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Issue152 "The only responsibility of corporate executives, provided they stay within the law, is to make as much money as possible for their companies."
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翻译:
公司的经营者们唯一的责任就是在法律规定范围之内为他们的公司赚尽可能多的钱。     
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提纲:
Position:不同意。
A.追逐利益,这是任何一个公司的首要目标,因此也是公司经营者的首要职责。没有了利益,员工的福利减少,公司不能再生产,以至于公司最后倒闭。比如IBM
B.而从社会道德的层面上,一个公司的经营者还应充当民众和下属的道德表率等等。Enron and Anderson
C.作为一名出色并且有效率的公司经营者的还肩负着一部分社会责任,比如投资让员工接受技能培训,还有纳税,也有社会的公益事业,比如Microsoft给社会捐资。
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In the era of worshiping money and profit, I strongly agree that making as much as money as possible is the most important responsibilities of corporate executives. However, the corporate executives, as a social member, should also take up the responsibilities given by society other than merely pursuing profit. To further shore up my viewpoint, I would present the analysis in details as below.

To begin with, it is responsible for the manager or the leader of a company to make as much fortune and profit for company. After all, no one would deny that every company, as long as exists in the mundane world, would try one's best to pursue the maximum profit. Only by obtaining profit, a company can thrive in the society fraught with competition, the staff in a company can get enough well-being, and vice versa. To illustrate this point, one can consider the famous computer company IBM, who had sold part of his PC products to Lenovo, is just because he cannot afford it any more in the lack of profit. At this point, the executives should always consider the profit first and unswervingly go for it. Quite opposite, once an executive gives up pursuing more profit, he or she would not be a good and effective leader. Just as Napoleon had put it, the soldier who do not want to be a general would not be a good soldier. True, since that, it is not exaggerate for us to assert that an executive who do not want to make as much money as possible would not be a good executive.

While it is important and necessary for the leaders to make money, we should not lose sight of other responsibilities. As we know, corporate executives, as a social unit, can not escape from the social responsibilities and commitments, say, paying taxes or education, when making fortune from society. It is easy to understand why a company should pay the taxes since it is compulsory according to law. In the frame of law, a company is incumbent to pay taxes, which would in turn be used by government. When it comes to education, maybe people would ask why a company has the responsibility to educate. Actually, we should not overlook one point that all the people have rights to receive education including the staff, the workers, dustman and so forth. In that case, the company should offer opportunities to send their staff to learn in the communities, colleges or universities. Moreover, by doing that, it can also benefit the company in that after studying, the workers or staffs tend to be more skillful than before and also loyal to the company that provide these opportunities. In short, although the profit is important, the social responsibilities and the investment in one's own staffs should not be omitted.

In the final analysis, we might as well turn our focus to a wider perspective which involves the issue of morality. Corporate executives, I believe, should also possess appropriate morality and ethnic during their presidency since they, to certain extent, serve to be model for the public and the subordinates in their companies. Enron, for example, is blamed for its bribery of leaders, which at length was bankrupt due to the cheat of accounts. Hence, we can see that, morality, as least partly should be seriously cared about since it virtual somehow associates with the reputation of the executives themselves as well as the future of companies.

To sum up, from the discussion above, we can confidently draw a conclusion that although the profit plays an significant role in determining the destiny of a company, corporate executives should still pay enough attention to other factors or responsibilities in the society or morality, which sometimes more instrumental in maintaining a company operate smoothly and successfully not only in the present but also in the future.

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issue152 第一次在规定时间里写完,虽然丑了点儿~~~

Issue152
题目
Issue152 "The only responsibility of corporate executives, provided they stay within the law, is to make as much money as possible for their companies."
**************************************************************************
翻译:
公司的经营者们唯一的责任就是在法律规定范围之内为他们的公司赚尽可能多的钱。     
**************************************************************************
提纲:
Position:不同意。
A.追逐利益,这是任何一个公司的首要目标,因此也是公司经营者的首要职责。没有了利益,员工的福利减少,公司不能再生产,以至于公司最后倒闭。比如IBM
B.而从社会道德的层面上,一个公司的经营者还应充当民众和下属的道德表率等等。Enron and Anderson 恩,这点很好,我没想到
C.作为一名出色并且有效率的公司经营者的还肩负着一部分社会责任,比如投资让员工接受技能培训,还有纳税,也有社会的公益事业,比如Microsoft给社会捐资。也比我论述的话,我只想到产品和服务安全舒适,保护环境,学习Ing
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In the era of worshiping money and profit, I strongly agree that making as much as money as possible is the most important responsibilities of corporate executives. However, the corporate executives, as a social member, should also take up短语很生动 the responsibilities given by society other than merely pursuing profit. To further shore up my viewpoint, I would present the analysis in details as below.开头不错,是模版吗?

