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发表于 2005-8-17 22:44:08 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
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No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study.

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观点:同意
1、现今学科之间的联系越来越紧密,许多学科都作为工具为其他学科所使用
2、综合性学科本来就是建立在其他学科基础之上的,因此综合性学科的发展更加取决于其他学科。


Nowadays, as the development of the technology and science is on an incredible speed, and the understanding of many science disciplines and the explanation of a great mount of phenomena stands on a relative high level, the communication and relationship between almost all fields becomes more and more undividable. Under this circumstance, bringing knowledge and experience from other fields appears to be more and more important for the scientist to make significantly advancement in his own field.



As many scientific approaches being studied today are more complex than the old ones. While Galileo can find out the principle of gravity by climbing on the tower and throwing two balls down, Watson and Crick should turn to X-ray for help to recognize the construct of the molecular of DNA. It is a good example that the biologists who  were under the help of physicist won a Nobel prize for their discovery, which might be the most important one during the 20th century. So it is common today that when an scientific experiment is being studied, the scientist often uses knowledge and experience from other fields as a tool to assist his study.



Compound fields, such as environmental science, are the fields which are built fundamentally on many basic fields (chemistry, mathematic, biology, physic, etc). As a result of the origination of these compound fields, the study of these fields is affected by any new development of the fields it basic on. The generation of a new kind of bacteria produced by a biologist may mean a more effective way for a environmental professor to reduce the content of the pollutants from rivers or lakes. And a more precise mathematical model may help to prospect the division of the pollutants in the air better. In this case, experience and knowledge of other fields not only is the tool to solve the problems but also the ways from which to gain basic solutions.



As I stated above the knowledge and experience of other fields provide tools and solutions to the  field being studied by one group of scientists, and the tools and solutions are the most important ways to advance significantly in any fields. So nowadays it is almost impossible for any field to progress greatly with out the help of other fields, no matter a tiny hint or a helpful solution.  

请各位不吝赐教!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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第一篇能写这么多不错啊:)
这个题目我也写过, 来看看你的

Nowadays, as the development of the technology and science is (这个地方是不是加个动词好一点)on an incredible speed, and the understanding of many science disciplines and the explanation of a great mount of phenomena stands(stand, 前面是复数) on a relative high level, the communication and relationship between almost all fields becomes more and more undividable. Under this circumstance, bringing knowledge and experience from other fields appears to be more and more important for the scientist to make significantly advancement in his own field.



As many scientific approaches being studied today are more complex than the old ones. (为什么?最好简短的写一句原因)While Galileo can find out the principle of gravity by climbing on the tower and throwing two balls down, Watson and Crick should turn to X-ray for help to recognize the construct of the molecular of DNA. It is a good example that the biologists who  were under the help of physicist won a Nobel prize for their discovery, which might be the most important one during the 20th century. So it is common today that when an scientific experiment is being studied, the scientist often uses knowledge and experience from other fields as a tool to assist his study. (后2个列子不错,但加利略那个在这里什么意思呢?没看懂)



Compound fields, such as environmental science, are the fields which are built fundamentally on many basic fields (chemistry, mathematic, biology, physic, etc). As a result of the origination of these compound fields, the study of these fields is affected by any new development of the fields it basic on. The generation of a new kind of bacteria produced by a biologist may mean a more effective way for a environmental professor to reduce the content of the pollutants from rivers or lakes. And a more precise mathematical model may help to prospect the division of the pollutants in the air better. In this case, experience and knowledge of other fields not only is the tool to solve the problems but also the ways from which to gain basic solutions.
(这段不错)


As I stated above the knowledge and experience of other fields provide tools and solutions to the  field being studied by one group of scientists, and the tools and solutions are the most important ways to advance significantly in any fields.(这句挺罗嗦的,最好改改) So nowadays it is almost impossible for any field to progress greatly with out the help of other fields, no matter a tiny hint or a helpful solution.  (最后一句不错)

总体看来是可以的,例子挺全面的了,那个加利略的可以去掉,语言上注意点变换

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发表于 2005-8-18 14:39:41 |只看该作者
Nowadays, as the development of the technology and science is on an incredible speed roaring at an incredible speed, and the understanding of many science disciplines and the explanation of a great mount amountof phenomena stands advance on a relative high level, the communication and relationship between amongalmost all fields becomes more and more undividable. Under this circumstance, bringing knowledge and experience from other fields appears to be more and more important for the scientist to make significantly advancement in his own field.论述的不错,不过就是太长了点。。



As many scientific approaches being studied today are more complex than the old ones这句话没有主句. While Galileo can find out the principle of    gravity by climbing on the tower and throwing two balls down, 连接词Watson and Crick should turn to X-ray for help to recognize the construct 名词形式 of the molecular of DNA.      It is a good example that the biologists who 有2个谓语但是没有连接词  were under the help of physicist won a Nobel prize for their discovery 复数, which might be the most important one during the 20th century. So it is common today that when an scientific experiment is being studied, the scientist often uses knowledge and experience from other fields as a tool to assist his study. 感觉这段论证的太浅了,都没有点到key point上,比如说Galileo就没有说其他领域的问题。。。后面的说的也不太够,而且最好一开始就有鲜明的TS。



Compound fields, such as environmental science, are the fields which are built fundamentally on many basic fields (chemistry, mathematic, biology, physic, etc). As a result of the origination of these compound fields, the study of these fields is affected by any new development of the fields it basic basedon. The generation of a new kind of bacteria produced by a biologist may mean a more effective way for a environmental professor to reduce the content of the pollutants from rivers or lakes. And a more precise mathematical model may  help to prospect the division of the pollutants in the air better. 第2个例子有点牵强吧In this case, experience and knowledge of other fields not only is not only 和is的位置不对the tool to solve the problems but also the ways from which to gain basic solutions.



最好有个表示结尾的标志词。。。比如to sum upAs I stated above the knowledge and experience of other fields provide tools and solutions to the  field being studied by one group of scientists, and the tools and solutions are the most important ways to advance significantly in any fields. So nowadays it is almost impossible for any field to progress greatly with out the help of other fields, no matter a tiny hint or a helpful solution.  

总体来说很不错哦。。。第一篇就能写到这个样子已经很好了。。。语言功底不错,论证的也基本可以,不过还要注意一些小问题。。


有时间看看我的issue17
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=321390

我也写过4,可以交流一下
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... type%26typeid%3D101

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While Galileo can find out the principle of    gravity by climbing on the tower and throwing two balls down, 连接词Watson and Crick should turn to X-ray for help to recognize the construct 名词形式 of the molecular of DNA.  
这句话逗号前是从句,由while引导,后面的才是主句

It is a good example (that the biologists( who 有2个谓语但是没有连接词  were under the help of physicist) won a Nobel prize for their discovery 复数), which might be the most important one during the 20th century.
我是打算写一个从句套从句的结构,who引导的那一句是修饰biologists的,won是biologist 的谓语,不知道是不是这样写容易造成误会

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Gelileo的那个例子本来是要用他在比萨斜塔做的那个重力试验的,结果细节有想不太清楚了,所以就写成那样了,目的是要说明过去的研究比较简单。

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