issue210 7.28

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迟来的作业
好不容易才憋出第一篇I，痛苦。

NO.3 behaviors
210 "Most people choose a career on the basis of such pragmatic considerations as the needs of the economy, the relative ease of finding a job, and the salary they can expect to make. Hardly anyone is free to choose a career based on his or her natural talents or interest in a particular kind of work."
WORD:537           TIME:00:45:00       DATE:2006-7-28

大多数人找工作是基于实用性的考虑：经济需求、较易找到工作，希望拿到的薪水。很少有人自由地根据自己对某一份工作的才能和兴趣出发去选择职业。


According to this statement, economy, salary and other pragmatic considerations are responsible for people’s choices on a career. In other words, only few people could make decisions on a career based on their talents or interest. In my opinion, whether one has advantage over the other depends on the specific circumstances.

To begin with, the mainstream is that many people think a lot of economy, the relative ease of finding a job and salary. Living expenses are higher and higher in modern society, which force people to get high-salary jobs and have much more practical thoughts. And in an over-populated world, to get a well-paid and satisfied job is not easy. Pressures that come from our work, our living cost, our society, and people all around us, beyond all doubt, give rise to practical considerations of a career. To some extent, it seems that few people care about interest and genuine thoughts, only fortune and social status.

In addition, television, magazines, newspapers, radio and other means of mass communication have an strong impact on our daily lives, especially on attitudes of careers. We absorb messages that success is equal to making much money from soap operas and movies into our subconscious. And propaganda for these ways will change our views which stick to our interests and talents into an oppositive side. A recent research conducted by FuDan University among 300 students from 15 cities in China, reflects that there is a high percentage of students want to be enterprisers, movie stars and other occupations that could earn a lot of money whether they have real interest in them. On the contrary, only few of them prefer to be scientists and artists who would earn less money. This research indicates that economy and other pragmatic considerations have an considerably obvious influence on our decisions on a career nowadays. Moreover, it is frequently assumed that if enterprisers and movie stars could not have much financial reward, the number of these students who want to choose these careers will be decline.

However, it is important not to take this assertion about interest and the career to far. There are also some people who like what they are dong about. For example, many undergraduates now leave their hometowns and go to northwest China, whereas northwest China is underdeveloped and poor compared with the littoral, and offer much lower income. But they work there just because of their interest and other reasons rather than economy and salary. Moreover, many volunteers work in community service and day care centers. They render aid, perform a service, or assume an obligation voluntarily without consideration of salary. Such as blood donor and hospital volunteers. It is believed that, beyond the mainstream, many people honor their interest and talents and do not give up them.

Consequently, due to analysis mentioned above, which sometimes intertwine to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive than any one of them, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that either economy, the ease of getting a job, and salary, or interest and talents are factors that will exert an influence on people’s decisions on opting a job due to diverse ideas of different people.

[ 本帖最后由 evonayu 于 2006-8-1 22:05 编辑 ]

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According to this statement, economy, salary and other pragmatic considerations are responsible for people’s choices on a career. In other words, only few people could make decisions on a career based on their talents or interest. In my opinion( 以前我也喜欢用这个句型，后来新东方的老师说这是chinglish,比较地道的说法比如in my view,不知道准不准，可以考虑一下), whether one has advantage over the other depends on the specific circumstances.
1生活迫于人们用这样的态度选择工作
To begin with, the mainstream is that many people think a lot of economy, the relative ease of finding a job and salary. Living expenses are higher and higher in modern society, which force people to get high-salary jobs and have much more practical thoughts. And in an over-populated world, to get a well-paid and satisfied（satisfying）  job is not easy. Pressures that come from our work, our living cost, our society, and people all around us, beyond all doubt, give rise to practical considerations of a career. To some extent, it seems that few people care about interest and genuine thoughts, only fortune and social status (最后一句好像有点问题，读着不太顺) .
2社会无形中让人们在潜意识中形成能够赚钱的工作就能带来成功的观念
In addition, television, magazines, newspapers, radio and other means of mass communication have an（a） strong impact on our daily lives, especially on attitudes of careers. We absorb messages that success is equal to making much money from soap operas and movies into our subconscious. And propaganda for these ways will change our views which stick to our interests and talents into an oppositive side. A recent research conducted by FuDan University among 300 students from 15 cities in China, reflects that there is a high percentage of students want to be enterprisers, movie stars and other occupations that could earn a lot of money whether they have real interest in them. On the contrary, only few of them prefer to be scientists and artists who would earn less money. This research indicates that economy and other pragmatic considerations have an(a) considerably obvious influence on our decisions on a career nowadays. Moreover, it is frequently assumed that if enterprisers and movie stars could not have much financial reward, the number of these students who want to choose these careers will be decline.
3然而仍然有很多人凭兴趣选择自己的工作
However, it is important not to take this assertion about interest and the career to far. There are also some people who like what they are dong about. For example, many undergraduates now leave their hometowns and go to northwest China, whereas northwest China is underdeveloped and poor compared with the littoral, and offer much lower income. But they work there just because of their interest and other reasons rather than economy and salary. Moreover, many volunteers work in community service and day care centers. They render aid, perform a service, or assume an obligation voluntarily without consideration of salary. Such as blood donor and hospital volunteers. It is believed that, beyond the mainstream, many people honor their interest and talents and do not give up them.
感觉上这段短句用得较多，虽然也有长句。最好交错开，不要用太多过于短的简单句，有的地方能用从句的就用从句。当然也不能全是特别长的句子，保持适中。

Consequently, due to analysis mentioned above, which sometimes intertwine to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive than any one of them（这句感觉写得很好！）, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that either economy, the ease of getting a job, and salary, or interest and talents are factors that will exert an influence on people’s decisions on opting a job due to diverse ideas of different people.

总的来说，感觉挺好的。思路清晰，语言流畅。有两个贯词本来是a 写成了an， 是失误吗？
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