issue 13 [dancing in the dark] 小组第一次作业

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第一次写issue, 诚请大家指教！

ISSUE 13
"Many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. The governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct."

outline:
A. 开头，总起；
    语言作为交流的工具和文化的载体具有其不可替代的地位，然而，目前许多的语言都濒临着消失的困境，政府有责任采取措施组织本国语言的消亡；
B. 一些语言目前正面临的严峻的形式以及产生这一现象的原因；
C. 过渡，转入对于为何要保护语言的谈论；
D. 语言消失的后果和保护语言的意义；
E. 政府应该怎样采取措施保护语言；
F. 结尾



Languages, primarily served as vehicles for people’s ideas and feelings, have played an irreplaceable role in spreading and preserving the cultures behind. As the prevailing of a language will possibly lead to the prosperity of a certain culture, its decline and disappearance, on the other hand, may probably have a disastrous impact on the culture, and even the nation and the people, for languages are undoubtedly the foundation of culture and civilization, and sometimes, even the prerequisite of the existence of a people. Unfortunately, however, a great amount of languages spoken by minorities are facing the danger of extinction for various reasons. This grave condition has urgently called for the attention of the governments and their actions preventing the irreversible tragedy from happening.

According to the recent survey conducted by UNESCO, more than 2500 kinds of languages are in the severe danger of dying out, which account for one third of the total amount in the world. Compared by the data of 2001, the number has been multiplying, indicating the escalation and globalization of this problem. This appalling condition may be originated from the following factors. First, the globalization of commercial industry will inevitably lead to the unification of language for the convenience of communicating with people all over the world. However, this means the major languages will become more and more widely used while the minor ones are going to extinction silently. Second, the imbalance of economic development adds to the adversity of the languages using by few people in poor areas, for the languages used in developed areas will probably dominate the ones in the undeveloped at the time they come across with each other. A proving example is the prevailing of Cantonese in China since the Reform and Opening-up. This, to some extent, is like what happened during the war, that the invasion of territory is often accompanied by the invasion of the language and culture. What is worse, it seems that the youngsters have not realized the importance of employing and protecting their own languages, instead, they are turning to some other languages to seek a sense of fashion, authority or even dignity. Besides, the rapid advancement in technology provides us with multiple facilities to get in touch with universal languages, which means little opportunities for dialects.

With the pace of the modernization and globalization has become more rapidly, the danger of the less-known languages is seemingly inevitable, the trend irrepressible. But why should the governments take pains to protect them from disappearing?

The direct and most evident result may be the irredeemable loss of a unique culture, knowledge, conception and ideas it conveys. For the native speakers of the extinguished languages, it seems impossible for them to retrieve the sense of individual identity with the loss of languages. And the danger will become more severe when it comes to the future of the nation, as Johan Wolfgang von Goethe, one of the most famous poets in human history, once stated that “The decline of literature indicates the decline of a nation; the two keep in their downward tendency. In the terms of the whole world, the influence will be more significant and far-reaching. As linguists and anthropologists permanently loss this resource for revealing the process of language evolvement in human history, as a result, some mystery may remain unknown eternally, like the Maya mystery.

From my standpoint, it is high time for the government of the country laid enough emphases and offer sufficient financial support to prevent the nation’s precious heirlooms from missing in the irresistible trends of globalization. One practicable action is to establish museums and research centers to collect, preserve and study the documents of the language, in order to set up the languages documentation. However, the essential part of the languages persistence should be the revitalization process, for only the language is actively spoken by a considerable amount of people can it completely come out of danger and be resurrected. So it is of more significance to encourage the people especially the young to use their own language as much as possible.

