ISSUE128【根据批阅后的修改版】 【已批改 by 狐狸大叔】
本帖最后由 sitting-dog 于 2012-5-6 17:02 编辑128 Some people argue thatsuccessful leaders in government, industry, or other fields must be highlycompetitive. Other people claim that in order to be successful, a leader mustbe willing and able to cooperate with others.
有些人认为，政府、工业或其他领域的成功领导者一定是具有极强的竞争精神的。也有人认为，为了成功，领导者必须情愿并且有能力和他人合作。
观点：“现实社会是利益至上的，正像丘吉尔所说的：没有永远的朋友，只有永远的利益。我们生活的环境充斥着各种各样的竞争，然而许多看似友好亲密的合作都是利益使然，归根结底还是要是自己变得强大。然而，对于整个人类而言，我们需要的是健康的竞争气氛，来促进双赢甚至是多赢的合作，从而达到这个人类社会的全面提升。”
An outstanding will leader leads his/her teamtowards success.
As a leader, he/she has the responsibilityto guide his/her team to success.
This is nowhere more true than that thesuper-modern society is glutted with competition.
Companies chase after profits to survive in thejungle of competitors and governments work hard to benefit their votersavoiding to be replaced by other groups.
[…](这句话我感觉上需要改，但是不知道怎样改适合)
Therefore, individually, I cannot agree more withthe opinion that an eminent leader must be highly competitive.
Unless with the sense ofcompetition, leaders of any society can never lead his/her people to win in thecompetitive world. Competition is the essential driving force of eachindividual and thus motivation of society progress which is composed ofindividuals. The competitive impulse fosters the desire for excellent. It isthe responsibility of social leaders to create a healthy atmosphere ofcompetition under which the subsequent improvements will generate. This can beillustrated by transformation of Chinese market policy. Decades ago, theplanned economy policy was praised by Chinese leaders. This policy in whichgovernment played a key role to run entire business of nation is featured as absoluteequality and eliminates any chance of competition. Unfortunately, thesegovernment-businesses are ineffective due to lack of competition and thenresult in low productive capability and poor welfare of entire population.Realizing the disadvantage of such policy and desiring to reverse thestraggling situation of China and catch up with developed countries, leadershave decided to transform the old economic system killing the spirit of competitioninto the new one encouraging competitive awareness. Individuals and companiesalike for sake of survival in competition must continue to improve theirservices and products, and consequently, the entire society prospers, at leasteconomically. Owing to the vitality of competitiveness, China can experiencethe prosperity than ever before.
[这一段是参考别人的文章的]
Furthermore, to lead his/her people to win acompetition with external competitors, a leader needs the ability to cooperate.A country does not have permanent friends, only permanent interests. Thissaying is used to illustrate that cooperation always serve for competition.
This saying is used to illustrate that cooperation is always serve competition. (serve for = stand for, 这里用错了)
A competitive leader is not a successful leaderuntil he/she learns the art of cooperation and use it to bring benefits.
A competitive leader is not asuccessful leader until he/she learns the art of cooperation and makes profitby means of cooperation. (not … until, 实现作强调)
In some situations, if to cooperate with otherscan lower a company's cost while improve its income; it is wise to takecooperation.
If to cooperate with others can lower a company’s costs and improve its income, the leader must take out such cooperation in no time.
Otherwise, when cooperation can brings nothingbut sacrifice, the leader of a company should reject it with no hesitant.
Otherwise, when cooperation can bringnothing but losing money, the leader should reject is without hesitant.
For example, IBM cooperated with Lenovo, a Chinesecomputer manufacturer, in the personal computer industry several years ago. That cooperation is a kind of two-win strategy. On onehand this cooperation can reduce the costs of IBM's personal computerdepartment, which means the finance support for other more profitable areas canbe magnified. On the other hand technologies from IBM can lift the qualityof Lenovo's products and it is a nice advertisement which can improve Lenovo'sreputation in the personal computer industry.
On the other hand, technologies from IBM can lift the quality of Lenovo’s products and rise its reputation inpersonal computer industry.
However, when comes to business industry, IBMwill not cooperate with others because the throne of this area is already ownsto IBM. The blue giant would not like to see anyone to weak its kingship.
However, IBM will not cooperate with others in business computer market, because at this period of time no one can weak blue giant’s kingship in this area.
In sum, competition and cooperation havesignificant inner relationship.
In sum, I dear to assert that competition is more important than cooperation, for the reason of people to cooperate with each other is in order to survive in fierce competitions.
As the increasing complexity of tasks, it ishard to accomplish a job all by oneself.
As the complexity of tasks increases,it is harder for a person to accomplish a job all by himself/herself.
