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Argument47  
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Scientists studying historical weather patterns have discovered that in the mid-sixth century, Earth suddenly became significantly cooler. Although few historical records survive from that time, some accounts found both in Asia and Europe mention a dimming of the sun and extremely cold temperatures. Either a huge volcanic eruption or a large meteorite colliding with Earth could have created a large dust cloud throughout Earth's atmosphere that would have been capable of blocking enough sunlight to lower global temperatures significantly. A large meteorite collision, however, would probably create a sudden bright flash of light, and no extant historical records of the time mention such a flash. Some surviving Asian historical records of the time, however, mention a loud boom that would be consistent with a volcanic eruption. Therefore, the cooling was probably caused by a volcanic eruption.
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The author concludes that the cooling in the mid-sixth century was caused by a volcanic eruption. To support his claim, the author merely shows us some records about Asia and Europe. However, after carefully analyzing such materials provided by the author, we can find several significant flaws in them.

Firstly, the author hasn't show any evidence about the cause of cooling is either volcanic eruption or a large meteorite colliding.  It is entirely possible that there are other causes making the earth become cooler. Moreover, the author still does not provide sufficient records such as the definite time to show the earth had been cooler in the mid-sixth. He only states the weather changes in some accounts about Asia and Europe. We cannot be convinced that the whole planet went cooler at that time. Perhaps, it was some extreme cold day in winter. Thus, the argument is not warranted as it stands.

Secondly, the author makes another unsupported assumption.  It is entirely possible that the records about the flash caused by the meteorite colliding had not been preserved. Perhaps so far, scientists haven't find them or the situation happened in some areas such as Antarctic without noticed by human. Furthermore, the author haven't provide the assurance about the assumption that the flash is caused by the meteorite colliding.

Thirdly, the author makes a false generalization.  Only in Asia historical records mentioned a boom, not the whole world. We cannot derive it into the earth. In addition, there is still no evidence to guarantee that the laud boom was caused by the volcanic eruption.  It is probable that the meteorite colliding would either arouse a laud boom. Thereby, merely through the boom, we cannot judge the true cause of the cooling which might not exist as the author claims. What' more, the author doesn't provide the strong evidence about the time the boom happened. If it happened during the cooling time or even after that, the conclusion was totally unpersuadable.

Finally, the author makes a causality mistake. The facticity that whether the volcano had erupted still remains untestified, so how can we say the cooling was caused by that, even the cooling time also was not proved.

To sum up, the author's argument is doubtful. To strengthen it, the author should provide more detailed records, including the whole planet, about the cooling time, the volcanic eruption, and meteorite colliding.  Also, we appreciate that the author can offer some evidence about other causes.

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The author concludes that the cooling in the mid-sixth century was caused by a volcanic eruption. To support his claim, the author merely shows us some records about Asia and Europe. However, after carefully analyzing such materials provided by the author, we can find several significant flaws in them.

Firstly, the author hasn't show any evidence about the cause of cooling is either volcanic eruption or a large meteorite colliding.  It is entirely possible that there are other causes making the earth become cooler（少用there be 句型，语气弱）. Moreover, the author still does not provide sufficient records such as the definite time to show the earth had been cooler in the mid-sixth. He only states the weather changes in some accounts about Asia and Europe. We cannot be convinced that the whole planet went cooler at that time. Perhaps, it was some extreme cold day in winter.（或者北半球冷，南半球不冷, 再展开以下吧） Thus, the argument is not warranted as it stands.

Secondly, the author makes another unsupported assumption（这个假设是什么呢？最好开头就说吧）.  It is entirely possible that the records about the flash caused by the meteorite colliding had not been preserved. Perhaps so far, scientists haven't find them or the situation happened in some areas such as Antarctic without noticed by human. Furthermore, the author haven't provide the assurance about the assumption that the flash is caused by the meteorite colliding.

Thirdly, the author makes a false generalization.  Only in Asia historical records mentioned a boom, not the whole world. We cannot derive it into the earth. In addition, there is still no evidence to guarantee that the laud boom (must be)was caused by the volcanic eruption.  It is probable that the meteorite colliding would either arouse a laud boom. (或者是地震造成的声音)Thereby, merely through the boom, we cannot judge the true cause of the cooling which might not exist as the author claims. What' more, the author doesn't provide the strong evidence about the time the boom happened. If it happened during the cooling time or even after that, the conclusion was totally unpersuadable.

Finally, the author makes a causality mistake什么错误交待一下吧，可以用这个句型the author unfairly assumes that---- is the reason for---.). The facticity that whether the volcano had erupted still remains untestified, so how can we say the cooling was caused by that, even the cooling time also was not proved. （这段没有展开，不如不要，有三个错误就够了）

To sum up, the author's argument is doubtful. To strengthen it, the author should provide more detailed records, including the whole planet, about the cooling time, the volcanic eruption, and meteorite colliding.  Also, we appreciate that the author can offer some evidence about other causes

文章里好多的cause, 你也可以用 be responsible for, be the reason for, be the factor to 等

[ Last edited by niuniu1983 on 2005-8-17 at 22:53 ]