As the treasures of all the human beings, every language is worthy protecting. This responsibility is largely rested on the shoulders’ of the governments, and it is also the obligation for everybody to prevent our culture-heritage from dying out.

fingshangUID: 2469559

先占着 后头慢慢改

subtoryUID: 2298678

Languages,primarily served as vehicles for people’s ideas and feelings, have played anirreplaceable role in spreading and preserving the cultures behind(?).As the prevailing of a language will possibly lead to the prosperity of acertain culture, its decline and disappearance, on the other hand, may probablyhave a disastrous impact on the culture, and even the nation and the people,for languages are undoubtedly the foundation of culture and civilization, andsometimes, even the prerequisite of the existence of a people. Unfortunately,however, a great amount of languages spoken by minorities are facing the dangerof extinction for various reasons. This grave condition has urgently called forthe attention of the governments and their actions preventing the irreversibletragedy from happening.
According tothe recent survey conducted by UNESCO, more than 2500 kinds of languages are inthe severe danger of dying out, which account for one third of the total amountin the world. Compared by the data of 2001, the number has been multiplying,indicating the escalation and globalization of this problem. This appallingcondition may be originated from the following factors. First, theglobalization of commercial industry will inevitably lead to the unification oflanguage for the convenience of communicating with people all over the world.However, this means the major languages will become more and more widely usedwhile the minor ones are going to extinction silently. Second, the imbalance ofeconomic development adds to the adversity of the languages using by few peoplein poor areas, for the languages used in developed areas will probably dominatethe ones in the undeveloped at the time they come across with each other. Aproving example is the prevailing of Cantonese in China since the Reform andOpening-up. This, to some extent, is like what happened during the war, thatthe invasion of territory is often accompanied by the invasion of the languageand culture. What is worse, it seems that the youngsters have not realized theimportance of employing and protecting their own languages, instead, they areturning to some other languages to seek a sense of fashion, authority or evendignity. Besides, the rapid advancement in technology provides us with multiplefacilities to get in touch with universal languages, which means littleopportunities for dialects.
With the paceof the modernization and globalization has become(becoming) more rapidly(rapid,或把becoming改成growing),the danger of the less-known languages is seemingly inevitable, the trend irrepressible(这个词貌似通常把情绪的抑制不住). But why should the governments take pains to protect them fromdisappearing?
The direct andmost evident result may be the irredeemable loss of a unique culture,knowledge, conception and ideas it conveys. For the native speakers of theextinguished languages, it seems impossible for them to retrieve the sense ofindividual identity with the loss of languages. And the danger will become moresevere when it comes to the future of the nation, as Johan Wolfgang von Goethe,one of the most famous poets in human history, once stated that “The decline ofliterature indicates the decline of a nation; the two keep in their downwardtendency. In the terms of the whole world, the influence will be moresignificant and far-reaching. As linguists and anthropologists permanently loss(lose)this resource for revealing the process of language evolvement in humanhistory, as a result,(删,或者把之前的as删去)some mystery may remain unknown eternally, like the Maya mystery.
From mystandpoint, it is high time for the government of the country laid(tolay) enough emphases and offer sufficient financial support toprevent the nation’s precious heirlooms from missing in the irresistible trendsof globalization. One practicable(practical) action is to establishmuseums and research centers to collect, preserve and study the documents ofthe language, in order to set up the languages documentation. However, theessential part of the languages persistence should be the revitalizationprocess, for only the language is actively spoken by a considerable amount ofpeople can it completely come out of danger and be resurrected. So it is ofmore significance to encourage the people especially the young to use their ownlanguage as much as possible.
As thetreasures of all the human beings, every language is worthy protecting. Thisresponsibility is largely rested on the shoulders’ of the governments, and itis also the obligation for everybody to prevent our culture-heritage from dyingout.
非常不错，逻辑清晰，说理也很到位，语言也很不错，只是偶尔有些小错误，不影响大局。

熹僖UID: 2627688

Languages, primarily served as vehicles for people’s ideas and feelings, have played an irreplaceable role in spreading and preserving the cultures behind. As the prevailing of a language will possibly lead to the prosperity of a certain culture, its decline and disappearance, on the other hand, may probably have a disastrous impact on the culture, and even the nation and the people, for languages are undoubtedly the foundation of culture and civilization, and sometimes, even the prerequisite of the existence of a people. Unfortunately, however, a great amount of languages spoken by minorities are facing the danger of extinction for various reasons. This grave condition has urgently called for the attention of the governments and their actions preventing the irreversible tragedy from happening.

