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In the memorandum,the publisher of the magazine Newsbeat claims that they should decrease their emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on their magazine covers.To support this conclusion the publisher points out that during the last three years the poorest-selling magazine issues were those that featured international news stories on their front covers.,and that during the same period,the number of international cover stories appearing in other news magazines has decreased,moreover,the cost of maintaining our foreign bureaus to report on international news is increasing.On several grounds,this evidence lends little credible support for the memorandum’s conclusion.
First of all,ascribing the poor-selling of the magazine to the cover of international news is not comprehensive,the sales of the magazine are affected by many other factors.Perhaps the international events were not very interesting during those periods.If so,it might be a mistake to refrain from emphasizing international everts when those evernts are interesting enough to stimulate sales.Or perhaps the news the news magazine business is seasonal,and those particular issues would have sold more poorly regardless of the cover story.In short,without ruling out other possible explanations for the poor sales ,they can’t justifiably conclude that the international cover is the reason of the poor sales.
Secondly,the auther didn’t tell us the result of the action of competing news-magazines to decrease the number of international news cover.What they have done is not sure to lead to a better sales.Maybe,when they only focus on the domestic news,it will bring about a dramatic price drop.So,the reason can’t support the conclusion that international cover stories were responsible for poor sales.
Thirdly,the increase of the cost of maintaining their foreign bureaus to report on international news is not the reason to decrease the emphasis on international news.Because the higher cost may lead to much higher income!When the increase of income is more than the increase of cost,they will get more benefit.It would be hasty to implement the publisher’s suggestion without acknowledging and exploring this possible scenario.
In conclusion,the memo is unconvincing as it stands,To strenthen the argument,the publisher must show that the international stories cover is the only reason for the poor sales,or the most important reason.To better assess the publisher’s recommendation that they should decrease the number of cover stories that they devote to international news,we would need to know the result of the competing magazine after they decreased the cost on international stories.We should also need more information about the impact that increasing bureau costs will have on the benefit of the magazine.

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In the memorandum,the publisher of the magazine Newsbeat claims that they should decrease their emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on their magazine covers.To support this conclusion the publisher points out that during the last three years the poorest-selling magazine issues were those that featured international news stories on their front covers.,and that during the same period,the number of international cover stories appearing in other news magazines has decreased,moreover,the cost of maintaining our foreign bureaus to report on international news is increasing.On several grounds,this evidence lends little credible support for the memorandum’s conclusion.
First of all,ascribing the poor-selling of the magazine to the cover of international news is not comprehensive,the sales of the magazine are affected by many other factors.Perhaps the international events were not very interesting during those periods.If so,it might be a mistake to refrain from emphasizing international everts when those evernts are interesting enough to stimulate sales.Or perhaps the news the news magazine business is seasonal,and those particular issues would have sold more poorly regardless of the cover story.In short,without ruling out other possible explanations for the poor sales ,they can’t justifiably conclude that the international cover is the reason of the poor sales.
Secondly,the auther didn’t tell us the result of the action of competing news-magazines to decrease the number of international news cover.What they have done is not sure to lead to a better sales.Maybe,when they only focus on the domestic news,it will bring about a dramatic price drop.So,the reason can’t support the conclusion that international cover stories were responsible for poor sales.
Thirdly,the increase of the cost of maintaining their foreign bureaus to report on international news is not the reason to decrease the emphasis on international news.Because the higher cost may lead to much higher income!(我觉得这点说得好~)When the increase of income is more than the increase of cost,they will get more benefit.It would be hasty to implement the publisher’s suggestion without acknowledging and exploring this possible scenario.
In conclusion,the memo is unconvincing as it stands,To strenthen the argument,the publisher must show that the international stories cover is the only reason for the poor sales,or the most important reason.To better assess the publisher’s recommendation that they should decrease the number of cover stories that they devote to international news,we would need to know the result of the competing magazine after they decreased the cost on international stories.We should also need more information about the impact that increasing bureau costs will have on the benefit of the magazine.

以我菜鸟的观点我没看出来啥大毛病

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呵呵，谢谢你的鼓励，issue毫无头绪。。。

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对不起提交迟到了~~


In the memorandum, the publisher （arguer更贴切）of the magazine Newsbeat claims that they should decrease their emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on their magazine covers. To support this conclusion the publisher points out that during the last three years the poorest-selling magazine issues were those that featured international news stories on their front covers, and that during the same period, the number of international cover stories appearing in other news magazines has decreased, moreover, the cost of maintaining our foreign bureaus to report on international news is increasing. On several grounds, this evidence lends （these evidences lead？）little credible support for the memorandum’s conclusion.
First of all, ascribing the poor-selling of the magazine to the cover of international news is not comprehensive, the sales of the magazine are affected by many other factors. Perhaps the international events were not very interesting during those periods. If so, it might be a mistake to refrain from emphasizing international everts（events？） when those evernts（events？）（替换为which）are （加上actually更好） interesting enough to stimulate sales. Or perhaps the news magazine business is seasonal, and those particular issues would have sold more poorly regardless （是想表达封面重要还是不重要？）of the cover story. In short, ruling out other possible explanations for the poor sales, they can’t justifiably conclude that the international cover is the reason of the poor sales.
Secondly, the auther（author）（arguer更贴切） didn’t tell us the result of the action of competing news-magazines to decrease the number of international news cover. What they have done is not sure to lead to a better sales（sale）. Maybe, （此词后移更好）when they only focus on the domestic news, Maybe，it will bring about a dramatic price drop. So, the reason can’t support the conclusion that international cover stories were responsible for poor sales.

Thirdly, the increase of the cost of maintaining their foreign bureaus to report on international news is not the reason to decrease the emphasis on international news. Because the higher cost may lead to much higher income! When the increase of income is more than the increase of cost, they will get more benefit. It would be hasty to implement the publisher’s （arguer更贴切）suggestion without acknowledging and exploring this possible scenario.
In conclusion, the memo（备忘？arguer’ conclusion更好） is unconvincing as it stands, To strengthen（strengthen？） the argument, the publisher（同上）must show that the international stories cover is the only reason for the poor sales, or the most important reason. To better assess the publisher’s（同上） recommendation that they should decrease the number of cover stories that they devote to international news, we would need to know the result of the competing magazine after they decreased the cost on international stories. We should also need more information about the impact that increasing bureau costs will have on the benefit of the magazine.
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