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[未归类] Dark_Tournament TOEFL-ibt作文小组qiangweici的 第8次作业 [复制链接]

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It is more important to use land for human need than to save land for endangered animals.

With the immense expansion of human communitis,potential land is gradually decreased to a certain extent.And this serious situation has put forward a dilemma before us---should the available land be saved for endangered animals or just kept for human need.As far as i am concerned,I have a firmly inclination for the former over the latter.

To begin with,diversity in species is considerably imperative to our human beings and the planet we live in.The existences of all the endangered species play an indispensable role in diversifying the biological species on earth.From the food chain theory,we are impressed and inserted with the idea that every living creature are relatively related with each other;the extinction of others can bring out a vital deleterious influence to our human beings through affecting the food chain.Thus,from the perspective of our essencial interests,definitely the potential land should be used in helping endangred animals' servival.

Further more,as the most competent specie on earth,the distinctive feature of humanity in nature requires us to do so.we,human beings are endowed with the feelings of compassion and sympathy which distinguish us from others,without them,the foundation of our tradition would be vanished gradually.In order to fulfill the obligation of being a man,we should devote the available land to save endangred species without hesitation rather than only considering the our own need selfishly.

Finally,the survival of some endangered animals has elevated the living quality of human beings to a great extent.The existence of panda is an apparent and typical example which contributes to my position.This lovely animal has created abandunt fun in entertaining us,not to mention Tuantuan and Yuanyuan from them has bridged the connetion and filled the gap between the mainland and Taiwan considerablly.Taking the devotion of them into consideration,every effort should be spared to helping the survival of them,at least an amount of  land.

Under the backgroud of limited potential land,our need above survival could be ignored while the necessary demand from endanered animals to land could not be omitted.All in all,at the risk of addressing the issue to direct,I strongly believed that  saving land for those endangered species matters more than keeping land for human land.

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With the immense expansion of human communitis(communities),potential land is gradually decreased to a certain extent.And this serious situation has put forward a dilemma before us---should the available land be saved for endangered animals or just kept for human need.As far as i am concerned,I have a firmly (firm)inclination for the former over the latter.

To begin with,diversity in species(species diversity) is considerably imperative to our human beings and the planet we live in.The existences of all the endangered species play an indispensable role in diversifying the(删) biological species on earth.From the food chain theory,we are impressed and inserted with the idea that every living creature are relatively(删) related with each other;the extinction of others can bring out a vital deleterious influence to our human beings through affecting the food chain.Thus,from the perspective of our essenc(t)ial interests,definitely the potential land should be used in helping endangred animals' servival.1 F2
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Further more,as the most competent specie on earth,the distinctive feature of humanity in nature requires us to do so.we,human beings are endowed with the feelings of compassion and sympathy which distinguish us from others,without them,the foundation of our tradition would be vanished gradually.In order to fulfill the obligation of being a man,we should devote the available land to save endangred species without hesitation rather than only considering the our own need selfishly.

Finally,the survival of some endangered animals has elevated the living quality of human beings to a great extent.The existence of panda is an apparent and typical example which contributes to my position.This lovely animal has created abandunt fun in entertaining us,not to mention Tuantuan and Yuanyuan from them(删) has bridged the connetion and filled the gap between the mainland and Taiwan considerablly.Taking the devotion of them into consideration,every effort should be spared to helping the survival of them,at least an amount of  land.

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Under the backgrou(n)d of limited potential land,our need above survival could be ignored while the necessary demand from endanered animals to land could not be omitted.All in all,at the risk of addressing the issue to direct,I strongly believed that  saving land for those endangered species matters is more important than keeping land for human land。

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It is more important to use land for human need than to save land for endangered animals." G& z! _& e  k: M" ?6 s% K( O7 [

  C3 C$ {. v( K6 R' n5 `3 I) n8 c, RWith the immense expansion of human communitis,potential (+usable )land is gradually decreased to a certain extent.And this serious situation has put forward a dilemma before us---should the available land be saved for endangered animals or just kept for human need.As far as i am concerned,I have a firmly inclination for the former over the latter(我觉得题目应该是重在将land 留给endangered animal是否重要,不是给不给的问题,存在一个比较).  ?, J, V0 w. I* I# y
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To begin with,diversity in species is considerably imperative to our human beings and the planet we live in.The existences of all the endangered species play an indispensable role in diversifying the biological species on earth.From the food chain theory,we are impressed and inserted with the idea that every living creature are relatively related with each other;the extinction of others can bring out a vital deleterious influence to our human beings through affecting the food chain.Thus,from the perspective of our essencial interests,definitely the potential land should be used in helping endangred animals' servival." ]* u6 O- S) k* B) `. X' V

4 K6 C+ l4 b/ z& a; U8 l1 I" M  aFurther more,as the most competent specie on earth,the distinctive feature of humanity in nature requires us to do so.we,human beings are endowed with the feelings of compassion and sympathy which distinguish us from others,without them,the foundation of our tradition would be vanished gradually.In order to fulfill the obligation of being a man,we should devote the available land to save endangred species without hesitation rather than only considering the our own need selfishly. # ^! w( x; a: K6 O( D& e

0 [- X, _; Y. B6 @! A) gFinally,the survival of some endangered animals has elevated the living quality of human beings to a great extent.The existence of panda is an apparent and typical example which contributes to my position.This lovely animal has created abandunt fun in entertaining us,not to mention Tuantuan and Yuanyuan from them has bridged the connetion and filled the gap between the mainland and Taiwan considerablly.Taking the devotion of them into consideration,every effort should be spared to helping the survival of them,at least an amount of  land.8 P/ B# `! a4 o# W& O) R

3 G) s! {; T6 `& W5 M# {Under the backgroud of limited potential land,our need above survival could be ignored while the necessary demand from endanered animals to land could not be omitted.All in all,at the risk of addressing the issue to direct,I strongly believed that  saving land for those endangered species matters more than keeping land for human land

写的不错, 词语和句型比较丰富, 小毛病稍注意一下
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