【辉太郎杀G大队】7/14 作业by Applemango

ApplemangoUID: 2661244

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In this argument, the author suggests that dentists should target the male patients when self-advertising and emphasize more on their high anesthetic skills and concerning about the suffering patient. To support this claim the author points out that it is easier for men to be distressed than women were when receiving dental treatment. He also cites other evidence that 3 times of men than women faint at the dentist. Careful examination of these supporting evidences, however, reveals that it lends little credible support to the author’s claim.

To begin with, the author fails to convince us that the statistics collected from the dentists are reliable. The author provides the statistics result that 3 times more men than women faint at the dentists without giving any detailed information about the total number and the sex ratio of the patients. Lacking such evidence, we can hardly draw the conclusion that the men are easily go faint than women when receiving dental work. It is highly possible that, the male clients visiting the dentists are far more than female visitors, thus the number of the men go faint are reasonably larger than women did.

Next, if the male patients were as vulnerable as the author claims, the argument still fail t convince us that those male patients went faint because of the unbearable pain they received during the dental treatment. We are in the absence of the specific reason that those male patients went off in a faint. Perhaps they lost consciousness mainly because the fear of dental treatment, some of them are allergy to the smell of the medicine, or losing large amount of blood. Sometimes, receiving dental treatment without eating breakfast can also result in faint. Without ruling out all other reasons of causing faint, it is unfair to conclude that male patients went faint at the dentist because they felt painful.


Even assuming that men are comparatively easier to feel the pains and suffering from dental work, the author provides no clear evidence that it pays for dentists to mainly advertise to male consumers while accentuating the advantages they have to lighten the pains of the patients. First of all, it is unwise to narrow down the target consumers to men because female patients might tend to spend more on dental care. Also, the anesthetic technique is not the only standard for clients to judge at when searching for an ideal dentist. By advertising in this way, the dentists may lose numerous potential clients.

In sum, the author cannot justify his suggestion of dentists should advertise their anesthetic skills with concerning of suffering patients and target to those male patients on the basis of the scant evidence provided in the argument. To bolster the suggestion the author must provide better evidence that: (1) among certain number of patients, the percentage of men who went faint at the dentists are 3 times higher than the percentage of fainted women; (2) the detailed reasons for clients to go faint at the dentists; (3) the most important requirements patients care most when choosing the dentist.

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The speaker asserts that the worthy goal can justify any means of achieving the goal. In my point of view, this statement is too extreme. It overlooks circumstances under which the goal might be evil and destructive, as well as ignoring the hidden hazardous of achieving goals blindly at all costs.


To begin with, to do one’s level best in pursuing a goal is always considered a precious virtue. The spirit reveals one’s determination and brevity of achieving goals regardless the barriers in front of them. And people are always encouraged to find means to overcome the difficulties hamper their way to reach goals. Reviewing the history, human beings have never been beaten down by the countless hardness in front of them. They tried various ways and finally achieved goals. All these struggles have pushed the history of mankind forward. However, under this circumstance, it is still hasty to draw the conclusion that worthy ends can justify the means.

Admittedly, to different people the meaning of “a goal of worthy” diverse. Goals are declared by people themselves while means can be observed by others.Someone define the goal worthy due to the fulfillment of their personal interests while others basing on its social significance. Thus, to agree the statement is quite dangerous because anyone could commit evils in the name of doing something worthy and good. Political leaders can feign some seemingly good aims, and then sacrifice numerous innocent lives to benefit themselves under the veil of achieving worthy goals. The militarism of Japan and the Chinese Cultural revolution have proved that such worries are not overstated but appalling.

Moreover, even under the circumstance that the goals are right and can well benefit the society and people,
immoral or wrong actions by which the worthy goal is achieved are still considered unjustifiable. Consider an example that, one steals money to help the poor, then what is the outcome of his action? One is that the staving poor are saved, which is without doubt a worthy goal. However, it is too hasty to concludes that the worthy goal justify the wrongdoing since we have overlooked another outcomes of the agent’s immoral means, that is, his action hurts the property rights of another persons. Another example goes that one student claims his behavior of cheating justifiable merely because his motive of getting a higher academic score and graduate successfully. Obviously his goal didn’t violate anyone’s interests; however, this kind of behavior is unfair for other test takers and thus unjustifiable.

Finally, weighting the cost and gains of a worthy goal, the application of “ends justify means” also can lead to catastrophes. To have a glimpse into the history, many revolutionaries and politicians achieve the worthy goals with a great loss. Take the French Revolution and the Russian Revolution for instance. In French 1789, the revolutionaries shouted slogans of liberty, equality and philanthropy. The violence used through the revolution, however, only guided the reform to massacre of aristocrats, and thus backfired its original dreams. On the other hand, the world-spread experiment of communism in the twentieth century provides a more vivid specimen and gives human kind a painful lesson.

In sum, the speaker overstates the relationship between ends and means. The justifiability of means should not merely depend on the value of the goals. We should consider the nature of the means balancing with the cost and gains when achieving a widely beneficial goal.

AliciaSunUID: 2660743

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200 Argement
In this argument, the author suggests that dentists should target the male patients when self-advertising and emphasize more on their high anesthetic skills and concerning about the suffering patient. To support this claim the author points out that it is easier for men to be distressed than women were when receiving dental treatment. He also cites other evidence that 3 times of men than women faint at the dentist. Careful examination of these supporting evidences, however, reveals that it lends little credible support to the author’s claim.

