5.6月份 cracking ibt essay! 小组写作组 rong0816的 第4次作业

rong0816UID: 2612194

More and more parents try their best to afford their children a better circumstance for their children's grow-up. Most of them consider it as an important factor for their children to live in a big city, rather than in the country, owing to the children can achieve more opportunities to study. However, I cannot agree with them and I strongly agree that the countryside is better to the children.

Obviously, the greatest difference between the countryside and the big cities is the environment, which is seriously polluted in the big cities, while the air is still clean in the countryside. Admittedly, the health is of vital importance to children, not only in their childhood, but also through their whole lives. Living in the countryside can more easily, than in the big cities, access to a better body. In the current, more and more people would like to purchase houses near the countryside, in order to get access to the natural. As you know, the best way to approach to natural is to live in it.

Furthermore, it is a perfect way for children to get instruction from the natural, I mean, the natural is simple a book. We get a sense of honor when we see the mountains. And we get the meaning of broad and profound as we see the sea.
Constant dropping wearing away a stone teaches us perseverance, while the blue sky tells us tolerant. A lot can be learnt from the natural, meanwhile, the knowledge is good to arouse the children’s imagination as well as creation, which will play a useful role in their further study.

Another reason that I oppose the children to live in the big cities is that there is too much lure in the big cities, such as televisions, computer games, and the internet. More and more youngers commit crime in the modern society, owing to they contract something too early before they can control themselves very well.

For all the reasons above, I consider that it is better for children to live in the countryside.

zhuyongchaochaoUID: 2616114

More and more parents try their best to afford  (offer)their children a better circumstance for their children's grow-up. Most of them consider it as an important factor for their children to live in a big city, rather than in the country, owing to the children can achieve more opportunities to study. However, I cannot agree with them and I strongly agree that the countryside is better to the children.% E$ S, F: \3 |& ]1 c
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观点宣明论点突出，很好。
Obviously, the greatest difference between the countryside and the big cities is the environment, which is seriously polluted in the big cities, while the air is still clean in the countryside. Admittedly, the health is of vital importance to children, not only in their childhood, but also through their whole lives. Living in the countryside can  （be ) more easily, than in the big cities, access to a better body. In the current, more and more people would like to purchase houses near the countryside, in order to get access to the natural. As you know, the best way to approach to natural is to live in it.
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句式用的不错。
Furthermore, it is a perfect way for children to get instruction from the natural, I mean, the natural（nature) is simple( simply) a book. We get a sense of honor when we see the mountains. And we get the meaning of broad and profound as we see the sea. 精彩的句子5 T4 {5 u$ [7 l$ ]( kConstant dropping wearing away a stone teaches us perseverance, while the blue sky tells us tolerant. A lot can be learnt from the natural, meanwhile, the knowledge is good to arouse the children’s imagination as well as creation, which will play a useful role in their further study.' y$ a( x7 d' f" \1 i$ W/ Y
这段句子表述很形象生动。

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+ X5 V0 U# V( [- r  ]( XFor all the reasons above, I consider that it is better for children to live in the countryside.
结构清晰，论点突出，例证充分。

rong0816UID: 2612194

2# zhuyongchaochao

谢谢，每次smile改都觉得信心大增，smile有双“发现美好”的眼睛  （*-*）

rong0816UID: 2612194

把范文放在这里

Having grown up in the country myself, I can say without a doubt that I want my own children to grow up in the city. Life in the city is incomparably better for children than life in the country. The city has better schools, health care, jobs, and more exposure to the outside world.

The two most important things in any child's life are health and education. In the country, if children get sick, there are no good hospitals to take them to. Families are often so poor that they can't afford to send all of their
children to school, and the schools are usually of low quality anyway. In the cities, on the other hand, health care
facilities and schools are of excellent quality.

Children from cities also have a much higher chance of getting into excellent universities. City universities
have large numbers of spaces reserved for local residents while they have relatively fewer spaces for students from the countryside. If I want my child to have a good chance of getting into a good university, I would raise
them in a city.

City salaries are significantly higher than salaries in the country. Jobs in the city are also much easier, on average, than jobs in the country. A worker in the country might spend 14 hours a day laboring outdoors in the
fields and make much less money per month than the city worker who typically works only eight hours a day. I
want my child to grow up and get a good, high-paying job. A better place to find those jobs is in a city.

Finally, I want my children to grow up into a world that is larger than just their immediate surroundings. In a city they will have a chance to meet people from all over the country and all over the world. They will have
chances to absorb history and culture from the cities parks, theatres, and museums. Only in the city will they have the chance to be truly global citizens.

分析：不要急于同意或者不同意这个观点。因为哪个回答都有些片面。地点并不是影响孩子成长的唯一因素，也不是众多因素中最重要的因素。

生活在城市的优缺点

生活在乡村的优缺点

也可以用一系列“不一定”的事实来反驳题目中观点，比如：

在乡村长大的孩子不一定比在城市长大的孩子淳朴(honest; simple; simple sentiments)；

在乡村长大的孩子不一定比在城市长大的孩子健康(healthy)；

不同的阶段有不同的选择：

学龄前儿童，小学生在哪里都无所谓

初中、高中就可能在大城市更好一点