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TOPIC: ARGUMENT140 - The following appeared in a report of the Committee on Faculty Promotions and Salaries at Elm City University.

"During her seventeen years as a professor of botany, Professor Thomas has proved herself to be well worth her annual salary of $50,000. Her classes are among the largest at the university, demonstrating her popularity among students. Moreover, the money she has brought to the university in research grants has exceeded her salary in each of the last two years. Therefore, in consideration of Professor Thomas' demonstrated teaching and research abilities, we recommend that she receive a $10,000 raise and a promotion to Department Chairperson; without such a raise and promotion, we fear that Professor Thomas will leave Elm City University for another college."
WORDS: 435          TIME: 0:30:00          DATE: 2007-3-1

In this argument, the arguer claimed that the Elm University should raise Professor Thomas's salary by 10000 dollar per year and promote her to be Department Chairperson. To support his idea, the arguer cite the evidence that Professor Thomas has the largest class in the university, and what she brought to the university has exceeded her salary in the last two years. In addition, the arguer points out that if we don't do so, Professor Thomas might leave for other college. We can easily find how groundless the argument is.

On the first place, the arguer fail to convince us Professor Thomas is popular among students. The arguer tells us that Professor Thomas's class is one of the largest in the university, there is no caucal relationship with the popularity of  Professor Thomas. It is possible that not because the number of student in her major is largest, so many students have to attend her class since it is necessary of their major. It might be that many of the students don't like Professor Thomas at all.

On the second place, the fact that Professor Thomas has brought more money to university than her salary can not demonstrate any problem. The arguer only mentions the situations in last two years, we don't what happened before. It is might be that Professor Thomas did not bring to school any money before, but the school still gave her salary. So the money her brought to university might be not exceeded her salary in all. And there might be many other professors who bring money to university far more than Professor Thomas, the arguer tells us little about these.

Last but not the least, the arguer is based on the unwarranted assumption. He fail to provide any evidence that if we don't rise her salary and promote her, Professor Thomas would leave the university. The facts in the argument in the argument do not mention anything that Professor Thomas would leave university for another college. There is possibility that in salary in Elm City University is high enough, she would not get such salary in other college, so Professor Thomas feels very satisfied to stay in the Elm City University.

To conclude, the argument is not well reasoned. To let the argument convinced ,the arguer should cite more evidence that Professor Thomas is popular among students, and she is very valuable for the university. In addition, the arguer should provide more facts that if we don't raise her salary by 10000 dollar per year and promote her to be Department Chairperson, Professor Thomas would leave for other college.

[ 本帖最后由 宇文化天 于 2007-3-1 10:50 编辑 ]

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In this argument, the arguer claimed that the Elm University should raise Professor Thomas's salary by 10000 dollar per year and promote her to be Department Chairperson. To support his idea, the arguer cite the evidence that Professor Thomas has the largest class in the university, and what she brought to the university has exceeded her salary in the last two years. In addition, the arguer points out that if we don't do so, Professor Thomas might leave for other college. We can easily find how groundless the argument is.

On（in，下同） the first place, the arguer fails to convince us that Professor Thomas is popular among students. The arguer tells us that Professor Thomas's class is one of the largest in the university, there is no caucal(causal) relationship with the popularity of  Professor Thomas. It is possible that not because the number of students in her major is largest, so many students have to attend her class since it is necessary of their major（貌似必修课用required curse表达更好，这一句的意思不是很明白，because前面那个not是不是本来不要的？）. It might be that many of the students don't like Professor Thomas at all.

On the second place, the fact that Professor Thomas has brought more money to university than her salary can not demonstrate any problem. The arguer only mentions the situations in last two years, we don't know what happened before. It is might be that Professor Thomas did not bring to school any money before, but the school still gave her salary. So the money her brought to university might be not exceeded her salary in all. And there might be many other professors who bring money to university far more than Professor Thomas, the arguer tells us little about these.

Last but not the least, the arguer is based on the（an） unwarranted assumption. He fails to provide any evidence to show/prove/... that if we don't rise her salary and promote her, Professor Thomas would leave the university. The facts in the argument in the argument do not mention anything that Professor Thomas would leave university for another college. There is possibility that in salary in Elm City University is high enough, she would not get such salary in other college, so Professor Thomas feels very satisfied to stay in the Elm City University.

To conclude, the argument is not well reasoned. To let the argument convinced(convincing) ,the arguer should cite more evidence that Professor Thomas is popular among students, and she is very valuable for the university. In addition, the arguer should provide more facts that if we don't raise her salary by 10000 dollar per year and promote her to be Department Chairperson, Professor Thomas would leave for other college.

不错。条理比较清楚。全文应该统一时态。表达上还需要练习。
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