance and inner characters. In the case of Peking opera, a Chinese mainstream art with a history of more than 300 years, actors always make up with strong colors on their faces so that the audience can easily figure out the main character of this role. White, for example, is the symbol of duplicity, while red loyalty and black courage. No doubt in reality it is not so easy at all to judge a person by the color of his/her face; yet this form of art actually reveals in an exaggerated way people's common belief that internal personality will get its expression through external look. This belief I hold to be reasonable, for the external look, dress, and act do give some indication about people's attitudes and a society's values. To better illustrate this, we can compare people' dressing between open societies and closed ones.

In an open society, such as the present United States and West European countries, we can see people dressing in whatever styles they like. Fashion shows in New York, Paris, London, and Milan always offer a great number of new styles and never cease attracting people’s attention. Why so many people in western countries care about new and distinctive styles of clothing? Because they care about fashions not only for fashions’ sake but also in order to establish their own characters: they want to be different; they want to be themselves. For many people, characteristic wearing could easily distinguish themselves from others and shows their own personalities; while it would be quite awkward, for example, for two people sitting in the same room and wearing clothes of the same style, except that they want to show their unity intentionally or it is out of the demand of their job. It is essentially this personality pursuit that underlies the phenomenon of various dressing. On the other hand, a deeper idea of democratic societies can be also reflected, i.e., individuals' choices and values should be respected. People could choose their clothing style only when the basic rights to freely determine one’s own life and freely express one’s own taste could be warranted. And this is satisfied in democratic societies, where no authority can interrupt one's personal preference as long as it is not out of law's permission. From people’s dressing, therefore, we can not only find people’s character, but also find the basic value buried in the society.

When it comes to closed societies, e.g., North Korea and China before 1978, the situation is totally different. During the Cultural Revolution, almost every Chinese people dressed only in three colors: green, grey, and blue, with uniform designing and even the same kind of cloth. Seldom does a girl wear short skirt or a young man wear jeans, for both forms have been recognized as unsuitable in that they reflect the past fashion before the Revolution; while only the plain colors, uniform styles, and similar materials, in people's view, could show their loyalty to the communism faith and their political leaders. Hence, the tedious wearing helps reveal people’s attitudes. What is more, the society’s orientation can be also uncovered from this phenomenon. It is the authority, not individual, who decides the clothing styles; also it is first the authority that requires people to wear this style of clothes. Individual preference thus has no significance in these societies, and there could be one and only one uniform value allowed, i.e., the favorite of the authority.

In the final analysis, external appearance does help us observe a society and its people’s ideas and values, as the comparison of a democratic and a totalitarian culture shows. The basic value a society and its people hold will reveal itself everywhere; appearance and behavior are no exception either.  

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bridgewalkerUID：208595

issue208 寄托4人组 8.12作业

本文是“寄托4人组”今日的作业，已有组员会来修改。我们欢迎大家就文中的结构和内容进行讨论，但请其他G友优先照顾没有组队的同学。谢谢！

Issue208  The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people.

分析：
1＋1 结构。两句构成因果关系。
观点：同意
提纲：
1．        理论：外表反映了价值取向。然后举两个例子：
2．        民主社会: 个人的价值得以自由表达，所以衣着多丰富多彩
3．        集权社会：价值由上控制，并表现在衣着上，所以常单调一致。
Issue208  第3篇
------摘要------
作者：     共用时间：93分44秒     373 words
从2005年7月12日14时20分到2005年7月12日15时93分
------题目------
The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people.
------正文------
The speaker holds that one can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people since external appearance reveals internal attitudes; this is an idea I also (?) agree with.

To begin with, people in many cultures have long found the correlation between appearance and inner characters. In the case of Peking opera, a Chinese mainstream art with a history of more than 300 years, actors always make up with strong colors on their faces so that the audience can easily figure out the main character of this role. White, for example, is the symbol of duplicity, while red loyalty and black courage.赞！ No doubt in reality it is not so easy at all to judge a person by the color of his/her face (改成expression?); yet this form of art actually reveals in an exaggerated way people's common belief that internal personality will get (不太恰当，但我也没想出好的。) its expression through external look. This belief I hold to be reasonable, for the external look, dress, and act do give some indication about people's attitudes and a society's values. To better illustrate this, we can compare people' dressing between open societies and closed (这两个词太水了吧？民主和专政？) ones.
重点淡了expression反映internal personality，但没谈society’s ideas and values。即使你要在后面谈，这里的铺垫也不够。后面有点突兀。

