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Issue47  第13篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：39分16秒     511 words
从2005年7月13日16时45分到2005年7月13日17时39分
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Society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect—that is, on reasoning and other cognitive skills.
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The speaker alleges that the emphasis placed on the intellect is not enough in contemporary life. I concede that we should emphasize the development of student’s intellect. However, I think nowadays we overstate the importance of intellect but neglect some other crucial qualities of the students, such as emotional education and basic ethics.

First of all, the educators place much more emphasis on the intellect of the students. Though some critics would argue that current education overemphasizes inserting knowledge and basic skills, but ignores the aspect of nurturing the reasoning and cognitive skills of the students. However, this situation has been gradually changed in contemporary education. Especially in some developed countries, instead of passively receiving knowledge from the teacher, students in schools get more chances to think independently and to solve the practical problems. Thus we need not to worry about the aspect of cultivating the intellect of the students. Moreover, intellect of the students is less and less important in contemporary society, for there are many more qualities which determine the success of individuals and these are the very factors overlooked by our educators.

On the one hand, the educators today have placed too little emphasis on the emotional education of the students. Courage, willpower, confidence, optimism-such these words are usually key factors of the success for an individual. What's worse, lack such qualities would further bring about some social problems. We can often found some students around us choose to end their lives just because of some very simple reasons. For example, some students cannot afford the pressure of study in school or some students suicide for the mere fact that they lose confidence for the future. Thus it is the obligation of the educators and the society to place more emphasis on emotional education rather than their intellect. Because though some of the students are very smart in studying knowledge and even reasoning and other cognitive skills, they could not well face the challenges brought by the society.

On the other hand, society usually ignores the aspect of basic ethics and moral education to the students and it would also bring about some very serious problems. Because students and children are the future of our society, if they are lack basic moral standards and the responsibility to the society, then the more they are intellectual, the more dangerous they are to the society. High-tech crimes are not rare in our life and those so-called well educated people have become a potential threat. In fact, when we know the seriousness of the problems, we would no longer place more emphasis on the intellect than the basic moral standards of the students.

To sum up, due to the above mentioned reasons, which sometimes intertwine to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive than any one of them, we may comfortably arrive at the conclusion that the emphasis we place on the intellect is enough to some extent, yet we should pay more attention to the emotional education and the basic moral standards of our children.

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Issue47  第13篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
------摘要------
作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：39分16秒     511 words
从2005年7月13日16时45分到2005年7月13日17时39分
------题目------
Society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect—that is, on reasoning and other cognitive skills.
------正文------
The speaker alleges that the emphasis placed on the intellect is not enough in contemporary life. I concede that we should emphasize the development of student’s intellect. However, I think nowadays we overstate the importance of intellect but neglect some other crucial qualities of the students, such as emotional education and basic ethics.

First of all, the educators place much more（去掉） emphasis on the intellect of the students. Though some critics would argue that current education overemphasizes inserting knowledge and basic skills, but ignores the aspect of nurturing the reasoning and cognitive skills of the students. However, this situation has been gradually changed in contemporary education. Especially in some developed countries, instead of passively receiving knowledge from the teacher, students in schools have(最好不要用get) more chances to think independently and to solve the practical problems. Thus we need not to worry about the aspect of cultivating the intellect of the students. Moreover, intellect of the students is less and less(这么表达好奇怪呵呵) important in contemporary society, for there are many more qualities which determine the success of individuals and these are the very factors overlooked by our educators.
（这段的观点我觉得有点偏，我觉得应该着重讲intellect在社会中的作用，而不是讨论教育中主动被动接受问题，因为这都是intellect的大范围，reasoning and other cognitive skills只是一部分，被动学习也能提高intellect只是程度不一样吧）
On the one hand, the educators today have placed too little emphasis on the emotional education of the students. Courage, willpower, confidence, optimism-such these words are usually key factors of the success for an去掉 individual. What's worse, lack such qualities would further bring about some social problems. We can often found some students around us choose to end their lives just because of some very simple reasons. For example, some students cannot afford the pressure of study in school or some students suicide for the mere fact that they lose confidence for the future. Thus it is the obligation of the educators and the society to place more emphasis on emotional education rather than their intellect. Because though some of the students are very smart in studying knowledge and even reasoning and other cognitive skills, they could not well face the challenges brought by the society.

On the other hand, society usually ignores the aspect of basic ethics and moral education to the students and it would also bring about some very serious problems. Because students and children are the future of our society, if they are lack basic moral standards and the responsibility to the society, then the more they are intellectual, the more dangerous they are to the society. High-tech crimes are not rare in our life and those so-called well educated people have become a potential threat. In fact, when we know the seriousness of the problems, we would no longer place more emphasis on the intellect than the basic moral standards of the students.（这个只是能推出需要重视moral，并不是说一旦intellect的重视程度超过moral就会导致这个结果，逻辑有点问题）

To sum up, due to the above mentioned reasons, which sometimes intertwine to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive than any one of them, we may comfortably arrive at the conclusion that the emphasis we place on the intellect is enough to some extent, yet we should pay more attention to the emotional education and the basic moral standards of our children.

没什么语法错误，但是你对the,a,one,such 这些词的把握要加强一些，有些地方用的好象没错，但是看着很不舒服

总体上看，我觉得有一点点偏题，这个题目更多应该讨论intellect在社会各方面的情况
你就只是对教育谈，会让人觉得以偏盖全
教育是这个题目的很大一个方面没错，但还可以谈企业面试人员考量的素质等相关的

个人意见，参考~