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Argument20 第1篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户 共用时间：29分1秒 421 words
从2005年7月10日3时9分到2005年7月10日3时29分
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The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island
Gazette.
'The population of Balmer Island increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by each of the island's six moped and bicycle rental companies from 50 per day to 30 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council is sure to attain the 50 percent reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year in the neighboring island of Torseau, when Torseau's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals.'
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Is it necessary to improve the traffic condition? What can we do to reduce the accidents? Is it possible to follow Torseau? Those important questions should be answered before Balmer Island limits the number of rented mopeds. Judging merely from the argument provided above, one should not so confident about the conclusion for several critical flaws I will offer my insight of the questions I raised above.
Firstly, the precondition of the argument is not warranted as it stands. The author fails to rule out the possibility that we don't have the necessity to reduce the accidents. Maybe Balmer Island keeps a good condition of traffic and there happens few accidents every day. Or the result of such accidents is trivial because of the limited speed and we needn't take it seriously. So an investigation must be carried out before the decision to reduce the rented mopeds.
Secondly, It is highly possible that the accidents happen in the city are not due to the rented mopeds mainly. Suppose the private causes them cars and the trucks, what we try to reduce the number of moped would became meaningless. What’s more, such conclusion will incite the dissatisfaction of the rented company because of the sharply decreasing of the revenue. Further investigation about the causation of the accident is needed. Thirdly, the author assumes that the number of the rented mopeds are over 50.However, there remains such possibility that those company rent no more than 30 cars every day which make it a fallacy to reduce the rented mopeds to 30.In that case, the accidents will continue without any improvement. To better prove what he claims, the author should give us an accurate number of the rented mopeds.
Last but not the least, there is no similarity between Balmer Island and Torseau. The two cities may share different traffic conditions that decide that different regulations should be accepted. We can't neglect the possibility that Torseau's street is wide and parallel while the Balmer's street is narrow and askew, then the accident in Torseau will become serious while the moped even can't speed up in Balmer. To bolster his claims, the author should provide more evidence about the similarities of the two cities.
In summary, these are important questions to be answered in order for us to develop a fair assessment of proposed acquisition. Thus, a more effective survey about the causation of the accidents in the city must be carried out. Additionally, the accurate information about the condition of the rented companies is needed.

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argument20~~泡面~~西西

Argument20 第1篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
------摘要------
作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户 共用时间：29分1秒 421 words
从2005年7月10日3时9分到2005年7月10日3时29分
------题目------
The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island
Gazette.
我就指出可以攻击的点~~
'The population of Balmer Island increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by each of the island's six moped and bicycle rental companies from 50 per day to 30 per day during the summer season. 自行车都租的吗?也可以自己买By limiting the number of rentals, the town council is sure to attain the 50 percent reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year in the neighboring island of Torseau, when Torseau's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals.' 速度限制一样能够保证accident 数目一样吗?而且拥有的自行车、汽车、人口数不一样，绝对数也不能说明问题?还是要给个比率，这样才能说明车祸的出现率，还有那些accident也有可能是汽车的错，如果汽车撞到行人、自行车，不能说是没有限制自行车的原因~~~
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Is it necessary to improve the traffic condition? What can we do to reduce the accidents? Is it possible to follow Torseau? Those important questions should be answered before Balmer Island limits the number of rented mopeds. Judging merely from the argument provided above, one should not so confident about the conclusion for several critical flaws I will offer my insight of the questions I raised above.

Firstly, the precondition of the argument is not warranted as it stands. The author fails to rule out the possibility that we don't have the necessity to reduce the accidents. Maybe Balmer Island keeps a good condition of traffic and there happens few accidents every day. Or the result of such accidents is trivial because of the limited speed and we needn't take it seriously. So an investigation must be carried out before the decision to reduce the rented mopeds.

Secondly, It is highly possible that the accidents happen in the city are mainly not due to the rented mopeds mainly移到前面. Suppose the private causes them cars and the trucks, what we try to reduce the number of moped would became meaningless. What’s more, such conclusion will incite the dissatisfaction of the rented company because of the sharply decreasing of the revenue. Further investigation about the causation of the accident is needed. Thirdly, the author assumes that the number of the rented mopeds are over 50.However, there remains such possibility that those company rent no more than 30 cars every day which make it a fallacy to reduce the rented mopeds to 30.In that case, the accidents will continue without any improvement. To better prove what he claims, the author should give us an accurate number of the rented mopeds.

Last but not the least, there is no similarity between Balmer Island and Torseau. The two cities may share different traffic conditions that decide that different regulations should be accepted. We can't neglect the possibility that Torseau's street is wide and parallel while the Balmer's street is narrow and askew, then the accident in Torseau will become serious while the moped even can't speed up in Balmer. To bolster his claims, the author should provide more evidence about the similarities of the two cities.
In summary, these are important questions to be answered in order for us to develop a fair assessment of proposed acquisition. Thus, a more effective survey about the causation of the accidents in the city must be carried out. Additionally, the accurate information about the condition of the rented companies is needed.
稍微改了下~~

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Argument20 第1篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
------摘要------
作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户 共用时间：29分1秒 421 words
从2005年7月10日3时9分到2005年7月10日3时29分
------题目------
The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island
Gazette.
'The population of Balmer Island increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by each of the island's six moped and bicycle rental companies from 50 per day to 30 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council is sure to attain the 50 percent reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year in the neighboring island of Torseau, when Torseau's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals.'
------正文------
Is it necessary to improve the traffic condition? What can we do to reduce the accidents? Is it possible to follow Torseau? Those important questions should be answered before Balmer Island limits the number of rented mopeds. Judging merely from the argument provided above, one should not so confident about the conclusion for several critical flaws I will offer my insight of the questions I raised above.
Firstly, the precondition of the argument is not warranted as it stands. The author fails to rule out the possibility that we don't have the necessity to reduce the accidents. Maybe Balmer Island keeps a good condition of traffic and there happens few accidents every day. Or the result of such accidents is trivial because of the limited speed and we needn't take it seriously. So an investigation must be carried out before the decision to reduce the rented mopeds.
Secondly, It is highly possible that the accidents happen in the city are not due to the rented mopeds mainly. Suppose the private causes them cars and the trucks, what we try to reduce the number of moped would became meaningless. What’s more, such conclusion will incite the dissatisfaction of the rented company because of the sharply decreasing of the revenue. Further investigation about the causation of the accident is needed.
Thirdly, the author assumes that the number of the rented mopeds are over 50.However, there remains such possibility that those company rent no more than 30 cars every day which make it a fallacy to reduce the rented mopeds to 30.In that case, the accidents will continue without any improvement. To better prove what he claims, the author should give us an accurate number of the rented mopeds.
Last but not the least, there is no similarity between Balmer Island and Torseau. The two cities may share different traffic conditions that decide that different regulations should be accepted. We can't neglect the possibility that Torseau's street is wide and parallel while the Balmer's street is narrow and askew, then the accident in Torseau will become serious while the moped even can't speed up in Balmer. To bolster his claims, the author should provide more evidence about the similarities of the two cities.
In summary, these are important questions to be answered in order for us to develop a fair assessment of proposed acquisition. Thus, a more effective survey about the causation of the accidents in the city must be carried out. Additionally, the accurate information about the condition of the rented companies is needed.

除了柿子说的，我觉得第一句话作者放在哪里是为什么？人多了，更容易造成自行车和行人的交通事故？这个问题我也没想明白，大家看看是怎么回事