【辉太郎杀G大队】7/9作业by Aliciasun

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交第二次作业，这次没限定时间，，写的认真了很多，欢迎指教！~


TOPIC: ISSUE203 - "The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its heroines."

Character of a society, representing a national recognization from its people, is always of great complexity and multifaceted to define and describe. This assertion raised a perspective trying to use the character of the heroes or heroines of a society as the best way to understand the character of the whole society, which, in my eye, gets the point in some extent despite that it ignores other measures effective in studying this topic to make it more complete.

In general, heroes and heroines, which can be literally divided into two parts in dictionaries, are either the people who sacrificed a lot, even their lives, for the united or establishment of a country or a significant organization, or else the people who made great contribution when leading some events or specific revolutions. Illusive Idols or fancied figures are not counted as heroes here. Obviously, not all the heroes are with the societal character. And at the meanwhile, not all the points of a character, which must include both the pros and cons, can be comprehensively found in the figures of heroes or heroines, as they are always established for their virtues and achievements.

To begin with, admittedly, the character of heroes or heroines, whom were mentioned in the second group of literal definition above, can in a certain extent reflect the ideological pursuits and people's yearnings for the revolution of a society. Firstly, society’s present situation and potential discipline would influence the activities of contemporary people. Next, based on this condition, heroes or heroines, appear to emerge in the surroundings and match the development of society, by leading these activities or events. Therefore, no matter they succeed or not, they obtain a cohesion power and character feature from the inside of the society. There are many examples in this matter. Nelson Mandela, one of the great moral and political leaders of our time, is identified as a hero of whose lifelong dedication to the fight against racial oppression in South Africa. He is the representation for the spirit and character of the people in Africa who seek the universal freedom and respect. As a result, if people want to analyze a society, some of the pilotage people can be chosen as an angle to cut in.

However, if the only angle interpreted as the heroic character is considered, the result for the societal character will be incomplete. Every coin has two sides, so does a society. Flaws and weakness can never be ignored during researching on any subject. In the prosperity and flourish of the outlook of U.S, where all its people are supposed to be well-fed and well-clothed, campus gunshop cases happen frequently; premised on the superficially harmonious of society in developing countries, unemployment rate keeps increasing. Never can the irascible, arrogancy, and anxious characters can be found on the premise of observations of a hero, because they have been constructed to indicate the national self-esteem and self-honor feelings. Hence, to better the understanding the character of a society, the knowledge on its heroes are far more than enough.

Furthermore, heroes’ characters sometimes only reflect the common virtues of human being as a whole, rather can for a specific society. Casting back to the definition of the heroes, for the first group people who sacrificed their lives for their countries, they undoubtly deserve the name of heroes, which make no difference in each country.
From the revolutionary hero Nathan Hale who said `I only regret that I have but one life to lose for my country', to Yuefei who was killed by treacherous officers in Chinese history, to the little boy from Brussels who saved his home city, all of these notable heroes presented their patriotism in their own ways. With the same character of patriotism, these heroes have sublimed their societal character to a common virtue of human being, rather than for a specific society. Hence, if the research on a country only bogs on these heroes, we can never get the complete and full-scale conclusion.


To sum up, by broadening this assertion to the extent that heroes and heroines are the best source of studying the character of a society, the author draws too hastily a conclusion, with other ways such as studying history, politics, legal systems, education, etc, also available. Heroes and heroines, as a good facet, can be considered together with other perspective to safely achieve an approach for the comprehensive character of a society. (744 words)



TOPIC: ARGUMENT165 - The following appeared in a business magazine.

"As a result of numerous consumer complaints of dizziness and nausea, Promofoods requested that eight million cans of tuna be returned for testing last year. Promofoods concluded that the cans did not, after all, contain chemicals that posed a health risk. This conclusion is based on the fact that the chemists from Promofoods tested samples of the recalled cans and found that, of the eight chemicals most commonly blamed for causing symptoms of dizziness and nausea, five were not found in any of the tested cans. The chemists did find that the three remaining suspected chemicals are naturally found in all other kinds of canned foods."

In this argument, the Promofoods concluded that the tuna cans did not contain chemicals that posed a health risk.
This conclusion came from the test organized from the company. The results indicated that five of the eight chemicals most commonly blamed for causing symptoms of dizziness and nausea could not be found in the test, while another three remaining suspected chemicals are naturally found in other canned foods. Plausible as it may seem, I am afraid that the argument can hardly bear further examination since there are several flaws in its reasoning.

