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呵呵 刚刚赶着写的，，，，没什么实质的理由，，，都是空话。。不过真的没话说。。
改我作文的人辛苦了。

When doing a project, which is the first idea comes to your mind: being creative through the process or make a delicate plan in the beginning? Some prefer to make the work in an order to achieve efficiency; others like to be creative in the work every second to inspire new ideas. As far as I am concerned, I love to be creative. The reasons are as follow.

Although we can make plans about what to do and when to do, it only lends us a schedule. To find the best solutions, the virtue of creative mind is necessary. Before we are going to finish the problem, we actually are less familiar with that subject until we spend more time on it. Being creative make us cast more delicate attentions on every detail, and we think more about the details and connect them to information in other sections. As I have said, it is the creative minds which lend more thinking process, and then identify more problems or get clues from the process. Plan only makes schedule but the creative effort we make in the process that is really beneficial to find solutions.

Also, there is another problem associated with planning carefully in the first place, what if the plan gives a wrong direction in the beginning. People may seek answers in an area that will never answer them and it wastes a lot of time and energy. But if people tends to be more creative, whatever directions they choose to begin the road to explore the problem, they will find the weakness in that direction or they are more likely to be aware of that the area is empty of solutions. It is better to get out of dilemmas of burring one`s mind in books that are useless for one`s problems. In addition to that, the creative mind will save large amount of time on other aspects. Probably, they will choose a right road in the beginning because of more thinking, and they are of great chance to identify the deep rooted reasons that may cause the problem in a less time, or maybe they will find out that the problems are the result of a chain errors made previously, actually this kind of problem is hard to discover without the endear in lots of thinking.

From the above discussion, we can see that the creative mind is very crucial in finding the solutions, especially the best ones. The creative mind is to problems what water is to fishes, it is dispensable to problem-solvings.

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When doing a project, which is the first idea comes to your mind: being creative through the process or make a delicate plan in the beginning? Some prefer to make the work in an order to achieve efficiency; others like to be creative in the work every second to inspire new ideas. As far as I am concerned, I love to be creative. The reasons are as follow., R+ n5 n+ E/ F- K& R+ V

Although we can make plans about what to do and when to do, it only lends us a schedule. To find the best solutions, the virtue of creative mind is necessary. Before we are going to finish the problem, we actually are less familiar with that subject until we spend more time on it. Being creative make us cast more delicate attentions on every detail, and we think more about the details and connect them to information in other sections. As I have said, it is the creative minds which lend more thinking process, and then identify more problems or get clues from the process. Plan only makes schedule but the creative effort we make in the process that is really beneficial to find solutions.（缺少例子，论证的话其实前面几句就总结的够了，后面有点重复，例子！）

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Also, there is another problem associated with planning carefully in the first place, what if the plan gives a wrong direction in the beginning. People may seek answers in an area that will never answer them and it wastes a lot of time and energy. But if people tends to be more creative, whatever directions they choose to begin the road to explore the problem, they will find the weakness in that direction or they are more likely to be aware of that the area is empty of solutions. It is better to get out of dilemmas of burring （？？）one`s mind in books that are useless for one`s problems. In addition to that, the creative mind will save large amount of time on other aspects. Probably, they will choose a right road in the beginning because of more thinking, and they are of great chance to identify the deep rooted reasons that may cause the problem in a less time, or maybe they will find out that the problems are the result of a chain errors made previously, actually this kind of problem is hard to discover without the endear (do u want to say endeavor?) in lots of thinking.

From the above discussion, we can see that the creative mind is very crucial in finding the solutions, especially the best ones. The creative mind is to problems what water is to fishes(fish),(这句话不太成立吧，creative thinking并没有那么重要吧） it is dispensable to problem-solvings.

很缺乏例证，其实拉几个生活的例子也可以的。
语言没有问题，问下同学是不是考过G了？

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When doing a project, which(改成it,后面是解释补充说明，不充当本句中的成分) is the first idea comes to your mind: being creative through the process or make a delicate plan in the beginning? Some prefer to make the work in an order to achieve efficiency; others like to be creative in the work every second to inspire new ideas. As far as I am concerned, I love to be creative. The reasons  are as follow.

        Although we can make plans about what to do and when to do, it only lends us a schedule. To find the best solutions, the virtue of creative mind is necessary. Before we are going to finish the problem, we actually are less familiar with that subject until we spend more time on it. Being creative make us cast more delicate attentions on every detail, and we think more about the details and connect them to information in other sections. As I have said, it is the creative minds which lend more thinking process, and then identify more problems or get clues from the process. Plan only makes schedule but the creative effort we make in the process that is really beneficial to find solutions.(你很牛，光讲道理能写出这么多字~~~~)

        Also, there is another problem associated with planning carefully in the first place, what if the plan gives a wrong direction in the beginning. People may seek answers in an area that will never answer them and it wastes a lot of time and energy. But if people tends to be more creative, whatever directions they choose to begin the road to explore the problem, they will find the weakness in that direction or they are more likely to be aware of that the area is empty of solutions. It is better to get out of dilemmas of burring one`s mind in books that are useless for one`s problems. In addition to that, the creative mind will save large amount of time on other aspects. Probably, they will choose a right road in the beginning because of more thinking, and they are of great chance to identify the deep rooted reasons that may cause the problem in a less time, or maybe they will find out that the problems are the result of a chain errors made previously, actually this kind of problem is hard to discover without the endear(endeavor) in lots of thinking.我觉得这段的切入点找得不错，是有点空~~~~其实你从正面说也是可以的，就说一开始没有什么想法，逐步构思想象创造出好点子。可以举J.K罗林的例子，写harry potter是没有计划的，评灵感。还有很多艺术家在找不到灵感时都是在纸上画脑海里想象的雏形，在此基础上不断修改（有待查证~~~呵呵）。总之你举些例子嘛

        From the above discussion, we can see that the creative mind is very crucial in finding the solutions, especially the best ones. The creative mind is to problems what water is to fishes（fish）, it is dispensable to problem-solvings.
  总体来说不错，语言很好基本没错误。逻辑思维很强。不过老外不爱看枯燥的说理文章~~~这么些有点危险。加点例子就完美了。（这个角度很难写，我也写得很辛苦~~~~理解~~~）

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谢谢两位点评， 太受教了:lol 我写作文就是缺例子。。。。不会举55555