According to the recent survey conducted by UNESCO, more than 2500 kinds of languages are in the severe danger of dying out, which account for one third of the total amount in the world. Compared by the data of 2001, the number has been multiplying, indicating the escalation and globalization of this problem. This appalling condition may be originated from the following factors. First, the globalization of commercial industry will inevitably lead to the unification of language for the convenience of communicating with people all over the world. However, this means the major languages will become more and more widely used while the minor ones are going to extinction silently. Second, the imbalance of economic development adds to the adversity of the languages using by few people in poor areas, for the languages used in developed areas will probably dominate the ones in the undeveloped at the time they come across with each other. A proving example is the prevailing of Cantonese in China since the Reform and Opening-up. This, to some extent, is like what happened during the war, that the invasion of territory is often accompanied by the invasion of the language and culture. What is worse, it seems that the youngsters have not realized the importance of employing and protecting their own languages, instead, they are turning to some other languages to seek a sense of fashion, authority or even dignity. Besides, the rapid advancement in technology provides us with multiple facilities to get in touch with universal languages, which means little opportunities for dialects.

With the pace of the modernization and globalization has become more rapidly, the danger of the less-known languages is seemingly inevitable, the trend irrepressible. But why should the governments take pains to protect them from disappearing?

The direct and most evident result may be the irredeemable loss of a unique culture, knowledge, conception and ideas it conveys. For the native speakers of the extinguished languages, it seems impossible for them to retrieve the sense of individual identity with the loss of languages. And the danger will become more severe when it comes to the future of the nation, as Johan Wolfgang von Goethe, one of the most famous poets in human history, once stated that “The decline of literature indicates the decline of a nation; the two keep in their downward tendency. In the terms of the whole world, the influence will be more significant and far-reaching. As linguists and anthropologists permanently loss this resource for revealing the process of language evolvement in human history, as a result, some mystery may remain unknown eternally, like the Maya mystery.

From my standpoint, it is high time for the government of the country laid enough emphases and offer sufficient financial support to prevent the nation’s precious heirlooms from missing in the irresistible trends of globalization. One practicable action is to establish museums and research centers to collect, preserve and study the documents of the language, in order to set up the languages documentation. However, the essential part of the languages persistence should be the revitalization process, for only the language is actively spoken by a considerable amount of people can it completely come out of danger and be resurrected. So it is of more significance to encourage the people especially the young to use their own language as much as possible.

As the treasures of all the human beings, every language is worthy protecting. This responsibility is largely rested on the shoulders’ of the governments, and it is also the obligation for everybody to prevent our culture-heritage from dying out.

文章语言很不错，我的语言比较弱，就不说什么了，呵呵~
结构清晰。但是我想提出一点疑问，文中说出的仿佛是比较普遍的语言消失现状及我们应该保护。作者显然完全同意题中看法。但我认为，题目是比较有针对性的。如是lesser-kown语言的消失，还有当地政府应给与保护。但是作者仿佛都没有给与关注。再写到，应从孩子身上抓起，学习语言，建议很好，但是转念一想，这貌似不可行，因为题目指的语言是那只有少数人说的，即将消失的语言，怎么可能教给孩子说，这没有实际意义。
感觉作者的论证全面，有条理，而且关于为什么会出现语言消失的现状原因分析也深入到位。但总体看来有些脱离题目语境，有点“避重就轻”。这是我的一点感觉，我对isssue究竟应该怎样写也在迷茫状态，不对的地方，还希望指正。

吉子轩UID: 2623412

Languages, primarily served as vehicles for people’s ideas and feelings, have played an irreplaceable role in spreading and preserving the cultures behind. As the prevailing of a language will possibly lead to the prosperity of a certain culture, its decline and disappearance, on the other hand, may probably have a disastrous impact on the culture, and even the nation and the people, for languages are undoubtedly the foundation of culture and civilization, and sometimes, even the prerequisite of the existence of a people. Unfortunately, however, a great amount of languages spoken by minorities are facing the danger of extinction for various reasons. This grave condition has urgently called for the attention of the governments and their actions preventing the irreversible tragedy from happening.