To begin with, the validity of this test is questionable, without any indications that this test was completed reasonably. First of all, there’s no evidence about whether the tested samples were randomly selected or the quantity of the samples were big enough to represent the whole products.
For example, if the company only took 10 samples for this test while they are eight millions as a total, customers can not be persuaded that this percentage of samples is large enough to prove the quality of these cans. Furthermore, we cannot get the conclusion that test was conducted under credible conditions or on eligible equipments. Last but not the least, to be strict, we lack the reports or data provided by a qualified verification organization, rather than the Promofoods itself.

Next, even the test was valid, concerning the other there remaining suspected chemicals, Promofoods didn’t supply a distinct description of the content and quantity of them. Imagine, if there is a limit standard for food usage for any of these three chemicals, it is entirely possible that exactly due to the high proportion of the over-limited chemical the dizziness and nausea happened. The existing of the other there chemicals in other kinds of canned food may be under this limit in order to be hurtless for people health. Promofoods didn’t give a detailed grantee here.

Finally, assuming the contents of the three chemicals conformed the standard, the chemicals failed to consider about other possible alternatives that may lead to dizziness and nausea as well. Except the eight chemicals most commonly blamed for causing symptoms of dizziness and nausea, there might be other chemicals which are not commonly contained by cans food.

In sum, the Promofoods has not convinced me that the cans of tuna did not contain chemicals that posed a health risk. However, to better support the conclusion, the Promofoods should provide evidence that the samples of test are valid and any of the chemicals in the recalled cans can not lead to dizziness and nausea, or under the limited standard regarding the health effect. (437 words)

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TOPIC: ISSUE203 - "The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its heroines."

Character of a society, representing a national recognization from its people, is always of great complexity and multifaceted (此处是不是有点重复和拗口)to define and describe. This assertion raised a perspective trying to use the character of the heroes or heroines of a society as the best way to understand the character of the whole society, which, in my eye, gets the point in some extent despite that it ignores other measures effective in studying this topic to make it more complete.
英雄的定义
In general, heroes and heroines, which can be literally divided into two parts in dictionaries, are either the people who sacrificed a lot, even their lives, for the united or establishment of a country or a significant organization, or else the people who made great contribution when leading some events or specific revolutions. Illusive Idols or fancied figures are not counted as heroes here. Obviously, not all the heroes can act as the representative of with the societal character. And at the meanwhile, not all the points of a character, which must include including both the pros and cons, can be comprehensively found in the figures of heroes or heroines , (简化为Heroes)as they are always established admired for their virtues and achievements.
英雄可以做为社会研究的切入点
To begin with, admittedly to a certain extent, the character of heroes or heroines, whom were mentioned in the second group of literal definition above, can in a certain extent
reflect the ideological pursuits and people's yearnings for the revolution of a society.
Firstly, society’s the present situation and potential discipline of a society would influence the activities of contemporary people. Next, Under such condition,

based on this condition, heroes or heroines, appear to emerge in the surroundings and match the development (满足社会需要，换一个词组)of society, by leading these activities or events. Therefore, no matter they succeed or not, they obtain a cohesion power and character feature from the inside of the society（我觉得这里是时势造英雄，英雄出现来满足社会的需要）. There are many examples in this matter.
Examples are everywhere. (话说这是我写IBT作文的时候看到的句子
哈哈)Nelson Mandela, one of the great moral （这个地方要不要改成spiritual 精神领袖）and political leaders of our time
（不如具体说是20century吧）, is identified as a hero of whose
due to his lifelong dedication to the fight against racial oppression in South Africa. He is the representation for represents the spirit and character of the South African people who constantly in Africa who seek the universal freedom and respect. As a result,(这后面的话应该不是曼德拉同学例子的结果吧，建议改成) Thus, when study the society, some of the pilotage people can be chosen as an angle to cut in.

有个问题，你的A, whom/ who/ is….., is/ can这种句式用得太多了，会让看的人觉得看起来重复而且吃力。可以简化一下，或者用倒装句阿什么的。

However, if the only angle interpreted as the heroic character is considered, the result for the societal
social character will be incomplete. Every coin has two sides, so does a society. Flaws and weakness can never be ignored during when doing research on any subject. In the prosperity and flourish of the outlook of U.S, (of 太多，有点绕口，可以换种表达方式，而且后面也是从句，有点累赘，可以分两句)where all its people are supposed to be well-fed and well-clothed, Even the US, where its citizens are decent and well-educated, is merely wearing a mask of prosperity and flourishment. Campus gunshot cases happen frequently still frequently happen. In those so-called harmonious developing countries, unemployment rate keeps increasing. These seamy sides of one society, such like aggression, arrogance and anxiety will never be discovered through study on a specific hero. They have already been constructed to indicate the national self-esteem and self-honor feelings. Hence, to better the understanding the character of a society, the knowledge on its heroes are far more than enough.


