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丽丽酱香饼发表于 2017-8-22 14:51
厚谢抬爱~
我积累的也不多，常常无话可说，所以写这个issue的时候我就查了一些相关的资料，读了几篇范 ...

哦哦，谢谢！~

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本帖最后由 ning97 于 2017-8-23 23:58 编辑

issue 62 leaders are created by demands

Leaders are created by the demands that are placed on them.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

Intro:
When it comes to the leadership, some people hold the view that leaders are created by the demands that are placed on them since there is a proverb, saying "A hero is known in the times of misfortune." As far as I am concerned, no one is born to be leaders. They come from the demands from themselves, others, and the society situation.
TS1:
From the childship, children's characters gradually get in many disparate ways. Some are extrovert and some are introversive. Sooner or later, some children are more sociable, appealing and organizing than the others. These personalities may came from their parents influences, or the way they were raised, so-called familly demands. As the leadership conscious become apparent, they will persist in setting demands for themselves, pursue more opportunity to be the pacemakers learning from the practice and eventually grow up to responsible leaders.
TS2:
As they set demands for themselves, others may pay more attention and expections for them, too. Back in school, when group discussing or anytime a leader is needed, students tend to seek from the experienced leaders rather than the neophytes. So the one used to be the leaders are more likely going to be the leaders with the demands of the other people in the group. It is the same way with the president.
TS3:
Based on their experienced leadership from the adolescent to the work, the leaders will also faced more demands from the situations. It is these demands that make them better leaders.

关于cohesion，之前只是想到过连词、过渡句，没有从替代词的使用这些方向去考虑。
Maybe best to begin with Robbins himself. （衔接上文的为什么）An English PhD who mostly eschews traditional academic scholarship, he’s the author of two collections of poems, （PhD身份同位语介绍Robbin 同时联系到上文的两首诗）“Alien vs. Predator” and “The Second Sex.” You may have noticed that both titles （诗的名字）are borrowed. The original “Alien vs. Predator” （再次提到诗的名字）was a movie, the first installment in what became a very bad and successful franchise, though the word “original” is a bit fraught（上文的orginal） here since the film is itself a mash-up of two older sci-fi franchises that each started strong then devolved into badness. Before “The Second Sex” was Robbins’ book of cantankerous, hilarious and densely allusive poems (with titles cadged from Warren Zevon and the Grateful Dead), it was a foundational piece of feminist criticism published by Simone de Beauvoir in 1949. 替换词比较少，但是因为只说了一件事，彼此衔接性还是挺好的

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发表于 2017-8-24 00:26:16 |只看该作者

50)Government officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people they serve.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

Intro
Government is the authority which works for its own citizens to formulate policies, regulations, law and other rules to ensure and guide people’s living. It makes decisions for its citizen and the country. Since citizen are made of different type of people, from farmer and teachers to lawyers and white collars from different education, background, living hood and society. It is very difficult for individuals who hold different perspective of views reach to an agreement. Therefore, in some ways of policies making government might not need to get all the citizen’s votes.

Ts1
Government should in charge of some main decisions of the long term development for the country, under the guidance of proper analyzing and predicting by related fields scholars and exerts.
Such as, infrastructure building, 5/10/15 years plan, oil field.

Ts2
By complete the education system, instead of listening to people’s willing for education reform who are from different racists, major and background, government should more focus on overall balanced education system development. All nationalities’ opinions are very much appreciated, thus still need to summary a complete education policy which will be suitable for every one.

Ts3
Economic decision needs to make with the finance minister and related supervisory system of the country. Most of the citizen’s knowledge of economy might be very general. However, what is needed for the country’s decisions are from both macro economy and micro economy’s perspective, which non-professional finance citizen will not be aware of.

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Another reason why the government officials should not make decisions solely based on people’s will is that the members of the public are often notoriously ill-informed on some important issues, especially when it comes to science and technology. For example, despite the advance of genetic engineering in the past decades, the public has harbored a general fear of genetically modified food. If policies are to be made according to people’s opinions, no GM food would be allowed in the market in order to please the people who are ignorant of the science behind GM food. But GM food is arguably one of the most important inventions in late 20th century, which has to the potential to address many problems such as environemental pollution, food crisis in the developing world and energy crisis. Prohibiting GM food would be a grave mistake of any governments despite the public skepticism and misgivings.