To begin with, the author fails to convince us that the statistics collected from the dentists are reliable. The author provides the statistics result that 3 times more men than women faint at the dentists without giving any detailed information about the total number and the sex ratio of the patients. Lacking such evidence, we can hardly draw the conclusion that the men are easily go faint than women when receiving dental work. It is highly possible that, the male clients visiting the dentists are far more than female visitors, thus the number of the men go faint are reasonably larger than women did.
Next, if the male patients were as vulnerable as the author claims, the argument still fail t convince us that those male patients went faint because of the unbearable pain they received during the dental treatment. We are in the absence of the specific reason that those male patients went off in a faint. Perhaps they lost consciousness mainly because the fear of dental treatment, some of them are allergy to the smell of the medicine, or losing large amount of blood. Sometimes, receiving dental treatment without eating breakfast can also result in faint. Without ruling out all other reasons of causing faint, it is unfair to conclude that male patients went faint at the dentist because they felt painful.


Even assuming that men are comparatively easier to feel the pains and suffering from dental work, the author provides no clear evidence that it pays for (这里的pay for 是什么意思啊，，，我没看懂。。) dentists to mainly advertise to male consumers while accentuating the advantages they have to lighten the pains of the patients. First of all, it is unwise to narrow down the target consumers to men because female patients might tend to spend more on dental care. Also, the anesthetic technique is not the only standard for clients to judge at when searching for an ideal dentist. By advertising in this way, the dentists may lose numerous potential clients.
In sum, the author cannot justify his suggestion of dentists should（should前面加个which 或者that? 阅读里面这么写是完全没问题的，，可是作文会不会要求语法多一点？我也不确定是不是必须的。。） advertise their anesthetic skills with concerning of suffering patients and target to those male patients on the basis of the scant evidence provided in the argument. To bolster the suggestion the author must provide better evidence that: (1) among certain number of patients, the percentage of men who went faint at the dentists are 3 times higher than the percentage of fainted women; (2) the detailed reasons for clients to go faint at the dentists; (3) the most important requirements patients care most when choosing the dentist.


General comments: 队长的文章一如既往的流利，我的水平是挑不出来问题了。景仰。


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The speaker asserts that the worthy goal can justify any means of achieving the goal. In my point of view, this statement is too extreme. It overlooks circumstances under which the goal might be evil and destructive, as well as ignoring the hidden hazardous（hazardous是不是个形容词？） of achieving goals blindly at all costs.开门见山，很好

To begin with, to do one’s level best in pursuing a goal is always considered a precious virtue. The spirit reveals one’s determination and brevity of achieving goals regardless the barriers in front of them. And people are always encouraged to find means to overcome the difficulties hamper（我晚上要跟你讨论一下这个语法问题，，，难道是我which用得太多了？） their way to reach goals. Reviewing the history, human beings have never been beaten down by the countless hardness in front of them. They tried various ways and finally achieved goals. All these struggles have pushed the history of mankind forward. However, under this circumstance, it is still hasty to draw the conclusion that worthy ends can justify the means.
Admittedly, to different people the meaning of “a goal of worthy” diverse
（or diverses?）
. Goals are declared by people themselves while means can be observed by others. Someone define the goal worthy due to the fulfillment of their personal interests while (这个地方的while是用来做什么的呢？如果是while others base on its social significance, 就是从句了，用法是对的，如果不是的话，basing用得对么。。) others basing on its social significance. （这个论点很好）Thus, to agree the statement is quite dangerous because anyone could commit evils (commit crimes会不会更对一点？evil是不是不太顺？)
in the name of doing something worthy and good. Political leaders can feign some seemingly good aims, and then sacrifice numerous innocent lives to benefit themselves under the veil of achieving worthy goals（这句很棒，veil很好，学习）. The militarism of Japan and the Chinese Cultural revolution have proved that such worries are not overstated but appalling（很棒）.我觉得没收尾阿。。。不过这样可能更灵活一点。

Moreover, even under the circumstance that the goals are right（怎么样算是right? 觉得没展开阿） and can well benefit the society and people,
immoral or wrong(怎么样算是wrong?) actions by which the worthy goal is achieved are still considered unjustifiable. Consider an example that, one steals money to help the poor, then what is the outcome of his action? One is that the staving poor are saved, which is without doubt a worthy goal. However, it is too hasty to concludes that the worthy goal justify the wrongdoing since we have overlooked another outcomes of the agent’s immoral means, that is, his action hurts the property rights of another persons. Another example goes that one student claims his behavior of cheating justifiable merely because his motive of getting a higher academic score and graduate successfully. Obviously his goal didn’t violate anyone’s interests; however, this kind of behavior is unfair for other test takers and thus unjustifiable.
Finally, weighting the cost and gains of a worthy goal, the application of “ends justify means” also can lead to catastrophes. To have a glimpse into the history, many revolutionaries and politicians achieve the worthy goals with a great loss. Take the French Revolution and the Russian Revolution for instance. In French 1789, the revolutionaries shouted slogans of liberty, equality and philanthropy. The violence used through the revolution, however, only guided the reform to massacre of aristocrats, and thus backfired its original dreams(这个例子我觉得有点问题哦，这是战争的负面影响吧，而不是达到liberty.equality的方法和手段？其实想想似乎也对，但是是不是换个写法更好一点？). On the other hand, the world-spread experiment of communism in the twentieth century provides a more vivid specimen and gives human kind a painful lesson.
In sum, the speaker overstates the relationship between ends and means（ends？
Or goals?）. The justifiability of means should not merely depend on the value of the goals. We should consider the nature of the means balancing with the cost and gains when achieving a widely beneficial goal.


General comments: 语言很棒，流利并且词语很到位。有些小错误，见上文。能看到字体颜色么？能看到字体颜色么？能看到字体颜色么？。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。

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AliciaSunUID: 2660743

好吧，，附件。。。。