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向所有志同道合的汉纸和妹纸们致敬!!!向所有耐着性子帮助过小生的汉纸和妹纸们致敬!!!开始了哟~
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Issue 8. In any field--business, politics, education, government-- those in power should step down after five years.
Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.
Clues: partly agree. 1. New leaderships for revitalization would be a good way, eg. Mozart. Newton, young--great scientist, old--trap younger scientist. energy, creativity, passion, courage.
                     2. Experienced leaderships are not bad, eg. Steven Jobs, Bill Gates, experience, prudent, more information.
                     3. More enterprise would be better operated under the experienced or they would change plans from time to time.


I would be partly agree with the statement that sometimes a new leadership would be probably a good way to thrive enterprises, especially those enterprises required creativity and passion. But does that means leaders should be changed from time to time in all fields? My answer would be no, and my explanation would be followed.
To start with, new leaderships could bring their unique power, part of it would be essential for an enterprise merely lacking energy. With a new power taking control over a field or a company, chances for promoting would be created more than usual, and that would inspire people. Furthermore, a new leader would often bring newly bright ideas to solve problems for instance. Besides, since they are new to be leaders, they personally contain qualities such as creativity and passion, and they even might dare to risk. They might fight against contravention and magically vitalize one enterprise. One good example goes to Mozart, who surprised the European classical music world at age of nigh with his talent as passion and courage. Another brilliant example would be Newton, a leader of the physic, he who once was young and dare to challenge the contravention. Then he created the Gravity Theory, promoted physic’s development. But many years after that, Newton devoted to Church and created nothing.
However, experienced leaders are not that bad. Since they have been leaders for a long time, they would certainly gain something. A variety of information and connection net all over a certain field would be great advantages. And they always more prudent than new leaders, experienced leaders also had been trained to have piecing perspectives of enterprises. Steven Jobs would be served as a good explanation of how experienced leader thrive a company again. Jobs had been fired from Apple Company once, but he came back soon after he operated a powerful competition company against Apple Company. It's always he who saved Apple Company and created magic wonders. One another story would be told by Bill Gates. It would only be him, a leader who has been experiencing things from every starter, but never anybody else could run the Microsoft through decades.
Moreover, new powers would work in some fields, but other fields would be quite different, and more often than not, frequently changing powers would be disasters. As I said, with new power developing, leaders would promote people who support them, but exclude those against them. Even more, fresh leaders would abandon those plans carried out by last powers for setting their new plans, thus some good plans would be ruined. Frequently changing stuffs and plans, like every five years, would sometimes cause a great loss even bloody one. China has been a very massive period around ten thousand BC. In that period, new power raised all the time, politics could not remain stable, and none of the government plan could be completed. Therefore, people lived in miserable lives and few of them could survive.
To sum up, new leaderships probably would revitalize enterprises, but in general, experienced leaderships would do better job.

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这个帖子不错,大家快来顶起来!

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Issue 6: A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Main idea: Curriculum should be determined by different districts.
Clue: 1. Different districts have different culture and ethic environment. Curriculum should pay respect and attention on them.
      2. A general curriculum could hardly contain all a nation's various cultural.
      3. Students in different areas would be great different.
A basic curriculum should be required through nation for its students just as the statement claims. But that is not enough. Additionally, curriculums should contain some other knowledge specialized different districts' own culture, and curriculums should also be changed according to different educational levels.
To start with, a basic same national curriculum is necessary. School classes play an important role on children's development, which who determine the nation's future. And a nation needs its people to share the basic moral standards and fundamental knowledge about the world. Like, when we were first entered school, we all have some classes like math, which contain knowledge about that one plus one equals two. Or, we all learn our first lesson about how an honest man should behave. Thus, a same curriculum shared same knowledge and ethic is essential.
However, a basic national curriculum would be far from enough for students from different districts, who would probably step into college and focus on special academic subjects. Every area has unique culture and ethic. Since students are so important to nation's future, they certainly should build up their responsibility to keep different traditions and pass down those memories before they get chances for further education. Black-American should have a sight about their migration, and they should especially understand their unique cultural expressions, like songs or navels. Unfortunately, curriculum could be nearly impossible to contain all the differences though nation, especially some great countries like China. China has various cultures, to solve the problem, China allowed different provinces to arrange their own classes order based on a general curriculum and their traditional cultures. And by doing so, China’s general education achieves great success. So, curriculums should take consideration according to unique cultures.
Moreover, different areas would have different education levels, while students would be determined for further education by their studies. Then, it's not fair to request all students to study a same curriculum only. Educational levels vary from area to area according to regional attention on education, cultural environment and financial support. Still take China’s education as an example, people born in East-South China may be under good education ever since they are young, because there are generally richer than other parts of China, and they are supposed to enter better colleges. But some others who live in West area would even have no idea how to write their names after they grow old. Therefore, curriculums for people have ever been under good education should be more difficult than those who are not that kind of lucky. And by taking different curriculums, the West of China’s educational level has been progressing cheerfully. In another words, curriculum should also be varied according educational levels, so that could help qualified students to enter better colleges.
In conclusion, a basic curriculum would be essential to carry through the nation. But that is not enough, curriculums should also be determined by various elements, like the unique regional culture and different education level.

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angel318393 发表于 2012-8-18 10:29
这个帖子不错,大家快来顶起来!

多谢客官赏脸!!!

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nighut 发表于 2012-8-19 22:39

多谢~

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pingxingxian 发表于 2012-8-20 14:57

多谢~

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发表于 2012-8-21 10:19:22 |只看该作者
写的很娴熟那,例子也丰富,继续加油~期望有机会和你分一组~

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loveJenny0717 发表于 2012-8-21 10:19
写的很娴熟那,例子也丰富,继续加油~期望有机会和你分一组~

其实错了灰常多啊!!!细节和句式。。。不可以酱紫。。。

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发表于 2012-8-21 22:51:10 |只看该作者
谢谢兔子给我改的作文。改的特别号。问题也点了出来。
请笑纳我改的。
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发表于 2012-8-22 23:05:48 |只看该作者
写这个的时候。。。完全没有状态啊小生想爆粗口可不可以啊!!!
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江兔子 发表于 2012-8-22 23:05
写这个的时候。。。完全没有状态啊小生想爆粗口可不可以啊!!!

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