TOEFL暑期集结号作文 第2次作业 by thatll

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Should the government focus more on preserving nature environment and less on economic development?
提纲：政府应该平衡两者。

• 1，
  经济发展对人类的生存很重要，他不仅关系到人类的温饱等物质问题，还关系到人类的道德等精神层面的问题。经济的不发展将会带来很多社会问题。
• 2，
  环境保护对人类的生存也至关重要，如果说经济发展解决了人类生存的内在问题，那么环境问题关系到的是人类生存的外部问题。而如今环境问题已经十分严重，到了一个关键时刻。
• 3，
  我们对经济发展的关注是一直的，也是足够的，但是对于环境保护还没有足够的投入。所以我们一定要在认识上达到一定的高度在行动上要敢于在不倒退的情况下牺牲一些经济利益来实现环境保护。
  

With the development of our economy, the nature environment is continuously deteriorating. Recently, the financial risk has provoked a hot discussion of the relationship between the environment preservation and the economic development. From the point of my view, the government should learn to balance the two instead of biasing either.

As we all know, the development of economy involves the survival of the humankind. It not only matters the problem of food and clothing but also influences social, political, and moral problems. If people are aware of the advancement of their living standard, their values, such as fairness, generosity and tolerance, will be consequently elevated. Otherwise, if people find that their life improvement will be impossible in the next decades, the whole society will degenerate and people will become more paranoid and hidebound. Such examples are plenty in the history of the development of humankind. More important, the stage we human beings are staying on is not as high as that everyone has no worry about his or her next meal. Especially in Africa, many people are hoping for what Chinese people hoped for half a century ago, although there still exist many areas in which people are worrying about their livelihood. If we want to solve such problems, the only way is to develop our economy. So the government should insist on the economical development.

If we accept the development of economy as the internal aspect of the survival of our humankind, the nature environment will be the external aspect of it, and the two aspects are equally significant. Now our environment has stepped into an dangerous situation, and scientists has warned that if the global average temperatures continue to rise as a result of the predicted increase in emissions of man-made greenhouse gases, the Earth could be tipped into a potentially dangerous state that could last for many centuries or could be irreversible. The climate change may bring about the melting of polar ice sheet and the collapse of the Indian and West African monsoons which will lead to a dramatic rise in sea levels that flood coastal regions and widespread crop failures and famine, hence counteracting the achievement brought by the development of economy. So we should protect our nature environment, which can also defend our attainment of the economical development.


It is not difficult to find that our governments are always working on the development of economy and even for the goal they would rather sacrifice the environment protection. As to the protection of nature environment, our government has not given adequate support, especially in material aspect. So the government should not only increase the awareness of the environment protection but also have the determination to sacrifice certain economical benefits to achieve environmental improvement. In conclusion, the government should learn to balance the two aspects and create a win-win situation.

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一篇好的文章应该是让读者读起来朗朗上口，容易理解，而不是一句话把读者憋死的文章。GRE考长难句的目的是为了强化训练我们对长难句的理解，而不是为了让我们在文章中去滥用长句。写文章的原则是：能用短句说得明白说得精彩，则用短句去说，只有用短句表达不清或者表达出来没有一个长句的效果好时才用长句。毕竟文章是用来交流的，而不是用来阻止交流的。如果考过GRE后写作时满篇尽是长难句，无异于古代酸秀才们满口的之乎者也。

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4# jonathan2005 还请前辈具体举例来说明这篇文章中的哪些句子过长，用短句如何表达会更好