寄托天下 寄托天下
查看: 1776|回复: 2
打印 上一主题 下一主题

[作文] 请教小作文修改-剑9test1 [复制链接]

Rank: 2

声望
50
寄托币
20
注册时间
2016-6-4
精华
0
帖子
6
跳转到指定楼层
楼主
发表于 2016-6-16 11:02:18 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
本帖最后由 Relishcici 于 2016-6-17 03:54 编辑

请教评分,以及请教小作文如果字数超了会不会被扣分

The two maps illustrate the change of the same island before and after the building of some tourist facilities.
As you can see at the one before construction ,it was an isolated island which is surrounded with sea. It does not show a variety of plants were on the island. Actually, there were only few coconut trees. While majority of them were growing in the east of island, three of them were in the west where the western beach is near it
When looking  at the second map, the layout has been changed a lot indeed after the construction. First of all, It was introduced a pier towards the south-east. As you may image, it is the location where guests are able to take water transportations as well as go for a sailing. Along with vehicle track, you can see a reception center and a restaurant which is just behind the reception room. Furthermore, on the left of the reception six lovely bungalows had been built around three coconut trees. And there are footpaths to each bungalow. Therefore, it is easy for guests  to find way to their rooms. Compared with the rooms in the west area, there are more accommodation in the west. It is worth mentioning guests can swim in the western beach now.
Overall, it is glad to see this island has been designed as a wonderful resort containing facilities and activities. It will attract tourists, there is no much change on plants layout though.
附件: 你需要登录才可以下载或查看附件。没有帐号?立即注册
回应
0

使用道具 举报

Rank: 3Rank: 3

声望
50
寄托币
282
注册时间
2015-10-12
精华
0
帖子
86
沙发
发表于 2016-6-23 05:47:29 |只看该作者
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1981156-1-1.html
你要不要来参加我们的作文互改小组

使用道具 举报

声望
50
寄托币
19
注册时间
2016-7-5
精华
0
帖子
9
板凳
发表于 2016-7-14 10:13:54 |只看该作者
提示: 作者被禁止或删除 内容自动屏蔽

使用道具 举报

RE: 请教小作文修改-剑9test1 [修改]
您需要登录后才可以回帖 登录 | 立即注册

问答
Offer
投票
面经
最新
精华
转发
转发该帖子
请教小作文修改-剑9test1
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1991432-1-1.html
复制链接
发送
报offer 祈福 爆照
回顶部