issue212 Gter四月''无名''小组第34次作业-Expire7

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TOPIC：ISSUE 212 - "If a goal is worthy, then any means taken to attain it is justifiable."
WORDS：511          TIME：上午 12:39:47          DATE：2006-3-21

In accordance with the title of the assertion, people can justifiably take any ways to get a worthy goal, no matter whether those ways are good or not. On balance, although I fundamentally concede that if we expect achieve our aims, we should try our best to do accomplish them, the speaker goes too extremely, when it comes to overstating any means are reasonable and right.

To begin with, the threshold reason why I agree with the speaker's contention is that, in modern society, people should be aggressive and competitive in their goals and dreams. With the society keeping on developing without any cessation, our time and society require people bold and industrious. Consider that our society advanced in an unprecedented altitude, one the one hand, it can provide more chances to people achieve their own goals. On the other hand, they demand that people do their best to accomplish them. It is certain that almost all the successes should be invest a large deal of time, energy and money in today’s world. The chance to sit near to an apple tree and find the universal gravitation by watching falling apples is not generally happen again. Without the heart of losing sweat and blood, no one can arrive at his dream land.

Admittedly, I essentially disagree with the statement of the speaker that everyone ought to apply and utilize any methods to achieve their goals. For one thing, people should be enthusiastic in their goals, even though they come across many questions that can not be addressed by common ways. For another, in order to attain a goal, people may adopt some illegal, harmful and immortal ways, which is not justifiable and should be avoided and punished. Three examples that aptly illustarate this point involve the fields of politics, business and science. Turning to politics, I accept that politicians more or less apply some methods that can not amount to forthright. Yet, to the game of politics, utilizing some uncommon ways is sound and reasonable for the purposing of defending their countries and secures their people's benefits. On the contrary, each politician can not take it too far. Hitler and Nixon are the good examples to show that extremely using illegal ways to achieve their goals will lead to defeated and failure, even dead.

Secondly, as for the business, the leader of every corporation is responsive for maximize profits to their shareholders or owners. Normal competitions and strategies are encouraged and promoted in market-orientated economy. Nonetheless, sometimes, some leaders take harmful means in pursuit of profits. They make use of cheap material to make products, produce commodities not getting the healthy standard and decrease many instrument protecting employee’s safety. In actual fact, they greatly enhance profits through harmful methods.

Thirdly, when it comes to the science, some researchers and scholars holding goals to get fames, money and rights are fake their experimental data and results. In addition, some of them study and develop chemical weapon and unclear bomb to earn money. All of those behaviors are immortal and illegal, which will be come true if we pay more attention to consequence not procedures.

To sum up, due to analysis above and relevant examples, there is no doubt that people will draw a conclusion that everyone should try their best and endeavors to attain their goals in nowadays. On the other hand, those methods can not bring about terrible consequence to other people, our society, even and our world.


第一段一开始完全偏掉,改了好久才想到怎么切题.第一次换这种风格写,有点不习惯啊.

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从大的结构来看没有问题．
例子少，不好写的情况下，我会考虑多个分论点论证的尽管每个论证不丰满，分论点多，把握好文章主题与各个论点的关系，我觉得文章还是能充分论证的．一句话如果质量不高　就提高数量．
我最近在集中力量提高Ｉ速度，觉得我方法有问题．组长的速度没有问题，字数也好．而且词语句子都很出色．已经达到很高的高度了．组长说例子的论证问题不好展开，例子提高的途径我的看法是．应该具有一定的量，自己积累的或者看别人的．但更重要的是你段落Ｔ．Ｓ的选择．例子是工具，选择合适的Ｔ．Ｓ可以用到很多例子．也就是说，Ｔ．Ｓ不肪说的大一些．含糊一些．这样，我想说例子怎么样它就是怎么样的．比如ＮＯＢＥＬ的例子，我可以说是他的兴趣，也可以说他牺牲自己有意图去创造．更能说他不管一切达到目的就行．ＮＵＣＬＥＡＲ　ＷＥＡＰＯＮ　我能说它维护和平在ＣＯＬＤ　ＷＡＲ　也可以说带来灾难ＷＯＲＬＤ　ＷＡＲ　２．要打开思路最重要．

细节上比我出色很多，无论是句型还是词语．．．学习！　我就不胡说了

当然，组长Ｉ很牛，这些是我个人意见，见笑了．我决定用英语写提纲了，虽然不好记但这样我就不会再去翻译了．．呵呵．．．

[ 本帖最后由 suyue 于 2006-3-22 00:24 编辑 ]