argument45 【kaleidoscope】小组第二次作业

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The arguer concludes that the global warming which lead to the melting of the sea ice cause the decline in arctic deer. To support the conclusion, the arguer points out the migratory habits of arctic deer and cites the reports of local hunter. However, the arguer is self-contradictory when explain the deer's migratory patterns and provides no direct evidence of the accurate number of the arctic deer and at last leads to a incredible conclusion.

First, the arguer fails to convince me that the arctic deer move over ice for food during the course of the year. The arguer explain that there must be some time that the habitat of arctic deer is warm enough for food, if so, it seems impossible that it is cold enough for travel all the year round. In addition, I suspect the purpose of the deer's migration. If the island is warm enough for the arctic to see the plants there, then how to get there for food through the ice is becomeing a problem.  In short, unless the arguer provide more information about the arctic deer's migratory habits, the arguer's conclusion connected with the migration patterns is unsound.

Second, the arguer provide no evidence that the reports' results getting from the local hunters are statistically reliable. The hunters do not likely to count the accurate number of the deer by scientific  method. The reports are only  results of their hunting experience. It is entirely possible the deer change their habitat that they seldom appear at the place where the hunters usually visit. Besides, Even if I were to concede that the population of deer decline as the hunters report, the local report is insufficient to conclude the general result of the Canada's arctic region.

Third, the arguer finds out a correlation between the global warming and the decline of deer, then hastily concludes that the former is the cause of the later. However, the global raising in temperature does not necessarily apply to arctic region. It is absolutely possible that arctic doesn't  follow the general trend. Even if the temperature in arctic region were indeed raising, whether it is high enough to melt the frozen sea is still unknown. To establish the causal relationship between global warming and decline of deer's population, the auger should investigate through the scientific method.

To sum up, the auger fails to support his conclusion directly and effectively. To strengthen the argument, more information about the arctic deer's  migratory habits and the evidence about the decline of population are indispensable. And further investigation on the relationship between global warming and deer's population is also needed.

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azoiUID: 2636348

The arguer concludes that the global warming which lead to the melting of the sea ice cause the decline in arctic deer. To support the conclusion, the arguer points out the migratory habits of arctic deer and cites the reports of local hunter. However, the arguer is self-contradictory when explain the deer's migratory patterns and provides no direct evidence of the accurate number of the arctic deer and at last leads to an incredible conclusion.

First, the arguer fails to convince me that the arctic deer move over ice for food during the course of the year. The arguer explain that there must be some time that the habitat of arctic deer is warm enough for food, if so, it seems impossible that it is cold enough for travel all the year round. In addition, I suspect the purpose of the deer's migration. If the island is warm enough for the arctic to see the plants there, then how to get there for food through the ice is becoming a problem.
In short, unless the arguer provides more information about the arctic deer's migratory habits, the arguer's conclusion connected with the migration patterns is unsound.
这一段我有点疑惑，似乎北极鹿的迁徙只是作者给出的背景资料，并不是论据或结论，我查阅了其他argument的范文也并没发现对这一点的攻击，是否合适？

Second, the arguer provides no evidence that the reports' results getting from the local hunters are statistically reliable. The hunters do not likely to count the accurate number of the deer by scientific method. The reports are only results of their hunting experience. It is entirely possible the deer change their habitat that they seldom appear at the place where the hunters usually visit. Besides, Even if I were to concede that the population of deer decline as the hunters report, the local report is insufficient to conclude the general result of the Canada's arctic region.

Third, the arguer finds out a correlation between the global warming and the decline of deer, and then hastily concludes that the former is the cause of the later. However, the global raising in temperature does not necessarily apply to arctic region. It is absolutely possible that arctic doesn't follow the general trend. Even if the temperature in arctic region were indeed raising（rising）, whether it is high enough to melt the frozen sea is still unknown. To establish the causal relationship between global warming and decline of deer's population, the auger should investigate through the scientific method.

To sum up, the auger fails to support his conclusion directly and effectively. To strengthen the argument, more information about the arctic deer's migratory habits and the evidence about the decline of population are indispensable. And further investigation on the relationship between global warming and deer's population is also needed.

恩 点评：攻击的地方总的来说比较到位，而且作者犯的错误也比较明确的指出了，感觉每个攻击段可以再写长一点点。