issue51[加洲阳光]第一次作业请拍砖

lixiaomin046400UID: 2207959

Issue51 "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student." 教育类 频率151
教育只有被专门设计来满足每一个学生个人需求和兴趣的时候才是真正有效率的。

提纲：（保留的反对）
1. 承认专门设计来满足每个学生个人需求和兴趣的教育是有效和有益的。
2. 但是这种想法过于理想化，不宜于实现（从人力、物力、财力方面的不可能和兴趣和需求的不定性进行论证）。
3. 从教育的目的和有效性论证专门设计来满足每个学生个人需求和兴趣这种方式的教育是不一定有效的，甚至会对社会造成危害。

正文（591个字）

When it comes to education, whether it should meet each student's individual needs and interests is a controversial issue. The speaker asserts that only when education meets each student's individual needs and interests it will be effective. While I agree that inner interests and individual needs acts as impetus and catalyst in the process of achieving individual success and social progress, I insist that the speaker's idea is ideal and parochial.  

Admittedly, each student whose intellect, character and interests are quite different from others is unique. The same curriculum, schedule, teacher and the method teacher used cannot suit for each student. That is to say if teacher didn't teach students in accordance of their aptitude, education would be inefficient. Take, the whiz kids (also called a child prodigy) who endow with high intelligence quotient, extraordinary curiosity and self-absorption for example, they always cannot adapt to the common education so that the teachers and students around them consider them as eccentric. Thus, the whiz kids sometimes will be neglected. What is more, interests are the best teacher, the inner needs and interests impel the students to devote, strive and endeavor for achieving success. As we cast a look back at the history of technology and science, it is possible to find that inner interests and curiosity play a significant role.

However, implementing the policy to meet each student's needs and interests is utopian. Firstly, when education becomes a public service provided by the government, it should serve all the students of the country. How enormous the work is to explore each student's interests and needs. More and more teachers will be needed, more and more apparatus will be used, more and more efforts should be made, more and more money should be invested, yet the fund used in education is limited. Secondly, interests and needs are variable factor. When an infant--the future student was born, he came to the world without any innate interests to the outward surroundings. The infant only receives some external stimulation to recognize the world which is strange to him. His interests are influenced by the people around him and surroundings. He may be interested in astronomy at six years old, while at twelve years old he was wild about math. As his knowledge became richer and richer, his interests changed unceasingly. Therefore it is ridiculous to design some special programs to meet his needs and interests in education.

Furthermore, why I assert that the speaker's thought is parochial dues to the education's purpose and efficiency. The aim of education is to cultivate students' moral sense and value system, to give them essential courses such as math, art, literature. Provided that one student's curriculum schedule is only designed to meet his interests and needs, this student cannot make great achievement because of limited knowledge. Even if he achieves great success, without regard to morality he can become destructive to our society. A computer virus can better illustrate this point: some people intend to program computer virus to infringe on others’ computer, in 1988 the computer virus designed by an American student resulted in economic loss about one million dollars. Consequently, how can we say that this form of education is effective?

In sum, educators cannot deny the advantages of education designed to meet each student's needs and interests, whereas they should place more emphasis on foundational and moral education. Based on this, educators can provide kinds of courses for students to choose according to their needs and interests. This style of education, I think, is most efficient.

刚开始写，感觉很吃力，没有限时。 A computer virus的例子是修改时加上去的，可写完又觉得该论据不太恰当，请大家多给意见。

chenrenjun333UID: 2193530

能不能将  firstly  ...secondly ...
换成  first of  all      ....    in   addition  ...
我也是新手  不要笑啊!  :)

joey.liuUID: 2207101

When it comes to education, whether it should meet each student's individual needs and interests is a controversial issue. The speaker asserts that only when education meets each student's individual needs and interests it will be effective. While I agree that inner interests and individual needs acts as impetus and catalyst in the process of achieving individual success and social progress, I insist that the speaker's idea is ideal and parochial.  