To begin with, it is responsible for the manager or the leader of a company to make as much fortune and profit for company. After all, no one would deny that every company, as long as exists in the mundane为什么要加这个形容词? world, would try one's best to pursue the maximum profit. Only by obtaining profit, a company can thrive in the society fraught with competition, the staff in a company can get enough well-being, and vice versa.学习并收藏之。这句对前面那句话起到了论述作用很好 To illustrate this point, one can consider the famous computer company IBM, who had sold part of his PC products to Lenovo, is just because he cannot afford it any more in the lack of profit.例子举的很好 At this point, the executives should always consider the profit first and unswervingly go for it. Quite opposite, once an executive gives up pursuing more profit, he or she would not be a good and effective leader. Just as Napoleon had put it, the soldier who does not want to be a general would not be a good soldier. 恩,这个说法用在这不恰当阿,不想当将军不等于放弃追求利润吧True, since that, it is not exaggerate for us to assert that an executive who do not want to make as much money as possible would not be a good executive.

While it is important and necessary for the leaders to make money, we should not lose sight of收藏之 other responsibilities. As we know, corporate executives, as a social unit用词很准确,学习, can not escape from the social responsibilities and commitments, say, paying taxes or education, when making fortune from society. It is easy to understand why a company should pay the taxes since it is compulsory according to law. In the frame of law, a company is incumbent to pay taxes, which would in turn be used by government. When it comes to education, maybe people would ask why a company has the responsibility to educate. Actually, we should not overlook one point that all the people have rights to receive education including the staff, the workers, dustman and so forth. In that case, the company should offer opportunities to send their staff to learn in the communities, colleges or universities. Moreover, by doing that, it can also benefit the company in that after studying, the workers or staffs tend to be more skillful than before and also loyal to the company that provide these opportunities. In short, although the profit is important, the social responsibilities and the investment in one's own staffs should not be omitted. (太困了,明早改)

In the final analysis, we might as well turn our focus to a wider perspective which involves the issue of morality. 这种说法没见过,学习Corporate executives, I believe, should also possess appropriate morality and ethnic during their presidency since they, to certain extent, serve to be model for the public and the subordinates in their companies. Enron, 这个例子不了解,请教?for example, is blamed for its bribery of leaders, which at length收藏之 was bankrupt due to the cheat of accounts. Hence, we can see that, morality, as least partly should be seriously cared about since it virtual somehow associates with the reputation of the executives themselves as well as the future of companies.这段论述的似乎有些泛泛了,没说具体为什么morality会影响the reputation of the executives themselves as well as the future of companies,似乎不够有力

To sum up, from the discussion above, we can confidently draw a conclusion that although the profit plays an significant role in determining the destiny of a company, corporate executives should still pay enough attention to other factors or responsibilities in the society or morality, which sometimes more instrumental in maintaining a company operate smoothly and successfully not only in the present but also in the future.

645个words,好佩服阿!!就是长句似乎有点多,应和短句结合。限时写成这样很牛了~
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issue152 第一次在规定时间里写完,虽然丑了点儿~~~