According to the recent survey conducted by UNESCO, more than 2500 kinds of languages are in the severe danger of dying out, which account for one third of the total amount in the world. Compared by (改成with？)the data of 2001, the number has been multiplying （or multiplied?）, indicating (indicates?)the escalation and globalization of this problem. This appalling condition may be originated from the following factors. First, the globalization of commercial industry will inevitably lead to the unification of language for the convenience of communicating with people all over the world. However, this means the major languages will become more and more widely used while the minor ones are going to extinction(extinct) silently. Second, the imbalance of economic development adds to(aggravates) the adversity of the languages using by few people in poor areas, for the languages used in developed areas will probably dominate the ones in the undeveloped at the time they come across with each other. A proving example is the prevailing of Cantonese in China since the Reform and Opening-up. This, to some extent, is like what happened during the war, that the invasion of territory is often accompanied by the invasion of the language and culture. What is worse, it seems that the youngsters have not realized the importance of employing and protecting their own languages, instead, they are turning to some other languages to seek a sense of fashion, authority or even dignity(很新意). Besides, the rapid advancement in technology provides us with multiple facilities to get in touch with universal languages, which means little opportunities for dialects（道题目说的language是指dialects？我也不清楚）.

With the pace of the modernization and globalization has become（becoming，因为这是个with的伴随从句，可能用becoming好一点） more rapidly（这个应该是修饰modernization和globalization的吧，这俩是名词，不应该用副词rapidly来修饰，但如过改成rapid貌似也不太好，用obvious不知道怎么样）, the danger of the less-known languages is seemingly inevitable, the trend is irrepressible. But why should the governments take pains to protect them from disappearing?

The direct and most evident result may be the irredeemable loss of a（去掉，因为后面的knowledge是不可数的。。。） unique cultures, knowledge, conceptions and ideas it conveys. For the native speakers of the extinguished languages, it seems impossible for them to retrieve the sense of individual identity with the loss of languages. And the danger will become more severe when it comes to the future of the nation, as Johan Wolfgang von Goethe, one of the most famous poets in human history, once stated that “The decline of literature indicates the decline of a nation; the two keep in their downward tendency“. In the（去掉） terms of the whole world, the influence will be more significant and far-reaching. As linguists and anthropologists permanently loss this resource for revealing the process of language evolvement in human history, as a result, some mystery may remain unknown eternally, like the Maya mystery.

From my standpoint, it is high time for the government of the country laid enough emphases and offer sufficient financial support to prevent the nation’s precious heirlooms from missing in the irresistible trends of globalization. One practicable action is to establish museums and research centers to collect, preserve and study the documents of the language, in order to set up the languages（language） documentation. However, the essential part of the languages（language） persistence should be the revitalization process, for only the language is actively spoken by a considerable amount of people can it completely come out of danger and be resurrected. So it is of more significance to encourage the people especially the young to use their own language as much as possible.

As the treasures of all the human beings, every language is worthy protecting. This responsibility is largely rested on the shoulders’（是不是不小心打了个小撇号？:p ） of the governments, and it is also the obligation for everybody to prevent our culture-heritage from dying out.
的确写的很漂亮~！

勋勋UID: 2646576

Languages, primarily served as vehicles for people’s ideas and feelings, have played an irreplaceable role in spreading and preserving the cultures behind. As the prevailing of a language will possibly lead to the prosperity of a certain culture, its decline and disappearance, on the other hand, may probably have a disastrous impact on the culture, and even the nation and the people, for languages are undoubtedly the foundation of culture and civilization, and sometimes, even the prerequisite of the existence of a people. Unfortunately, however, a great amount of languages spoken by minorities are facing the danger of extinction for various reasons. This grave condition has urgently called for the attention of the governments and their actions preventing the irreversible tragedy from happening.

