tourism题求打分~

偷睡眠者UID：3190388

Some people think using cultural heritage to develop tourism is wrong. Others think that is the only way to protect cultural heritage. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In this day and age, cultural heritage is increasingly prevalent in contemporary world as it is utilized to develop tourism. However, whether equate cultural heritage with tourism is right or not has become a highly debatable issue.

There is no doubt that tourisms which are overly dependent on cultural heritage would pose a threat to cultural heritage itself. First of all, tourism would cause tension and conflict between local citizens and tourists. Specifically, visitor might bother local residents’ normal daily life for the reason that they are chaos and even troublesome. Further, with curiosity, tourists who spin out of control would not help themselves to touch the valuable cultural heritage. Moreover, local people would likely to drop their self-sufficient lifestyle and turn to run small business to attract visitors, which is not beneficial to cultural heritage as well.

Admittedly, in order to protect cultural heritage, government enable cultural heritage to boost tourism, which is witnessed a significant success. This is due to the fact that individuals can enrich their cultural horizons by receiving first-hand experience. However, this is not the only way that we can globalize our cultural heritage. Some can get second-hand information via Internet, magazines and also booklets, which can be the substitute of visiting cultural tourism attractions by themselves.

Having considered all the argument above, I believe that cultural heritage can be promoted in various modes but not only by using it as tourism spots. It is high time that we should take some effective actions to boost cultural heritage and I am convinced that cultural heritage would be flourish with our passion and effort.

LiuLiangXuan1UID：3284134

5.5 吧~

呵呵  我也是很喜欢用Admittedly

偷睡眠者UID：3190388

要怎么改进啊~~~ 2# LiuLiangXuan1

bqianaUID：193168

4.5-5

sweetrainbow89UID：3186874

我也是菜鸟一个，不知道说得对不对，楼主你不嫌弃的话就看看吧~~
我觉得哦，楼主你的功底不差，版主评分不高是因为你这个题目是要求discuss both views and give ur opinion的，所以你的文章结构有点错了。我研究了下考官的范文，一般比较好掌握的这类型的文章结构是先分别discuss两个views，而且比较客观的，个人意见几乎没有，然后再到写自己的opinion的。
可能你的这种结构也是可以吧，但是我个人来说，还是比较建议保守的。

LiuLiangXuan1UID：3284134

要怎么改进啊~~~ 2# LiuLiangXuan1
偷睡眠者 发表于 2012-4-17 18:32

就是 别用 模板~  对了 我原来就是 用模板  就得5.5分     虽然我听力、阅读是6 但是总分也上不去 = =

千万要 写出自己的 东西   例如 我的文章 （我截取的一段Of My Essay啊 不是全部）
As I illustrated above, these three solutiosns are able to tackle the environmental problems that surround us. With those efforts, I totally believe that the problem would be solved by the government in the near future.

我不准备考了，准备上ESL。。。  同学你是怎么打算的呢？ 要6.5再走嘛？

另外可以加我QQ， 讨论下作文这个东西

灯光细眉了UID：3256699

学这个是我的弱项啊 我觉得你还是很不错的啦

两个世界UID：3257802

要我看还真不能得高分的

雾般的绿UID：3301638

给5.5，希望能再努力些，经常看看这方面的范文，以后会发挥得更好，come on! 。

并肩吹UID：3308099

看看觉得还行，继续努力吧，楼主

简言UID：3254042

楼主你好，看过你的文章，提出几点建议：总体5-5.5 影响得高分的主要原因在四段式模板痕迹太严重，阅文无数的雅思考官很容易看出来。理由多为模板万能理由，说服力需要加强。题目中others观点中的only可作为论述的要点。注意行文的思路。

偷睡眠者UID：3190388

LiuLiangXuan1 发表于 2012-4-19 13:06
就是 别用 模板~  对了 我原来就是 用模板  就得5.5分     虽然我听力、阅读是6 但是总分也上不去 = =  ...

我后来作文6.5了 口语也6.5了

偷睡眠者UID：3190388

简言 发表于 2012-6-16 22:18
楼主你好，看过你的文章，提出几点建议：总体5-5.5 影响得高分的主要原因在四段式模板痕迹太严重，阅文无数 ...

谢谢你的帮助 后来考到作文6.5啦

偷睡眠者UID：3190388

雾般的绿 发表于 2012-5-8 08:15
给5.5，希望能再努力些，经常看看这方面的范文，以后会发挥得更好，come on! 。

谢谢！

xuyidingyaozouUID：3483933

it is great that you can raise your score  to 6.5 from 5.5(?) within ONE year