Issue47 寄托4人组 8.23作业

tangjihedeUID: 2107695

Issue47  第5篇
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作者：寄托4人组     共用时间：45分1秒     490 words
从2005年7月23日14时4分到2005年7月23日14时45分
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Society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect—that is, on reasoning and other cognitive skills.
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The speaker in the title statement holds that society has not placed enough emphasis on the intellect. In my observance, however, too much has been paid on the intellect while other aspects, such as emotion, will, etc., has been unfairly neglected.

No doubt, intellect---the ability of reasoning, understanding, critical thinking, is of vital importance in modern society. In such an era of fast-spreading information and keen competition, no one can succeed without proficient capacity of reasoning. Tons of information are confronting people every day, from which one must find the most valuable and make fast decision, or else the opportunity will soon be lost. This requires that one must have a wise, responsive brain, which can be offered by intellect training.

However, the situation in our society is that, emphasis on intellect is seldom in absence. Take, the formal education system for example. In China, students begin to learn mathematics, physics, and other scientific disciplines which are believed best to improve their intelligence quotient(IQ) ever since elementary school. Almost all tests are oriented to examine this capacity, and both students and teachers are evaluated by the efficiency of their learning or teaching these disciplines. The same thing also happens in the job market. In job interviews applicants are usually required to offer their GPA record, and a variety of other certificates to prove their intellectual capacity, without which one will suffer form increasingly difficult in getting a job. From both sides it is hard to say that society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect as the speaker holds.

Actually, I believe the significance of intellect has been overstated, while other indispensable abilities, such as communication, emotion, will, etc., are unfortunately neglected by our society. Few schools in China require students to take courses on emotions, and this has already led to some problems. A case in point is the failure of "Teenager College Students Project" held by a leading Chinese university. Fifteen years ago, this university enrolled many teenagers who are highly talented in intellect, and provided the best faculties to teach them, hoping many of them could become "giant figures" in the future. However, time proves the project to be a failure: most students are now just ordinary people, and several of them even committed crimes and now in jails. Researchers find that the lack of high emotional quotient (EQ) accounts for this phenomenon. Although extremely talented, those students are rather week in communicating with others and facing frustrations, for both their parents and teachers always took the improvement of their intellectual ability the top priority, while left them little time to play with others or have lessons about emotional problems. The absence of communication skills and positive attitudes to their work led to the failure of cooperation with others, which is of vital importance in modern world; and even resulted in crime because some students were so easy to envy others and could not bear being inferior to others, which drove them to wound their classmates. This case reminds people that with high IQ while low EQ one will not only fail to implement his or her intellect to the work, but also might harm the society.   

In the finally analysis, although the intellect capacity is indispensable in one's career, yet it is high time, I believe, that society should place more emphasis on the emotions, since the former has already been overstated, while the latter deserves more attention.  

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meautoUID: 2116250

我也写的这个

meautoUID: 2116250

The speaker in the title statement holds that society has not placed enough emphasis on the intellect. In my observance,请教，是observation吧 however, too much has been paid on the intellect while other aspects, such as emotion, will, etc., has been unfairly neglected.

No doubt, intellect---the ability of reasoning, understanding, critical thinking, is of vital importance in modern society. In such an era of fast-spreading。。有这个词末？explosive information and keensevere competition, no one can succeed without proficient capacity of reasoning. Tons of information are confronting people every day, from which one must find the most valuable and make fast decision, or else the opportunity will soon be lost. This requires that one must have a wise, responsive brain, which can be offered by intellect training.

