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In this fiercelycompetitive society, people need to confront so many problems that otherpeople's advices are valuable for them to avoid detours. The suggestions maycome from both older people and people of their age. Someone think that advice given by older people are more valuable since elders experienced more and hadan insight into what is happening. As far as I am concerned, advices given byolder people are equal valuable to that from peers in some situations and wecan not make a definite conclusion. There are several reasons below.
As an old sayinggoes: An old man's sayings are seldom untrue. Older people who walked moreroads(可以这样表达吗?) and endured more sufferings are experiencedand knowledgeable.The advices given by them will help us overcome a lot ofdifficulties and avoid unnecessary mistakes(mistake本来就是unnecessary啊,这样表达好像有些中式) while people of my age have no such richexperience and can not give some constructive views toward some issues. Take mylesson on mathematics study as an example, when I was in high school, I did agood job in mathematics because my maths teacher always told us that carefullystudying where was wrong was important which prevent you made the samemistakes. After I went to university, most of my classmates told me that youcan easily pass the exams without hard working, not to mention paying attentionto the errors. Undoubtedly, I did not do well in maths as before and from thattime, I have learned that the advice from my teacher is beneficial because heknew how to study well absolutely and the suggestion from him would help me alot. Since I did not follow his suggestion, I suffered a loss in university. Sofrom my lesson, I truly learned the importance of the advice from older peoplewhich is more valuable than that from people of my age.
However, people ofmy age can also give valuable suggestion. Our lives have changed a lot thanbefore with the development of science and technology. We have slide projectorin class, communicate with smartphone and search information through Internetwhich are unimaginable for older people when they were young. The difficultiesand confusion we met may be new to the older people as well. In this situation,their suggestions may not be valuable since they were unfamiliar with what ishappening and cannot have right vision. And the people of my age know thesevery well because they have the same experience and overcome them successfully,such as career planning. (感觉此处有些脱节,前面再说technology,这里突然变为career planning的问题了,可以中间加个链接的句子表示older people在这两方面的advice都不好。)Take mybrother's experience as example. When my brother was in university, he wantedto go abroad for further study after graduated. But his father wanted him towork in the government because he did not know the benefits of overseas study whileworking in the government was stable. But some of his classmates who are inforeign countries told him that studying abroad would reap a lot. After longtime consideration, my brother chose to go abroad. Now, he found a good jobwith high salary after he graduated. So from my brother’s story, we can learnthat peers’ advices are valuable as well in some situations.
In conclusion,advices from older people and people of our age are both valuable in differentsituations. When it comes to life experience, older people have more things tosay, but on the new coming issues, people of our age may have more beneficialadvices. (感觉文章总体蛮好的,但两个例子感觉都有些冗长,我个人觉得例子缩短一点,后面再加些对例子的分析解释,可能会更好:D) 我的同题文章在 https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mod=viewthread&tid=1405748&fromuid=2955322 欢迎修改,谢谢!
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