In an open society, such as the present United States and West European countries, we can see people dressing in whatever styles they like. Fashion shows in New York, Paris, London, and Milan always offer (release?) a great number of new styles and never cease attracting people’s attention (这点好像是纯凑字数吧？). Why so many people in western countries care about new and distinctive styles of clothing? Because they care about fashions not only for fashions’ sake but also in order to establish their own characters: they want to be different; 呵呵，fashion只是年轻人的事！they want to be themselves. For many people, characteristic wearing could easily distinguish themselves from others and shows their own personalities; while it would be quite awkward(比较武断！穿一样可以代表亲情、爱情和友情，如双胞胎、情侣装、同窗、战友。), for example, for two people sitting in the same room and wearing clothes of the same style, except that they want to show their unity intentionally or it is out of the demand of their job. It is essentially this personality pursuit that underlies the phenomenon of various dressing. On the other hand, a deeper idea of democratic societies can be also reflected, i.e., individuals' choices and values should be respected. People could choose their clothing style only when the basic rights to freely determine one’s own life and freely (删) express one’s own taste could be warranted. And this is satisfied in democratic societies, where no authority can interrupt one's personal preference as long as it is not out of law's permission. From people’s dressing, therefore, we can not only find people’s character, but also find the basic value buried (deeply rooted) in the society.
不同社会制度下人们的dress是不同，但是这里你没有把society’s value“点”出来并再扣题分析！感觉你是在跑圈！就差那一下！

When it comes to closed societies, e.g., North Korea and China before 1978, the situation is totally different. During the Cultural Revolution, almost every Chinese people dressed only in three colors: green, grey, and blue, with uniform designing and even the same kind of cloth. Seldom does a girl wear short skirt or a young man wear jeans, for both forms have been recognized as unsuitable in that they reflect the past fashion before the Revolution; while only the plain colors, uniform styles, and similar materials, in people's view, could show their loyalty to the communism faith and their political leaders. Hence, the tedious wearing helps reveal people’s attitudes. What is more, the society’s orientation can be also uncovered from this phenomenon. It is the authority, not individual, who decides the clothing styles; also it is first the authority that requires people to wear this style of clothes. Individual preference thus has no significance in these societies, and there could be one and only one uniform value allowed, i.e., the favorite of the authority.
这一段是不是自己打自己耳光？你的立场是赞同，但题目前半部分是The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. 这里你说在dictatorship状态下reveal不出自我来哦！

In the final analysis, external appearance does help us observe a society and its people’s ideas and values, as the comparison of a democratic and a totalitarian culture shows. The basic value a society and its people hold will reveal itself everywhere; appearance and behavior are no exception either.

总结一下：
人们穿得花枝烂颤社会价值：民主、自由、平等
人们穿得一模一样社会价值：不民主、不自由。

其实题目前半句是否成立是有条件的。外在不同能反映社会的价值，但这个社会价值跟个人价值是有出入的。
你找得素材可以，但需要reorganize一下。

我可能有说得不对的地方，仅供参考！

[ Last edited by bridgewalker on 2005-8-12 at 20:55 ]

tangjihedeUID：2107695

1.open societies 应该不是很水，原出处见波谱尔 open society and its enemies
2确实，B1应该出现社会的一面
3。release绝妙好词啊！拥抱一下！
4。情侣衫的那处我应该再加上，即使穿的一样，也是为了表达个性。。。
5。为了点出social values，我打算这么改 On the other hand, a deeper idea of social values can be also reflected, i.e., in these democratic countries, individuals' choices and values should be respected.
6。B3的问题：我要表达的意思是，在集权社会，人们对于“自我”的表达是遵从于authority的意志的，他们的“自我”就是authority的自我，所以每个人的自我都差不多。而不是说集权使得他们无法表现出多彩的自我。因为他们根本不认同有个所谓“多彩的”自我。当他们跳忠字舞的时候，谁说他们不认为那就在表现“自己的”的自我了？
7。多谢！

bridgewalkerUID：208595

第6点不同意。
既然是集权社会你就应该突出它“集权”的一面（in violent contrast with民主社会一下）：人们无法真正的表达自我。

要不然，逻辑上不是很顺畅。

liminghaoUID：2191162

虽然过了一年多，我还是要说，好文章！

yogurt4UID：198389

原帖由 liminghao 于 2006-8-17 14:35 发表
虽然过了一年多，我还是要说，好文章！

那当然,嘿嘿