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发表于 2012-7-23 16:45:26 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

The most important investment for a company is to spend money to improve the work skills of its employees.

How to arrange the investment for a company? This is a question frequently asked by entrepreneurs, board members, financial managers, who never stop pursuing the top profits, as well as economists and sociologists with consistent great interests in economy growth. Some people consider the investment to improve the skills of employees as the most crucial, while from professional perspective, this statement only scratch the surface of this problem as neglecting other elements as important as work skills. In fact , the famous neoclassical economy growth theory brought up by economist Robert Solow perfectly answers this question: labor productivity, capital,technology are three irreplaceable and equally important aspects that consititute company investment.

To start with, labor productivity, mainly depending on the skills of employees, must take a significant part in investment. Employees are the direct operators to finish production and execute management, so undoubtedly, the skilled employees will produce more than unskilled one during the same working hours, which brings down the labor costs. Therefore, a company should pay high attention to promote work skills of employees and enhance workforce, such as by providing regular trainings to workers to equip them with up-to-date knowledge and technique.

The investment of the second element, capital, such as purchasing land and buildings, setting up laboratories and updating machinery , is extremely of great value, especially when the skills of employees cannot be improved any more or the money paid to improve the skills exceeds the economy value brought with it . For example, a small local farming company specified in planting crops has highly productive workers, but the limited machines and facilities cannot meet the reap and gathering requirement in harvest season, which impedes the further expansion of the company. In this case, the wisest choice is to invest in physical capital by bringing in more harvesting machines. Only with accordingly sufficient capital can employees use their skills to the best.

The final essential factor ,technology, should never be ignored. In this rapidly developing world, technology improvement almost happens every minute. Therefore, the technological level determines the success of company to a great level.The famous case study in China is Haier, a refrigerator manufacture company once at the verge of bankruptcy. Although with sophisticate workers and antiquate physical capital, this traditional company cannot resist the shock from gradual opening import. To survive in the dramatic competition, the company pays a large amount for purchase of the newest and cutting-edge production technics in the world. The results turns out to be surprising. Not only does Haier save itself from bankruptcy, but also becomes the leading refrigerator manufacture in China in only several years. The investment of technology is often large at the beginning , but the rewards always worth more than that once the competitive edge is obtained.

Here we can look at the question at the beginning in a more rational and thorough way. Employee skills, included in labor productivity, is only a part of investment, far from being/by no means the most important area. Only when it is fairly balanced with capital investment and technology investment can economy growth be realized successfully.

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发表于 2012-7-26 21:30:43 |只看该作者

The most important investment for a company is to spend money to improve the work skills of its employees.

How to arrange the investment for a company (This phrase itself is actually ambiguous between 'the company is making the investment' and 'the investment is into the company'. The original question is not ambiguous, however, because the phrase is in a larger structure which limits its meaning. The point to be made here is that you can't just blindly copy from the question and assume it'll be fitting for your purposes.)? This is a question frequently asked by entrepreneurs, board members, financial managers, who never stop pursuing the top profits, as well as economists and sociologists with consistent great interests in economy growth. Some people consider the investment to improve the skills of employees as the most crucial, while from a professional perspective, this statement only scratchs the surface of this problem, as neglecting other elements as important as work skills. In fact , the famous neoclassical economy growth theory brought up by economist Robert Solow perfectly answers this question: labor productivity, capital, technology are three irreplaceable and equally important aspects that consititute company investment.(Right..for a while I didn't see whether you mean all these three are different from 'work skills', or only the last two are different. Your point is really that work skills only contribute to one out of these 3 aspects and therefore not the single most important thing – so I would prefer to actually say that here, so that your reader would know exactly what the relationship between these aspects and 'work skills' is, and what you'll be elaborating upon.)

To start with, labor productivity, mainly depending on the skills of employees, must take a significant part in investment. Employees are the direct operators to finish production and execute management, so undoubtedly, the skilled employees will produce more than unskilled ones during the same working hours, which brings down the labor costs. Therefore, a company should pay high (I'd suggest 'strong attention'.) attention to promote work skills of employees and enhance the workforce, such as by providing regular trainings to workers to equip them with up-to-date knowledge and technique.

The investment of the second element, capital, such as purchasing land and buildings, setting up laboratories and updating machinery , is extremely of extremely great value, especially when the skills of employees cannot be improved any more or the money paid to improve the skills exceeds the economy value brought with it . For example, a small local farming company specified (I think you mean 'specalized'..) in planting crops has highly productive workers, but their limited machines and facilities cannot meet the reap and gathering requirement in the harvest season, which impedes the further expansion of the company. In this case, the wisest choice is to invest in physical capital by bringing in more harvesting machines. Only with accordingly sufficient capital can employees use their skills to the best. (Very good example.)

The final essential factor, technology, should never be ignored. In this rapidly developing world, technology improvement almost happens every minute. Therefore, the technological level determines the success of a company to a great level. The famous case study in China is Haier, a refrigerator manufacture company once at the verge of bankruptcy. Although with sophisticated workers and antiquate (I think you mean 'adequate'..) physical capital, this traditional company cannot resist the shock from gradual opening import (1. I'm not really sure what this means but my guess is 'the gradual increase in the number of imported fridges', or something like that.. 2. if it's 'gradual' then I wouldn't imagine there'd be a 'shock'..). To survive in the dramatic competition, the company pays a large amount to purchase of the newest and cutting-edge production technics in the world. The results turns out to be surprising. Not only does Haier save itself from bankruptcy, but also becomes the leading refrigerator manufacturer in China in only several years. The investment of technology is often large at the beginning, but the rewards always worth more than that once the competitive edge is obtained. (The wording for this example is a bit vague but still a good example.)

Here we can look at the question at the beginning in a more rational and thorough way. Employee skills, included in labor productivity, is only a part of investment, far from being/by no means the most important area. Only when it is fairly balanced with capital investment and technology investment can economy growth be realized successfully.(There, this is exactly what your essay is all about. As I said, I'd prefer to put this point up front, at the end of the introductory paragraph, and here, with a bit of paraphrasing. Yes, you'll feel it's repetitive, since you know your point – but the gist here is that your reader doesn't know your point before he reads your essay, so if your point is not clearly stated up front, your reader would be sort of lost as to how he is expected to interpret your argumentation.)

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论述很好很强大，不过请注意冠词的使用。。另外在论述上就是只有结尾段才清楚地说明了整个的观点，在开始段没有很清晰地说明work skills, labor productivity, capital, technology这几个点之间的关系和整个观点，导致要到文章结尾读者才能确认他们一路读下来所认为的你想说什么，的确是你想说的。。你的整个观点最好在开始段就亮出来，读者往下读的时候心里才有个‘地图’，现在这一段是为了论述总论点里哪个部分，接下来这一段又是说明哪个部分。。有个说法是，tell them what you're going to tell them, tell them, tell them what you told them，就是这个意思。

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