According to the recent survey conducted by UNESCO, more than 2500 kinds of languages are in the severe danger of dying out, which account for one third of the total amount in the world. Compared by the data of 2001, the number has been multiplying, indicating the escalation and globalization of this problem. This appalling condition may be originated from the following factors. First, the globalization of commercial industry will inevitably lead to the unification of language for the convenience of communicating with people all over the world. However, this means the major languages will become more and more widely used while the minor ones are going to extinction silently. Second, the imbalance of economic development adds to the adversity of the languages using by few people in poor areas, for the languages used in developed areas will probably dominate the ones in the undeveloped at the time they come across with each other.（这里我觉得有点小小的比喻模糊） A proving example is the prevailing of Cantonese in China since the Reform and Opening-up. This, to some extent, is like what happened during the war, that the invasion of territory is often accompanied by the invasion of the language and culture. What is worse, it seems that the youngsters have not realized the importance of employing and protecting their own languages, instead, they are turning to some other languages to seek a sense of fashion, authority or even dignity. Besides, the rapid advancement in technology provides us with multiple facilities to get in touch with universal languages, which means little opportunities for dialects.

With the pace of the modernization and globalization has become more rapidly, the danger of the less-known languages is seemingly inevitable, the trend irrepressible. But why should the governments take pains to protect them from disappearing?

The direct and most evident result may be the irredeemable loss of a unique culture, knowledge, conception and ideas it conveys. For the native speakers of the extinguished languages, it seems impossible for them to retrieve the sense of individual identity with the loss of languages. And the danger will become more severe when it comes to the future of the nation, as Johan Wolfgang von Goethe, one of the most famous poets in human history, once stated that “The decline of literature indicates the decline of a nation; the two keep in their downward tendency. In the terms of the whole world, the influence will be more significant and far-reaching. As linguists and anthropologists permanently loss this resource for revealing the process of language evolvement in human history, as a result, some mystery may remain unknown eternally, like the Maya mystery.

From my standpoint, it is high time for the government of the country laid enough emphases and offer sufficient financial support to prevent the nation’s precious heirlooms from missing in the irresistible trends of globalization. One practicable action is to establish museums and research centers to collect, preserve and study the documents of the language, in order to set up the languages documentation. However, the essential part of the languages persistence should be the revitalization process, for only the language is actively spoken by a considerable amount of people can it completely come out of danger and be resurrected. So it is of more significance to encourage the people especially the young to use their own language as much as possible.

As the treasures of all the human beings, every language is worthy protecting. This responsibility is largely rested on the shoulders’ of the governments, and it is also the obligation for everybody to prevent our culture-heritage from dying out.
  总体上有公认的，小弟就不说了::D

kuyuepoUID: 2468938

Languages, primarily served as vehicles for people’s ideas and feelings, have played an irreplaceable role in spreading and preserving the cultures behind. As the prevailing of a language will possibly lead to the prosperity of a certain culture, its decline and disappearance, On the other hand, may probably have a disastrous impact on the culture, and even the nation and the people, for languages are undoubtedly the foundation of culture and civilization, and sometimes, even the prerequisite of the existence of a people. (这句话够长)Unfortunately, however, a great amount of languages spoken by minorities are facing the danger of extinction for various reasons. This grave condition has urgently called for the attention of the governments and their actions preventing the irreversible tragedy from happening.