Therefore cooperation takes places to simplify jobs and elevate working efficiency.
While, the essence of cooperation is to helpindividuals, companies even nations to win the competition. A successful leaderhas to keep clear mind about this.
While a successful leader has to keep his/her mind clear about the fact that the aim of cooperation is to win in the competition.
In different situations cooperation can bewelcomed as well as rejected, which totally determined by the will to wincompetitions.That is why in differentsituations cooperation can be welcomed as well as can be rejected, whichtotally determine such phenomenon is the expectation result of competition.
这篇分数高不了
讨论的内容很多和题目关系不是特别大，虽然逻辑上也没错
1和4都是废话，虽然没错，和本文关系不大，完全没必要当成一块来写 2,3也流于表面，没有任何观点，全部为和稀泥
估计3分，不能再多了 3# 狐狸大叔
求大仙指点迷津呀
我对此类话题实在不知如何下手呀 你1和4肯定是废话了，这点没疑义吧？
2,3其实也是废话。你对于2,3就是分开先说，竞争挺重要的！然后又说合作也挺重要的！
最后4再和稀泥
我现在觉得应该是2.5分。。。完全没有任何你的观点
题目想让你比较竞争和合作。你至少从几个方面比较下竞争和合作，然后分析下竞争和合作两种模式的关系，统一的地方和矛盾的地方。。。
举个例子，你可以说（我随便说的，没好好想），竞争更多是对外部的，合作是更多对内部的，不同的领导侧重的东西不一样。如果是带团队完成一个工程，也许合作更重要。但如果是去竞选总统，竞争更重要。
再例如，你可以说，竞争性通常更重要，因为高度有竞争性的领导人会想尽一些办法提高竞争力，如果这个提高竞争力的办法恰好是合作结盟的话，领导自然也会去做。可是反过来就挂了。。 In some situations, less competitive is equal to silence. What is rather ironical is that one always keep silence and never let others know his/her abilities can be noticed and finally been elected as the leader.
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这个完全没逻辑啊
你自己翻译成中文多看几遍你觉得make sense吗？ 语言问题也很多，你放到word里面跑下spell check看看（虽然实际考试不能用这个功能）
例如let a company beats显然是错的，let xxx后面的动词原形
还有些行文完全虽然符合语法但是很莫名奇妙
例如
However, apart fromcompetition, an outstanding leader also needs to know how to cooperate with others.
At first, teammates in a high qualified team need to learn the art of cooperation, especially the leader.
这两句话意思都差不多，都没展开和解释，只是换个说法又说了一遍。本来你全文就没写几个字，去掉这些重复的东西更没多少了。 我纯粹是来参观狐狸的 7# 狐狸大叔
这个题目的目的是要求我们对竞争和合作进行比较么？
我还是没有体会到我的论证的问题在哪里
第一段：我说竞争和合作对于一个成功的领导者都很重要（这个不算是自己的观点？）
第二段：我重点说竞争，从反面说没有竞争意识一个人连领导都当不上
第三段：我举例说IBM和M.S.来证明合作对于一个公司的重要性
第四段：再来个总结发言
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狐狸兄的看法我很想接受，但是由于对论证方面的理解还很幼稚，所以还请各位
解释下我上面的论证思想有何不妥。
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虚心接受各位的指点，另外我重新想想这个题目该怎么写
写好了贴上来大家再来拍拍 你的观点没内容，你找小学六年级的学生来写也能写出这个观点和结构。
你不要去说你的结构第几段是干嘛的，你就单独说你对这个问题有什么核心的看法? 10# 狐狸大叔
嗯，我想说的是对于一个成功的领导者而言，竞争和合作都是必须的 11# sitting-dog
那你觉得这个观点值3分吗？ 本帖最后由 sitting-dog 于 2012-5-6 11:11 编辑
12# 狐狸大叔
所谓issue要求的逻辑思考
是指能够提出作者独到的见解，与众不同之处
经狐狸兄指点，难道想拿高分的命题是
“我觉得，现实社会是利益至上的，正像丘吉尔所说的：没有永远的朋友，只有永远的利益。我们生活的环境充斥着各种各样的竞争，然而许多看
似友好亲密的合作都是利益使然，归根结底还是要是自己变得强大。然而，对于整个人类而言，我们需要的是健康的竞争气氛，来促进双赢甚至
是多赢的合作，从而达到这个人类社会的全面提升。”
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狐狸兄，您看这个观点应该这样提出么？ 这个比你原来的那个和稀泥的好很多 14# 狐狸大叔
狐狸兄，能不能尝试着给出你对这个问题的观点？
或许是习惯于使用英语表达个大概含义就知足了，所以常常导致说的话比较留于表面