However,意思是顺着的，不要转折 the situation in our society is that,in our society, emphasis on intellect is seldom in absence. Take, the formal education system for example. In China, students begin to learnhave learned …ever since mathematics, physics, and other scientific disciplines which are believed best to improve their intelligence quotient(IQ) ever since elementary school. Almost all tests are oriented to examine this capacity, and both students and teachers are evaluated by the efficiency of their learning or teaching these disciplines. The same thing also happens in the job market. In job interviews applicants are usually required to offer their GPA record, and a variety of other certificates to prove their intellectual capacity, without which one will suffer form increasingly difficult in getting a job. From both sides it is hard to say that society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect as the speaker holds.
有空看看偶的。。。。嘿嘿。。。。和你用了同样的两个例子。。。你是把intellect笼统的来说。GPA我很不认同，对于有过工作经历的人，经验和以往的成就比GPA更重要吧。
Actually, I believe the significance of intellect has been overstated, while other indispensable abilities, such as communication, emotion, will, etc., are unfortunately neglected by our society. Few schools in China require students to take courses on emotions, and this has already led to some problems.是因为不重视而没有提供这样的教育么？不见得吧。应该是没有办法教育人们的EMOTION，顶多就上上MORALITY的课。 A case in point is the failure of "Teenager College Students Project" held by a leading Chinese university.好例子 Fifteen years ago, this university enrolled many teenagers who are highly talented in intellect, and provided the best faculties to teach them, hoping many of them could become "giant figures" in the future. However, time proves the project to be a failure: most students are now just ordinary people, and several of them even committed crimes and now in jails. Researchers find that the lack of highlack of sth. High??? emotional quotient (EQ) accounts for this phenomenon. Although extremely talented, those students are rather week in communicating with others and facing frustrations, for both their parents and teachers always took the improvement of their intellectual ability the top priority, while left them little time to play with others or have lessons about emotional problems.这里需要另外的例子加强下。。。以证明现象是普遍的，当然，不能拿ISSUE当阿狗批，建议下。 The absence of communication skills and positive attitudes to their work led to the failure of cooperation with others, 这里显的突兀了which is of vital importance in modern world;；后就是一个新的句子里，没主语啊这个 and even resulted in crime because some students were so easy to envy others and could not bear being inferior to others, which drove them to wound assult their classmates. This case reminds people that with high IQ while low EQ one will not only fail to implement his or her intellect to the work, but also might harm the society.   
感觉上应该先摆出社会上学生情商低的种种现象，再把少年班的例子拿出来当典型说。你的正好反了，摆个典型例子，分析原因，不是很妥。
In the finally analysis, although the intellect capacity is indispensable in one's career, yet it is high time, I believe, that society should place more emphasis on the emotions, since the former has already been overstated, while the latter deserves more attention.
2。3段无非就是摆事实，说理就看第1段，但是你的第一段的分析不够深入，匆匆一句must find the most valuable and make fast decision, or else the opportunity will soon be lost完了。限时作文的句子都写的很简单，这还可以理解，但是连内容都简单，ETS还看你什么？嘿嘿，我们都拿例子充字数，迷茫啊。。。

AutumnseaUID: 2125396

这道题会不会老美的情况跟我们不一样？据我所知美国那边似乎(不包括大学)science之类的教的不是很好，不想我们这边狂练基础很牢固。

听一个美国外教说的，不过感觉他对美国很有意见。
按常理，也许真有的国家不是这样...那里的人会怎么做这道题阿...?

tangjihedeUID: 2107695

1。是observation
2。explosive information ，severe competition谢！（虽然是有keen competition的）
3。learned …ever since 谢！
4。我是想说在国内找工作要看你的4。6级，计算机2级之类的。后来想一大堆中国特色的名词，还是算了。
5。可以开关于人际交往之类的课啊。其实也是有的，比如小学的思想品德什么的，但讲的好多都是五讲四美三热爱。。。
6。“感觉上应该先摆出社会上学生情商低的种种现象，再把少年班的例子拿出来当典型说。你的正好反了，摆个典型例子，分析原因，不是很妥。”有理。开始我是想后面加入一些分析，后来发现例子说完了也就没话来分析了。。
6。High EQ不行么？那高情商还能怎么说呢？
7。没主语的问题是应该把分号改成逗号，唉，对不住了。
8。我觉得这道题bt之处就在于作者以陈述事实的口气表达观点，而我是不同意这个事实的，所以只能用另外的事实来反驳。期间就没想到怎么深入的论证了。在你今天发的那些题里面这个算很高频的了，否则肯定写别的。痛苦了一下午才写成这个样子。

9答Autumnsea。谢谢指出这一点。我也觉得不同社会情况可能不同，所以第一段我说“in my oberservation”,第三段一开始我就试图把话题引到中国的情况，后面的例子也都是中国的。 不过确实应该在加上：不同社会的情况不同。以我所在的社会来说，我不能同意作者的观点。。。

另外，我个人感觉还是不要分国家讨论了吧，那样太泛了，那个国家都说不了两句。不如就说我们所在的然后集中分析。

[ Last edited by tangjihede on 2005-8-23 at 21:07 ]

meautoUID: 2116250

牢骚下,这个题目真的很变态~~~~~~