According to the recent survey conducted by UNESCO, more than 2500 kinds of languages are in the severe danger of dying out, which account for one third of the total amount in the world. Compared by the data of 2001, the number has been multiplying, indicating the escalation and globalization of this problem. This appalling condition may be originated from the following factors. First, the globalization of commercial industry will inevitably lead to the unification of language for the convenience of communicating with people all over the world. However, this means the major languages will become more and more widely used while the minor ones are going to extinction silently. Second, the imbalance of economic development adds to the adversity of the languages using by few people in poor areas, for the languages used in developed areas will probably dominate the ones in the undeveloped at the time they come across with each other. A proving example is the prevailing of Cantonese（广东话） in China since the Reform and Opening-up. This, to some extent, is like what happened during the war, that （这边不能用that吧）the invasion of territory is often accompanied by the invasion of the language and culture. What is worse, it seems that the youngsters have not realized the importance of employing and protecting their own languages, instead, they are turning to some other languages to seek a sense of fashion, authority or even dignity. Besides, the rapid advancement in technology provides us with multiple facilities to get in touch with universal languages, which means little opportunities for dialects.个人觉得例子也是不怎么合理，dialect 不确定能够用在这里

With the pace of the modernization and globalization has become （became）more rapidly, the danger of the less-known languages is seemingly inevitable, the trend(is) irrepressible. But why should the governments take pains to protect them from disappearing?

The direct and most evident result may be the irredeemable loss of a unique culture, knowledge, conception and ideas it conveys. For the native speakers of the extinguished languages, it seems impossible for them to retrieve the sense of individual identity with the loss of languages. And the danger will become more severe when it comes to the future of the nation, as Johan Wolfgang von Goethe, one of the most famous poets in human history, once stated that “The decline of literature indicates the decline of a nation; the two keep in their downward tendency. In the terms of the whole world, the influence will be more significant and far-reaching. As linguists and anthropologists permanently loss this resource for revealing the process of language evolvement in human history, as a result, some mystery may remain unknown eternally, like the Maya mystery.

From my standpoint, it is high time for the government of the country laid enough emphases and offer sufficient financial support to prevent the nation’s precious heirlooms from missing in the irresistible trends of globalization. One practicable action is to establish museums and research centers to collect, preserve and study the documents of the language, in order to set up the languages documentation. However, the essential part of the languages persistence should be the revitalization process, for only the language is actively spoken by a considerable amount of people can it completely come out of danger and be resurrected. So it is of more significance to encourage the people especially the young to use their own language as much as possible.

As the treasures of all the human beings, every language is worthy protecting. This responsibility is largely rested on the shoulders’ of the governments, and it is also the obligation for everybody to prevent our culture-heritage from dying out.

总体很不错，不像第一次写啊，呵呵，继续努力！

amdsrUID: 2597814

3# subtory


感谢组长的指正和提醒，虽然写得非常非常的慢，但第一篇完全写出来的AW能得到别人这样的称赞很能增加我的信心呵，接下来一定更加努力~
后面那一部分里的错误的确是我疏忽了，当时写的相当的赶来着，irrepressible的用法的确主要是指感情等方面，改为irresistible, irreversible会比较好吧。

it is high time for（that） the government of the country laid(tolay) enough emphases and offer(offered) sufficient financial support toprevent the nation’s precious heirlooms from missing in the irresistible trendsof globalization. 我写这一句时是想用it is high time that……的虚拟语气的，不过貌似好几个地方都错了……

amdsrUID: 2597814

4# 熹僖

去看了看熹僖同学的文章，觉得你的破题和立意真赞，我想对于这个问题较为完备和深入的思考的确是我所欠缺的，后面关于政府措施的论述其实并没有将我的想法都写出来，只是当时没啥时间了（惭愧地说我周一都在准备复习考试，周二晚上才写的额），今天又要考试，有时间了一定吸取各位大虾给的好的建议加以完善。
希望今后能经常与你探讨一下思路的问题~

amdsrUID: 2597814

5# 吉子轩

这位G友看的真仔细啊，感谢~
Compared by (改成with？)the data of 2001, the number has been multiplying （or multiplied?）, indicating (indicates?)the escalation and globalization of this problem.  ------------with 的确应该改，multiply我这里想表达的是快速增加的意思，是不是也可以这样用呢……indicating这一句是作为句子的一个XXX成分起修饰作用（我的语法没学好），应该不是用indicates吧？
aggravates改得好呀，合适多了~
dialects的使用的确有些欠妥，赞成换成indigenous languages