Issue152
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Issue152 "The only responsibility of corporate executives, provided they stay within the law, is to make as much money as possible for their companies."
**************************************************************************
翻译:
公司的经营者们唯一的责任就是在法律规定范围之内为他们的公司赚尽可能多的钱。     
**************************************************************************
提纲:
Position:不同意。
A.追逐利益,这是任何一个公司的首要目标,因此也是公司经营者的首要职责。没有了利益,员工的福利减少,公司不能再生产,以至于公司最后倒闭。比如IBM
B.而从社会道德的层面上,一个公司的经营者还应充当民众和下属的道德表率等等。Enron and Anderson
C.作为一名出色并且有效率的公司经营者的还肩负着一部分社会责任,比如投资让员工接受技能培训,还有纳税,也有社会的公益事业,比如Microsoft给社会捐资。(问题的考虑是很全面的,与我以前看过的优秀文章的行文思路相似。)***********************************************************************
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In the era of worshiping money and profit, I strongly agree that making as much as money as possible is the most important responsibilities of corporate executives. However, the corporate executives, as a social member, should also take up the responsibilities given by society other than merely pursuing profit. To further shore up my viewpoint, I would present the analysis in details as below.(这篇文章的开头是很完美的,展示了对于题目的理解并且表达的自己的观点,还引出了下文的论述,很好!)
To begin with, it is responsible for the manager or the leader of a company to make as much fortune and profit for company. After all, no one would deny that every company, as long as exists in the mundane world, would try one's best to pursue the maximum profit. Only by obtaining profit, a company can thrive in the society fraught with competition, the staff in a company can get enough well-being, and vice versa. To illustrate this point, one can consider the famous computer company IBM, who had sold part of his PC products to Lenovo, is just because he cannot afford it any more in the lack of profit. At this point, the executives should always consider the profit first and unswervingly go for it. Quite opposite, once an executive gives up pursuing more profit, he or she would not be a good and effective leader.(这里用拿破仑的我觉得很牵强,没有利润就不会有理由让员工继续为自己工作,就会导致很多的优秀人才的跳槽,减少公司的竞争力,我觉得可以从不追求利润作为首要目标会导致的反面效应来考虑。你觉得呢?) Just as Napoleon had put it, the soldier who do not want to be a general would not be a good soldier. True, since that, it is not exaggerate for us to assert that an executive who do not want to make as much money as possible would not be a good executive.

While it is important and necessary for the leaders to make money, we should not lose sight of other responsibilities. As we know, corporate executives, as a social unit, can not escape from the social responsibilities and commitments, say, paying taxes or education, when making fortune from society. It is easy to understand why a company should pay the taxes since it is compulsory according to law. In the frame of law, a company is incumbent to pay taxes, which would in turn be used by government. (过渡)When it comes to education, maybe people would ask why a company has the responsibility to educate. Actually, we should not overlook one point that all the people have rights to receive education including the staff, the workers, dustman and so forth. In that case, the company should offer opportunities to send their staff to learn in the communities, colleges or universities.(这个我觉得没有说清楚,公司为了增强自身的竞争力,当然要送部分的人员接受提高行业技能的训练或者说教育,但是这并不是给社会的好处,没有体现出作为社会成员的责任,有些公司就完全没必要 关注教育,但是纳税这点是很切题的,你还可说应该关注环保和可持续发展等方面,你认为呢?) Moreover, by doing that, it can also benefit the company in that after studying, the workers or staffs tend to be more skillful than before and also loyal to the company that provide these opportunities. In short, although the profit is important, the social responsibilities and the investment in one's own staffs should not be omitted.

In the final analysis, we might as well turn our focus to a wider perspective which involves the issue of morality. Corporate executives, I believe, should also possess appropriate morality and ethnic during their presidency since they, to certain extent, serve to be model for the public and the subordinates in their companies. Enron, for example, is blamed for its bribery of leaders, which at length was bankrupt due to the cheat of accounts. Hence, we can see that, morality, as least partly should be seriously cared about since it virtual somehow associates with the reputation of the executives themselves as well as the future of companies.(这段应该放在第三段,在逻辑上会好些,尽管论证没有问题,还有你在提纲中提到的关于the whole welfare of the society 也没有提到To sum up, from the discussion above, we can confidently draw a conclusion that although the profit plays an significant role in determining the destiny of a company, corporate executives should still pay enough attention to other factors or responsibilities in the society or morality, which sometimes more instrumental in maintaining a company operate smoothly and successfully not only in the present but also in the future.结尾基本形成了模板,很好,文章我觉得总体还不错,但是中间第二段有问题,你批判吸收![ 本帖最后由 bunnymz2005 于 2006-2-8 21:58 编辑 ]

