10.21作文，写得太差劲了

doubledianUID: 2661760

In the recent years, there is a general controversy over the issue whether people who have a lot of money and don't have a job are happy in their life. Personally, I prefer that it is hardly to say this kind of people is happy or not. And I will provide concrete evidences to demonstrate my point of view.


First and foremost, people who have a mount of money can buy almost everything they want, for this reason, they can make themselves satisfying and happy. They couldn't worry about the life without money and food. They have no chance to experience the feel to be a poor. On top of this, the rich men are happy on the physical life.


However, on the second place, being a rich man without a job is not always a happy thing. As it is said before, they may be happy on their physical life but not on the psychological life. Hanging themselves out everyday, just go shopping, visit friend, and play games make the rich men feel blank when they are wasting time ,and they couldn't see the other beauty of world, this make their life meaningless. However, for some rich men without work, they can also enjoy themselves by doing much useful things for other people. Every time when they have helped a person who was in trouble, they feel satisfying.


Last but not least, whether a person is happy or not is not depend on the number of their money. A man with much money may not be happy because he has no family. Likewise, a man without money may not be inconsolable as he a beatific family. Evidently, it is people's mind that let them feel happy not the money or the job.



To sum up, if a people makes his dream come true he will be happy, although he may lose many things and pay back with no money. The nature and the beauty of the world make people real happy.

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请写出作文标题，谢谢！

scutgongUID: 2564275

In the（可以删除） recent years, there is a general controversy over the issue whether people who have a lot of money and don't have a job（是不用工作，这里表达的不够准确） are happy in their life. Personally, I prefer that（重复，可以删除） it is hardly to say this kind of people is happy or not. And I will provide concrete evidences to demonstrate my point of view.

First and foremost, people who have an amount of money can buy almost everything they want, for this reason, they can make themselves satisfying and happy. They couldn't（不是couldn’t，don’t have to可能更合适点） worry about the life without money and food. They have no chance to experience the feel to be a poor. On top of this, the rich men are happy on the physical life（materials world物质世界吧）.
However, on the second place, being a rich man without a job is not always a happy thing. As it is said before, they may be happy on their physical life but not on the psychological life. Hanging themselves out every day, just go shopping, visit friend, and play games make （两个动词啊，请注意）the rich men feel blank when they are wasting time ,and they couldn't see the other beauty of world, this make their life meaningless. However, for some rich men without work, they can also enjoy themselves by doing much useful things for other people. Every time when they have helped a person who was in trouble, they feel satisfied.

Last but not least, whether a person is happy or not is not depend on the number of their money. A man with much money may not be happy because he has no family. Likewise, a man without money may not be inconsolable as he a beatific family. Evidently, it is people's mind that let them feel happy not the money or the job.

To sum up, if a people makes his dream come true ，he will be happy, although he may lose many things and pay back with no money. The nature and the beauty of the world make people real happy.

个人观点：作者的理由很充分，实际上也的也不错。值得注意的是，有比较多表达不地道的地方。

doubledianUID: 2661760

你是第一个说我写的不错的人，太感动了，谢谢 3# scutgong