PS: 你也是武汉的吗？:loveliness:

amdsrUID: 2597814

7# kuyuepo

话说这的确是我的第一篇AW，不过用的时间不是45分钟而是4~5个小时。
其实有时我也觉得把句子写得太长了已经成为了一个我的不好的习惯了……
例子的确也存在些问题吧，看能不能找到更好的~

吉子轩UID: 2623412

是啊，我也是武汉的，不过人现在在北京。 10# amdsr

fingshangUID: 2469559

outline:
A. 开头，总起；
    语言作为交流的工具和文化的载体具有其不可替代的地位，然而，目前许多的语言都濒临着消失的困境，[url=]政府有责任采取措施组织本国语言的消亡[/url][shang1] ；
B. 一些语言目前正面临的严峻的形式以及产生这一现象的原因；
C. 过渡，转入对于为何要保护语言的谈论；
D. 语言消失的后果和保护语言的意义；（c 和 D 我觉得逻辑上很难体现出递进或者差异
一个东西的意义往往就是保护他的理由 CD两部分到底如何安排逻辑顺序
我愿意和楼主慢慢探究）
E. 政府应该怎样采取措施保护语言；
F. 结尾

[shang1]语言都濒临着消失的困境
从逻辑上并不能推出“政府有责任采取措施组织本国语言的消亡”
为什么不是NGO
为什么不是民间组织
为什么不是学者
所以我觉得这个跳转之前还应该说为什么应该政府去做 [shang1]





Languages, primarily served as vehicles for people’s ideas and feelings, have played an irreplaceable role in spreading and preserving the cultures behind. [url=]As the prevailing[/url]【词用的真好】 of a language will possibly lead to the prosperity【好词】 of a certain culture, its decline and disappearance, on the other hand,（很地道）may probably have a disastrous impact on the culture, and even the nation and the people, for languages are undoubtedly the foundation of culture and civilization, and sometimes, even the prerequisite of the existence of a people.[shang1] Unfortunately, however, a great amount of languages spoken by minorities are facing the danger of extinction for various reasons. This grave condition has urgently called for the response(不知道这个词用着怎么样
跟LZ商量下
因为在下觉得RESPONSE MEANS MORE THAN attention) of the governments and their actions preventing the [url=]irreversible [/url][shang2] tragedy from happening.如果用了 response 我想这个句子就能短一点儿了


[shang1]句子很精彩 但是读着确实费劲儿
不知这是否是楼主的习惯



[shang2]这个词的定性正分太强烈了个人觉得



[url=]According to [/url][url=]a[/url][shang1] recent survey conducted by UNESCO, more than 2500 kinds of languages are in the severe danger of [url=]dying out[/url][shang2] , which account for one third of the total amount in the world. Compared by the data of 2001, the number has been [url=]multiplying[/url][shang3] , indicating the escalation and globalization of this problem.[shang4] This appalling condition may be originated from the following factors. First, the globalization of commercial industry will [url=]inevitably[/url][shang5] lead to the unification of language for the convenience of communicating with people all over the world. However, this means the major languages will become more and more widely used while the[url=] minor ones [/url][shang6] are going to extinction [url=]silently[/url][shang7] . Second, the imbalance of economic development adds to the adversity of the languages using by few people in poor areas, for the languages used in developed areas will probably dominate the ones in the undeveloped at the time they come across with each other. A proving example is the prevailing of Cantonese in China since the Reform and Opening-up. This, to some extent, is like what happened during the war, that the invasion of territory is often accompanied by the invasion of the language and culture. What is worse, it seems that the youngsters have not realized the importance of employing and protecting their own languages, instead, they are turning to some other languages to seek a sense of fashion, authority or even dignity. Besides, the rapid advancement in technology provides us with multiple facilities to get in touch with universal languages, which means little opportunities for dialects.

