Argument177 最后一篇，求拍，谢谢~~

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题目
Argument177 The following is a letter that recently appeared in the Oak City Gazette, a local newspaper.

"Membership in Oak City's Civic Club—a club whose primary objective is to discuss local issues—should continue to be restricted to people who live in Oak City. People who work in Oak City but who live elsewhere cannot truly understand the business and politics of the city. It is important to restrict membership to city residents because only residents pay city taxes and therefore only residents understand how the money could best be used to improve the city. At any rate, restricting membership in this way is unlikely to disappoint many of the nonresidents employed in Oak City, since neighboring Elm City's Civic Club has always had an open membership policy, and only twenty-five nonresidents have joined Elm City's Club in the last ten years."

翻译：
Oak City的市民俱乐部主要目的是讨论本地事务，其成员资格应该继续被限制在居住在Oak City的市民。那些在Oak City工作但在别的地方居住的人无法真正理解本城市的政治和经济。把成员资格限制在本市居民非常重要，因为只有居民付城市税因而也只有他们才知道这些钱如何使用才能促进城市发展。无论如何，以这种方式限制成员资格不太可能使很多在Oak City工作的外地人失望，因为邻近城市Elm City的市民俱乐部一直采取开放成员资格的政策，但在过去10年中只有25名外地人加入了Elm City的市民俱乐部。


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提纲
（1）只在Oak City工作的人也能理解本城的政治和经济。
（2）不是只有缴纳城市税的人才怎样花钱才能最好的发展城市。
（3）Elm City的情况不一定和本市一样。

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正文
In this argument, the arguer suggests that Oak City's Civic Club should be open only to the city residents and should restrict those people who work in Oak City but who live elsewhere to join the club, however, his suggestion suffers several serious flaws as follows because he wrongly assumes only residents understand local business and he makes a unreasonable analogy.

First of all, the arguer fails to assume that those people who work in Oak City but who live elsewhere cannot truly understand the business and politics of the city. In fact, those people maybe work at many companies or even the government of Oak City and have direct touch with the economical issues or political matters, so it is totally possible that they are very familiar with the business and politics of the city.

Secondly, the arguer wrongly thinks that only people who pay city taxes understand how to best use the money in order to improve the city. On the one hand, the nonresidents maybe pay other kinds of taxes, so they still have rights to interfere in issues of Oak City. On the other hand, even if they have no qualification to discuss the local issues, they are possibly the experts of economics or politics and can give good advices on how to best use the money. Thus to exclude nonresidents from the local issues is not wise.

Last but not the least, the arguer makes a false analogy between Oak City and Elm City and concludes to adopt the restriction will not disappoint the nonresidents employed in Oak City. It is very likely that the situation of Oak City is greatly different with that of Elm City. For example, if Elm City is very close and few people of other cities choose to work there, so there are only 25 nonresidents joining Elm City's Club even it has an open membership policy. However, maybe the nonresidents occupy a great part of the workers in Oak City, so they should not be neglected, otherwise, it is likely to hurt the feeling of those people and result their leaving from the Oak City, which possibly bring great influence on the local business or politics.

To sum up, the arguer is too cursory to make the suggestion without the supports of strong evidence. To make his suggestion more convincing, he has to take the facets discussed above into account, that is, to survey if nonresidents do have little help to the local issues and to consider the genuine situation of nonresidents in Oak City.

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Membership in Oak City's Civic Club—a club whose primary objective is to discuss local issues—should continue to be restricted to people who live in Oak City. People who work in Oak City but who live elsewhere cannot truly understand the business and politics of the city. It is important to restrict membership to city residents because only residents pay city taxes and therefore only residents understand how the money could best be used to improve the city. At any rate, restricting membership in this way is unlikely to disappoint many of the nonresidents employed in Oak City, since neighboring Elm City's Civic Club has always had an open membership policy, and only twenty-five nonresidents have joined Elm City's Club in the last ten years."

提纲
（1）只在Oak City工作的人也能理解本城的政治和经济。
（2）不是只有缴纳城市税的人才怎样花钱才能最好的发展城市。
（3）Elm City的情况不一定和本市一样。

正文
In this argument, the arguer suggests that Oak City's Civic Club should be open only to the city residents and should restrict those people who work in Oak City but who live elsewhere to join the club,可以把and 后面那句去掉，表达是一个意思但是开头要越简洁越好，说太多有summerize之嫌 however, his suggestion suffers several serious flaws as follows because he wrongly assumes only residents understand local business and he makes a unreasonable analogy.because后面真的没有必要说，如果你时间充裕的话^_^

First of all, the arguer fails to unfairly assume that those people who work in Oak City but who live elsewhere cannot truly understand the business and politics of the city. In fact, those people maybe work at many companies or even the government of Oak City and have direct touch with the economical issues or political matters, so it is totally possible that they are very familiar with the business and politics of the city.希望这里能有一个Thus,......

Secondly, the arguer wrongly thinks that only people who pay city taxes understand how to best use the money in order to improve the city. On the one hand, the nonresidents maybe pay other kinds of taxes, so they still have rights to interfere in issues of Oak City. On the other hand, even if they have no qualification to discuss the local issues, they are possibly the experts of economics or politics and can give good advices on how to best use the money. Thus, to exclude nonresidents from the local issues is not wise.这段论证的很好，alternative explanation很充分，两个层次很鲜明！

Last but not the least, the arguer makes a false analogy between Oak City and Elm City and concludes to adopt the restriction will not disappoint the nonresidents employed in Oak City. It is very likely that the situation of Oak City is greatly different with that of Elm City. For example, if Elm City is very closeexclusive and few people of other cities choose to work there, so then there are only 25 nonresidents joining Elm City's Club even it has an open membership policy. However, maybe the nonresidents occupy a great part of the workersessential employments in Oak City, so they should not be neglected, otherwise, it is likely to hurt the feeling of those people and result intheir leaving from the Oak City, which possibly bring great influence on the local business or politics.论证的很充分，提供一条思路：可能占Elm City的nonresidents的很大比例，那么就不能说明E市的外国人没有积极参加Club，当然如果你时间来得及的话可以就样本差异和数据模糊性分起两段进行攻击

To sum up, the arguer is too cursory to make the suggestion without the supports of strong evidence. To make his suggestion more convincing, he has to take the facets discussed above into account, that is, to survey if nonresidents do have little help to the local issues and to consider the genuine situation of nonresidents in Oak City.结尾可以，是自己的模板吧
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