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发表于 2017-8-24 17:24:17 |只看该作者

全文Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

Having the aspiration to cultivate talents with comprehensive knowledge and competence,some universities implement rules that every students are required to take so-called optional courses.It is undeniable that a wide scope of knowledge and skills contribute to individuals’ academic performances in their own field of research or future possibilities.Consequently,I agree with this claim to some extent,but what matter most is whether the rules applied properly and timely in specific scenarios.

I have to admit,on the one hand,that wide range of courses means more than just abundant knowledge that students can acquire from universities’ teachers and experts.For instance,like I’m studying computer science,taking classes taught by an professor from art department might provides me a chance to view technology in quiet a dissimilar way.Technology means not just 0 or 1 in digital world,by using natural programing language,such as Python and Processing,human beings are able to create intricate pictures with the law of mathematical formula.

However,on the other hand,taking extra courses towards other fields is favorable to some of universities students,but not all.wide range of classes show merits with regard to students studying interdiscipline.By taking diversity courses and absorbing abundant knowledge from relative fields,students tend to view things from several perspectives rather than a limited one.In addition,more opportunities are provided for their future careers if they strive to experience as much as possible to pick a field in which they are passionate.But when issues come to students who major in science related discipline or math deem to be extremely devoted to their own fields of study and research,it would be aimless and futility for them to pick up various kinds of courses,such as art history,music instruments or P.E.Though these subjects might keep them staying healthy both mentally and physically,obligatory courses can distract them for consuming their time and energy to prepare for exams.

What is more,sparing excessive time for courses might not be apropos due to the face that there are alternative options which are more beneficial to students in their campus life.For supporting examples,let us turn to work experiences.Xiaolong Zhang,the founder of the most renowned instant message product: wechat.He took all of his courses within 3 years,while others spent most of their time cramming for exams.Rather,He established a patent of chatting products in his last year of university and founded a start up business.By utilizing the knowledge that he acquire in courses and applying what he had learnt from his working experiences,he managed to turn his concept into a real product that change the way people interact in virtual internet works.Therefore,it is strongly recommended that university students should not merely focusing on their books,or rely heavily on courses taught by experts or professors.Knowledge is the bedrock of career,but it is most valuable once we apply hem into real works ,verifying them and utilizing in order to have a full understanding.

To sum up, taking a variety courses in campus contribute to one’s triumph research or study for many reasons,it is the way how to implement the proposal that should be considered elaborately.Moreover,to make the most advantage of taking courses,students should attach more important to the utilization of knowledge we obtain,rather than focusing just on knowledge itself.

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However, this reliance on technology does not necessarily preclude the creativity that marks the human species. The prior examples reveal that technology allows for convenience. The car, computer, and phone all release additional time for people to live more efficiently. This efficiency does not preclude the need for humans to think for themselves. In fact, technology frees people to not only tackle new problems, but may itself create new issues that did not exist without technology. For example, proliferation of automobiles has introduced a need for fuel conservation on a global scales. With increasing energy demand from emerging markets, global warming become a concern inconceivable to the horse-and-buggy generation. Likewise dependence on has created nation-states that are not dependent on taxation, allowing ruling parties to oppress minority groups such as women. Solutions to these complex problems require the unfettered imaginations of maverick scientists and politicians.

issue 50: Government officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people they serve.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

主要是通过对题目的前提条件进行限定来进行说明
intro:
Someone argues that government's own discretion contains much more professionality and well-directed which should be trusted. But it's hard to say government officials have adequate capability of estimating all circumstances when it comes to populace's gains and losses, so the professionality does not have the necessarity with human's well being. On the contrast, people themselves cannot show more solicitude for their own interests, which means in some specific situations governments need to be obedient to people's will so that they can pursue policies more smoothly, such as labour law or democratic election descipline. So in my opinion, the recommendation should be discussed in different situations.

TS1:
Under the diplomatic condition, some negotiations between countries, there won't be voices of citizens.
- As we all know, diplomatic issues usually involve vital national contracts and communications of economy, politics and culture, way out of personal range of normal cognition.
- When it up to national level, people's will worth few in governments' diplomatic decisions as a country epitomizes whole residents.

TS2:
To enact laws and constitution, aspirations of people need to be adopted partly, as they play the role of audience, by government.
- frame and skeleton of laws rely on people's will
officials formulate them in details
- for example, labour law should show adequate respect to blue-collars demand and take into account realities of employees' markets.
- medical insurance need comprehensive consideration about national economic condition and citizens' financial condition.

TS3:
However, a situation with full respect for populace's will do exist since democracy dominates in many countries.
- presidential election in America
- The house of commons is an elected body

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