Argument2

irenemimiUID：2120985

In this letter, the committee homeowners from the Deerhaven Acres suggested that they should adopt their own set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting just like the Brookville does. To support their suggestion, the committee cites the fact that seven years ago, the homeowners from Brookville set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting, after that, the average property values have risen three times, so the Deerhaven Acres should do the same thing as Brookville do. Close security the fact, however, reveals that it lends credible support to the suggestion.

First, the letter claims the reason why Brookville’s average property values have tripled is that their homeowners adopt own restrictions on landscaping and housepainting. This letter fail to substantiate they really have cause-and-effect relationship, though the property has risen after the restriction adopted, it can only indicate that they the only have relationship in time. Unless the author gives direct attest, it would not convince me that the property was affected by the restriction.

Secondly, even if the restriction has cause-and-effect relationship with the average property, the author doesn’t eliminate the possibility of other reasons may effect to the property. Perhaps, Brookville Acres has become the center of the city, it’s convinced traffic, comfortable condition; modern establishments are all lead to the jump of the property. Without ruling out other possible reasons for the risen property, the author cannot convince me to that conclusion.

Thirdly, even assuming that the main reason of the risen property in Brookville is the restriction, the author assumes further that the restriction will also have effect in Deerhaven Acres. Deerhaven are not the same, even similar with Brookville, the author fail to consider the difference between these two acres. For instance, the homebuyer in Deerhaven may not interested in the same landscaping and housepainting, on contrarily, they may think the restriction is quite simplify and like more individual style. Yet, the letter contains no evidence to support this assumption, and have not considered the dissimilar of two acres. Lacking such evidence it is equally possible that even if adopt same restriction in Deerhaven, the average property in Deerhaven would not risen.

Finally, even assuming there has no difference between these two acres, the author should also give other evidences that it would have no change in seven years. The author may neglect the Brookville adopted the restriction is seven years before, although the two acres are similar, the big change happen in seven years would also lead the different result in Deerhaven.

In sum, until the author substantiates the assumption that there has no other factors could affect to the property; there has no difference between Brookville and Deerhaven; and there has no change during seven years time, I remain unconvinced that adopt own set of restriction on landscaping and housepainting would also lead to the raise of average property.

这次我写的第一篇ARG, 估计是傻忽忽的,望高手指点哈. 大家拍拍

cxlbread84UID：184012

Argument2

In this letter, the committee homeowners from the Deerhaven Acres suggested that they should adopt their own set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting just like the Brookville does. To support their suggestion, the committee cites the fact that seven years ago, the homeowners from Brookville set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting, after that, the average property values have risen three times, so the Deerhaven Acres should do the same thing as Brookville do. Close security the fact, however, reveals that it lends credible support to the suggestion. （scrutiny）Maybe you should change into “ With scrutiny, however, it lends credible support to the suggestion.”

First, the letter claims the reason why Brookville’s average property values have tripled is that their homeowners adopt own restrictions on landscaping and housepainting. This letter(The arguer fails to 注意单复数) fail to substantiate they really have cause-and-effect relationship(good), though the property has risen after the restriction adopted, it can only indicate that they the only have relationship in time. Unless the author gives direct attest, it would not convince me that the property was affected by the restriction.

Secondly, even if the restriction has cause-and-effect relationship with the average property, the author doesn’t eliminate the possibility of other reasons may effect to the property. Perhaps, Brookville Acres has become the center of the city, it’s convinced traffic, comfortable condition; modern establishments are all lead to the jump of the property. Without ruling out other possible reasons for the risen property, the author cannot convince me to that conclusion.

Thirdly, even assuming that the main reason of the risen property in Brookville is the restriction, the author assumes further that the restriction will also have effect in Deerhaven Acres. Deerhaven are not the same, even similar with Brookville, the author fail to consider the difference between these two acres. For instance, the homebuyer in Deerhaven may (be) not interested in the same landscaping and housepainting, on contrarily (contrary), they may think the restriction is quite simplify and like more individual style. Yet, the letter contains no evidence to support this assumption, and have not considered the dissimilar of two acres. Lacking such evidence it is equally possible that even if adopt same restriction in Deerhaven, the average property in Deerhaven would not risen.

Finally, even assuming there has no difference between these two acres, the author should also give other evidences that it would have no change in seven years. The author may neglect the Brookville adopted the restriction is seven years before, although the two acres are similar, the big change happen in seven years would also lead the different result in Deerhaven.

In sum, until the author substantiates the assumption that there has no other factors could affect to the property; there has no difference between Brookville and Deerhaven; and there has no change during seven years time, I remain unconvinced that adopt own set of restriction on landscaping and housepainting would also lead to the raise of average property.

cxlbread84UID：184012

substantiate 用的不错，但建议后面加that
attest平时我也少用，对我算是新词吧，
security是安全的意思，你这应该是用错了吧
总体还不错的，但有三点建议
1， 语法错误要注意
2，最好附带题目，方便改
3，句式最好有变化，even assuming no difference between......这样上一段加从句，这一段加名词，看起来比较舒服

已经不错了，继续加油吧

killowindUID：207262

第一段好像和题目一样的东西太多,不好!我就把Close security the fact, however, reveals that it lends credible support to the suggestion.看成你自己的东西

killowindUID：207262

第一个论证很不充分,缺乏进一步的东西,别说不足,还要怎么改进

irenemimiUID：2120985

谢谢谢谢,谢谢大家的建议~~~~~看到真开心!