[shang1]刚开始就指代给人感觉晕晕的 到底是那个the



[shang2]聪明 避免重复



[shang3]Multiplied or multiplying



[shang4]个人觉得一段的开头还是开总名义的好 直接以一个事例或数据开头 我觉得在学术文章里面有点儿不太常见



[shang5]佩服啊 再赞一下LZ的用词



[shang6]可以用minority换么？



[shang7]Good LZ的副词用的真实出神入化





With the pace of the modernization and globalization has become more rapidly, the danger of the less-known languages is seemingly inevitable, the trend[url=] irrepressible[/url][shang1]
. [url=]But why should the governments take pains to protect them from disappearing?[/url]
[shang2]

The direct and most evident result may be the irredeemable loss of a unique culture, knowledge, conception and ideas it conveys. For the native speakers of the extinguished languages, it seems impossible for them to retrieve the sense of individual identity with the loss of languages. And the danger will become more severe when it comes to the future of the nation, as Johan Wolfgang von Goethe, one of the most famous poets in human history, once stated that “The decline of literature indicates the decline of a nation; the two keep in their downward tendency. In the terms of the whole world, the influence will be more significant and far-reaching. As linguists and anthropologists permanently loss this resource for revealing the process of language evolvement in human history, as a result, some mystery may remain unknown[url=] eternally[/url][shang3]
, like the Maya mystery.
[url=]From my standpoint,[/url][shang4]
it is high time for the government of the country laid enough emphases and offer sufficient financial support to prevent the nation’s precious heirlooms from missing in the irresistible trends of globalization. One practicable action is to establish museums and research centers to collect preserve and study the documents of the language, in order to set up the languages documentation. However, the essential part of the languages persistence should be the revitalization process, for only the language is actively spoken by a considerable amount of people can it completely come out of danger and be resurrected. So it is of more significance to encourage the people especially the young to use their own language as much as possible.
As the treasures of all the human beings, every language is worthy protecting. This responsibility is largely[url=] rested on the shoulders’ of the governments[/url][shang5]
, and [url=]it is also the obligation for everybody to prevent our culture-heritage from dying out.[/url][shang6]


[shang1]Irresistible



[shang2]这个问题隐含了两个方面
1 重要而值得保护

2 是政府而非别人保护



[shang3]再赞LZ的副词使用



[shang4]个人觉得这种自己感觉的话 尤其是出现在学术文章里面 必须得现有逻辑推理 实施论证 否则 感觉说出来没有力量和说服力



[shang5]Why?



[shang6]Why?



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楼主写的却是很不错 厉害啊 第一篇就写的这么好 学习中

下面是前面几个童鞋提出的问题  我找到了这些参考 希望对楼主有用

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It is (high) time that
  
　 It is (high) time that 后面的从句谓语动词要用过去式或用should加动词原形，但should不可省略。
　 It is time that the children went to bed.
　 It is high time that the children should go to bed.
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irrepressible  irresistible, irreversible的用法和区别

irrepressible 主要是用来形容人的特征的
An irrepressible person is lively and energetic and never seems to be depressed.

irresistible 我觉得最合适
If you describe something such as a desire or force as irresistible, you mean that it is so powerful that it makes you act in a certain way, and there is nothing you can do to prevent this.

而irriversible主要强调不可逆性
If a change is irreversible, things cannot be changed back to the way they were before.
           She could suffer irreversible brain damage if she is not treated within seven days...

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12# 吉子轩

呵呵，那咱俩还真是他乡故知呢~我也在北京

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13# fingshang


蜗牛同学改得这么仔细我真是感动……

关于第二段的开头，用一段数据似乎中心句的确不明确，不过我倒觉得挺自然的，想想怎么调整下~

后面几段看来的确是非改不行了，思维的漏洞挺多的，无奈本人正在受着GPA&期末考试的压迫:mad: ，真佩服大家都有这么多时间来改文章……