TOEFL 2009上半年-Dark_Tournament写作组 恩恩的囡囡的 第十二次作业

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Many teachers assign homework to students everyday. Do you think that daily homework is necessary for students? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

              It's a good idea for the teachers to assign daily homework
Eliminating everything useless, I want to say that the idea, teachers should assign daily homework to students, is my support idea.
As Hermann Ebbinghaus’s curve shows that we can remember 44.2% things which we learned after 1 hour, while only 33.7% after 1 day. It obviously gives us a lesson. Whatever we learn or study, daily review is unavoidable. Because if we don’t go through the things we learned in the day, only 33.7% is left the next day. So teachers’ assigning daily homework to students is a useful way to help the learners remember knowledge.
The moment to do the homework is a time for summarizing. Then, as long as we finish the homework, we will clearly know what we haven’t understood. It’s a chance for us to stabilize our knowledge. Finding out the shortage, and we can fix the leaking hole. As Confucius says, it’s really a pleasure to go over what we have learned. So why don’t we take the chance when the teachers assign daily homework to us students to go through the things we learned.
Besides the students can get benefits from the daily homework, the teachers can also get something useful. Daily homework is a tool that can help the teachers know the quality of their teaching. They can see what they themselves need to focus on, at the other hand, what the students are lacking of. So the assigning daily homework is not only helpful for the students, but also for the teachers.
From all the above, my view is clearly showed. And for more clarity, it’s allowable to repeat that it’s a wising idea for the teachers to assign daily homework to the students. And it’s necessary.

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Eliminating everything useless(最好不这样写，开头是考官查看的重要一环，尽量写多一点，写好一点）, I want to say that the idea, teachers should assign daily homework to students, is my support idea.




Hermann Ebbinghaus’s curve shows that we can remember 44.2% of things which we learned after 1 hour, while only 33.7% after 1 day. （这个引用很有说服力 :loveliness:  但是它应作为一个论据，开头应该说明你的论点，例如，作业能帮做学生巩固知识）It obviously gives us a lesson. Whatever we learn or study（2选1就行）, daily review is unavoidable. Because if we don’t go through the things we learned in the day, only 33.7% is left the next day. So teachers’ assigning（删除，有点啰嗦） daily homework to students is a useful way to help the learners remember knowledge.



The moment to do the homework is a time for summarizing. Then（删除）, as long as we finish the homework, we will clearly know what we haven’t understood. It’s a chance for us to stabilize our knowledge. Finding out the shortage, and（连词两端成分应一致） we can fix the leaking hole. As Confucius says, it’s really a pleasure to go over what we have learned. So why don’t we take the chance when the teachers assign daily homework to us students to go through the things we learned.有点罗嗦




Besides the students can get benefits from the daily homework, the teachers can also get something useful. Daily homework is a tool that can help the teachers know the quality of their teaching. They can see what they themselves need to focus on, at the other hand, what the students are lacking of. So the assigning daily homework is not only helpful for the students, but also for the teachers.



Fall the above, my view is clearly showed. And for more clarity, it’s allowable to repeat that it’s a wising idea for the teachers to assign daily homework to the students. And it’s necessary.

建议： 1. 论点、论据要分清楚，论据采用例子展开
          2. 尽量少用 something、things 这类抽象词，少用第一人称us we our ，用第三人称显得更客观
          3. 结构是5段，但是字数再多一点

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呵呵，谢谢你的指点~我会加油改正的~ 2# wazza