(突然想到一个问题，Ali你要自己思考一下，我觉得校园枪击案或者失业率只是一个社会的现象，没有上升到一个社会的特征，如果把这个社会当人看的话，它不代表这个社会人的品格。你的观点是想说，社会也有阴暗面是英雄身上看不到的。但这个阴暗面和美德啊，民族追求相对应的话，应该是什么贪婪阿自私阿之类的吧。我们可以小组讨论一下。或者转一下，你需要点名校园枪击案显示了美国社会的暴力倾向，人和人之间感情淡薄阿之类的)

Furthermore, heroes’ characters sometimes only reflect the common virtues of human being as a whole, rather can stand for a specific society. Casting back to the definition of the heroes, for the first group people who sacrificed their lives for their countries, they uncouthly deserve the name of heroes, which make no difference in each country.
Heroes like the revolutionary hero Nathan Hale who said `I only regret that I have but one life to lose for my country',
Yuefei who was killed by treacherous officers in Chinese history, and the little boy from Brussels who saved his home city and so on, all of these notable heroes have presented their patriotism in their own ways. With the same character of patriotism, these heroes have sublimed their societal character to a common virtue of human being, rather than for a specific society. Hence, if the research on a country only bogs on these heroes, we can never get the complete and full-scale conclusion.
To sum up, the author draws too hastily a conclusion by broadening this assertion to the extent that heroes and heroines are the best source of studying the character of a society.
Other ways such as studying history, politics, legal systems, education, etc, are also available. Heroes and heroines, as a good facet, can be considered together with other perspective to safely achieve an approach for the comprehensive character of a society. (744 words)
从中文的提纲上来看，论据都能非常有利有逻辑的支持观点，但是落实到文章本身，有的时候遣词造句还要再多多推敲一下。且744个字，你考试的时候能写完吗…有些从句重复的结构就精简一下。这样一语中的比罗罗嗦嗦繁复的从句更能说服改卷的老爷爷。

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In this argument, the Promofoods concludes that the tuna cans did not contain chemicals that posed a health risk.
This conclusion came from the test organized from by the company. The results indicate that five of the eight chemicals, Which are most commonly blamed for causing symptoms of dizziness and nausea, could not be found in the test; while another three remaining suspected chemicals are naturally found in other canned foods. Plausible as it may seem, I am afraid that the argument can hardly bear further examination since there are several flaws in its reasoning.

To begin with, the validity of this test is questionable, without any indications that this test was completed reasonably scientifically. First of all, there’s no evidence about whether either the tested samples were randomly selected or the quantity of the samples were big enough to represent the whole products. Obviously, For example, if the company only took 10 samples for this test while they recalled are eight millions as a total, customer can not be persuaded that this percentage of samples is large enough to prove the quality of these cans. Furthermore, we cannot get the conclusion that test was conducted under credible conditions or on eligible equipments. Last but not the least, to be strict, we lack the reports or data provided by a qualified verification organization, rather than the Promofoods itself.

Next, even the test was as valid as the argument claims, concerning the other there other remaining suspected chemicals, Promofoods didn’t supply a distinct description of the content and quantity of them. Just imagine, if there is a limited standard of food usage for any of these three chemicals, it is entirely possible that exactly due to the high proportion of the over-limited chemical the dizziness and nausea happened. The existing of the other there ? chemicals in other kinds of canned food may be under this limit in order to be hurtless safe or people health. Promofoods didn’t give a detailed grantee here.

Finally, assuming the contents of the three chemicals conformed? the standard, the chemicals failed to consider about take ther possible alternatives that may lead to dizziness and nausea into consideration. Except the eight chemicals most commonly blamed for causing symptoms of dizziness and nausea, there might be other chemicals which are not commonly contained by cans food.

In sum, the Promofoods has not convinced me that the cans of tuna did not contain chemicals that which may pose a health risk. However, to better support the conclusion, the Promofoods should provide evidence that the samples of test are valid, and none of the rest chemicals in the recalled cans can lead to dizziness and nausea, or under the limited standard regarding the health effect. (437 words)

文章条例清晰，逻辑清楚，但需要再精简字数，做到言简意赅。嘿嘿
MM加油啊

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3# Applemango
哈哈，谢谢！很多意见都非常的中肯。我自己也觉得有时候写的很罗嗦的！我先把今天的作业写完然后就来仔细研究一下。今晚决定多看会儿，明天不用上班，特意冲了咖啡，加油！