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While it is important and necessary for the leaders to make money, we should not lose sight of收藏之 other responsibilities. As we know, corporate executives, as a social unit用词很准确,学习, can not escape from the social responsibilities and commitments, say, paying taxes or education, when making fortune from society. It is easy to understand why a company should pay the taxes since it is compulsory according to law. In the frame of law, a company is incumbent to pay taxes, which would in turn be used by government. When it comes to education, maybe people would ask why a company has the responsibility to educate. Actually, we should not overlook one point that all the people have rights to receive education including the staff, the workers, dustman and so forth. In that case, the company should offer opportunities to send their staff to learn in the communities, colleges or universities.我理解的education应该泛指社会上的教育,而不是针对公司员工的培训,员工的培训不应当算作是social responsibilities;另外员工有权受教育也不应该是company送他们去读大学之类的吧 Moreover, by doing that, it can also benefit the company in that after studying, the workers or staffs tend to be more skillful than before and also loyal to the company that provide these opportunities. In short, although the profit is important, the social responsibilities and the investment in one's own staffs should not be omitted. 这里没有用Microsoft给社会捐资的例子吗?这个反而恰当一点
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In the era of worshiping money and profit, I strongly agree that making as much as money as possible is the most important responsibilities of corporate executives. However, the corporate executives, as a social member, should also take up the responsibilities given by society other than merely pursuing profit. To further shore up my viewpoint, I would present the analysis in details as below.观点明确,花花最近几篇的开头都很差不多,看来已成模版了,不错啊

To begin with, it is responsible for the manager or the leader of a company to make as much fortune and profit for company. After all, no one would deny that every company, as long as exists in the mundane world, would try one's best to pursue the maximum profit. Only by obtaining profit, a company can thrive in the society fraught with competition, the staff in a company can get enough well-being, and vice versa. To illustrate this point, one can consider the famous computer company IBM, who had sold part of his PC products to Lenovo, is just because he cannot afford it any more in the lack of profit. At this point, the executives should always consider the profit first and unswervingly go for it. Quite opposite, once an executive gives up pursuing more profit, he or she would not be a good and effective leader. Just as Napoleon had put it, the soldier who do not want to be a general would not be a good soldier.这里同意lawrence1984的观点,这个例子好像在这里不太合适 True, since that, it is not exaggerate for us to assert that an executive who do not want to make as much money as possible would not be a good executive.

While it is important and necessary for the leaders to make money, we should not lose sight of other responsibilities. As we know, corporate executives, as a social unit, can not escape from the social responsibilities and commitments, say(求教:这个say是什么意思呀?), paying taxes or education, when making fortune from society. It is easy to understand why a company should pay the taxes since it is compulsory according to law. In the frame of law, a company is incumbent(好词) to pay taxes, which would in turn be used by government. When it comes to education, maybe people would ask why a company has the responsibility to educate. Actually, we should not overlook one point that all the people have rights to receive education including the staff, the workers, dustman and so forth. In that case, the company should offer opportunities to send their staff to learn in the communities, colleges or universities. Moreover, by doing that, it can also benefit the company in that after studying, the workers or staffs tend to be more skillful than before and also loyal to the company that provide these opportunities. In short, although the profit is important, the social responsibilities and the investment in one's own staffs should not be omitted.这里怎么对应了提纲3?看下一段是对应了提纲2,好像还是提纲的顺序合理点哟

In the final analysis, we might as well turn our focus to a wider perspective which involves the issue of morality. Corporate executives, I believe, should also possess appropriate morality and ethnic during their presidency since they, to certain extent, serve to be model for the public and the subordinates in their companies. Enron, for example, is blamed for its bribery of leaders, which at length was bankrupt due to the cheat of accounts. Hence, we can see that, morality, as least partly should be seriously cared about since it virtual somehow associates with the reputation of the executives themselves as well as the future of companies.

To sum up, from the discussion above, we can confidently draw a conclusion that although the profit plays an significant role in determining the destiny of a company, corporate executives should still pay enough attention to other factors or responsibilities in the society or morality, which sometimes more instrumental in maintaining a company operate smoothly and successfully not only in the present but also in the future.

小花限时都能写600字以上,真牛,看了几篇花花的issue发现基本上已有自己的模版了,很不错,结构语言都让我非常佩服啊

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