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[活动] 【09年1月-4月】TOEFL作文互改小组-之【TWE作文】1.20号作业 by 笨笨 [复制链接]

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发表于 2009-1-20 22:12:58 |显示全部楼层
[fly]:) [fly]笨笨[/fly] /fly]的作文·我代发一下

Do you agree with nowaday eating meals with family regularly is less important?

Honestly speaking I totally disagree with the statement. I concede that it may take much time to eat meals with family regularly, however the advantage of it turns out to be overwhelming the expenditure of time.

To begin with,  it is of great importance to realize the significant role of eating family meals in developing a harmonious environment. Whenever closing my eyes and picture the family dinner, I will see mum is in an apron and pearls, dad in a sweater and tie. The napkins are linen, steam rises from the green-bean pan, and even the dog listens intently to what is being said. This is where the family comes to transmit wisdom, embed expectations, confess, conspire and forgive. Concerning the pressure led by fierce competition in modern society, we can hardly spend much time on communicating with other family members. The irreconcilable question between the time of knowing your children and being an industrious white-collar worker is likely to be solved by eating family meals。

Secondly eating family meals does facilitate the development of good eating habit of your children. With the help of eating family meals, adolescents are influenced gradually by their parents' eating habit. Rather than telling your children how to arrange a nutritious family dinner, preparing family meals for them is definitely more effective. Moreover it is not necessary to force them to remember main nutrient ingredients of various vegetables. It is really disturbing for childeren to know tomato contains Vitamin C, carrots contains Carotene, potatoes contains fat. To avoid, just show him how to make vegetable salad. Still it may help you to build harmonious relationship with your children.

Eating family meals, however, may sometimes annoys you for the reason that it takes you much time to prepare a family meal and your naughty boy may stain your new tablecloth. Competent to mentioned advantages, it seems to be so tiny to take into consideration.All in all, eating family meals will always do favor to your family.

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发表于 2009-1-21 16:59:20 |显示全部楼层
怎么会有这么多单词不认得····:funk:

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发表于 2009-1-22 00:44:49 |显示全部楼层
Do you agree with nowadays eating meals with family regularly is less important?
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Honestly speaking I totally disagree with the statement. I concede that it may take much time to eat meals with family regularly, however, the advantage of it turns out to (be overwhelming) overwhelm the expenditure of time.

To begin with, it is of great importance to realize the significant role of eating family meals in developing a harmonious environment. Whenever closing my eyes and picture the family dinner, I will see mum is in an apron and pearls, dad in a sweater and tie. The napkins are linen, steam rises from the green-bean pan, and even the dog listens intently to what is being said. This is where the family comes to transmit wisdom, embed expectations, confess, conspire (这两个词有点吓人。。。,好像都是负面的哦)and forgive. Concerning the pressure led by fierce competition in modern society, we can hardly spend much time on communicating with other family members. The irreconcilable question between the time of knowing your children and being an industrious white-collar worker is likely to be solved by eating family meals。

Secondly eating family meals does (does 一般表示强调让步,后面接转折)facilitate the development of good eating habit of your children. With the help of eating family meals( regularly), adolescents are influenced gradually by their parents' eating habit. Rather than telling your children how to arrange a nutritious family dinner, preparing family meals for them is definitely more effective. Moreover it is not necessary to force them to remember main nutrient ingredients of various vegetables since, It is really disturbing for children to know tomato contains Vitamin C, carrots contain(s) Carotene, potatoes contains fat. To avoid it, just show him how to make vegetable salad. Still it may help you to build harmonious relationship with your children.6 v3 Z& m6 c3 J( |! j# x0 E


Eating family meals, however, may sometimes annoy(s) you for the reason that it takes you much time to prepare a family meal and your naughty boy may stain your new tablecloth. Competent to (compare with) mentioned advantages, it seems to be so tiny to take into consideration. All in all, eating family meals will always do favor to your family.

词汇量不错,可是可以多吧短句用结合成长句子,就会更连贯。
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