Admittedly, each student whose intellect, character and interests are quite different from others is unique. The same curriculum, schedule, teacher and the method teacher used cannot suit for each student. That is to say if teacher didn't teach students in accordance of their aptitude, education would be inefficient. Take, the whiz kids (also called a child prodigy) who endow with high intelligence quotient, extraordinary curiosity and self-absorption for example, they always cannot adapt （themselves） to the common education so that the teachers and students around them consider them as eccentric. Thus, the whiz kids sometimes will be neglected.（上例好像是在反驳本段主题了） What is more, interests are the best teacher, the inner needs and interests impel the students to devote, strive and endeavor for achieving success. As we cast a look back at the history of technology and science, it is possible to find that inner interests and curiosity play a significant role.（用词不错）

However, implementing the policy to meet each student's needs and interests is utopian. Firstly(First of all), when education becomes a public service provided by the government, it should serve all the students of the country. How enormous the work is to explore each student's interests and needs. More and more teachers will be needed, more and more apparatus will be used, more and more efforts should be made, more and more money should be invested, yet the fund used in education is limited. Secondly, interests and needs are variable factor. When an infant--the future student was born, he came to the world without any innate interests to the outward surroundings. The infant only receives some external stimulation to recognize the world which is strange to him. His interests are influenced by the people around him and surroundings. He may be interested in astronomy at six years old, while at twelve years old he was wild about math. As his knowledge became richer and richer, his interests changed unceasingly. Therefore it is ridiculous to design some special programs to meet his needs and interests in education. (好例子！)

Furthermore, why I assert that the speaker's thought is parochial dues to the education's purpose and efficiency(effectiveness). The aim of education is to cultivate students' moral sense and value system, to give them essential courses such as math, art, literature. Provided that one student's curriculum schedule is only designed to meet his interests and needs, this student cannot make great achievement because of limited knowledge.(好像逻辑不太通阿，为什么是因为有限的知识？需要明确一下) Even if he achieves great success, without regard to morality he can become destructive to our society. A computer virus can better illustrate this point: some people intend to program computer virus to infringe on others’ computer, in 1988 the computer virus designed by an American student resulted in economic loss about one million dollars. Consequently, how can we say that this form of education is effective?

In sum, educators cannot deny the advantages of education designed to meet each student's needs and interests, whereas they should place more emphasis on foundational and moral education. Based on this, educators can provide kinds of courses for students to choose according to their needs and interests. This style of education, I think, is most efficient（effective）.
建议：
楼主用词和思路都相当不错，我需要学习！
但正文第一段关于神童的例子好像在反驳段的主题，另外正文第三段为什么满足个人需要不能取得个人成功是因为limited knowledge.
还有，effective 和 efficient是有点区别的，注意区分。

joey.liuUID: 2207101

http://www.gter.edu.cn/bbs/viewt ... &extra=page%3D1

"Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."

我的思路：基本同意作者观点，但不是全部同意

1．   满足大多数学生的需求和兴趣是必要的，无论对个人还是社会

2．   满足大多数学生的需求和兴趣是必须的，原因是当今的信息技术和国际化趋势

3．因为有限的资源和复杂的环境，不可能做到满足每个人。 并且对小学生必须有限制和榜样，因为他们的需要和兴趣有时是不合理的

  With the increasingly rapid development of globalization and urbanization all of the world in the new century, many problems are brought about, one of them is that how to make education truly effective. I broadly agree with the speaker's view that education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests, nevertheless, it's a hard task for us to satisfy the interests and needs for each student. Several explanations account for my point.

  First of all, in order to make education effective and thereby promote the progress of society and benefit the public, we should design various subjects to meet most students' needs and interests. If our design of curriculum met their interests, they would be encouraged to do research or studying with high spirits. From the aspect of their own, it helps to improve their skills and characters, they thus become confident and outgoing both in making friends and applying jobs. Furthermore, because they dedicate doing experiment or research, their deeds would undoubtedly make contribution to and benefit their colleges and society a lot. Therefore, only by this way can education be truly effective and thus benefit individuals and society.

  Secondly, after examining the situation which includes the development of information technologies and internalization, we must look for ways to meet individual needs and interests to ensure education effective and adapt the constantly changeable social environment. In this new century, our education needs to be able to work effectively in an interdependent society having a worldwide scope. Education, therefore, will need put its emphasis on the students' experience in learning, seeking knowledge through different methods, in addition to the lecture, and developing skills through experience. All that education would exercise is designed for meeting the needs and interests of most students. Subsequently, if we wanted to make our society forward smoothly and quickly, the prerequisite would be that education meet individual needs and interests to make it effective.

  However, after all, facing so limited resources and increasing number of students day by day, to make education satisfy each student's requirement would be an ideal goal in the long run rather than a feasible solution in the present. Moreover, for pupils, there is no escaping the fact that young people they need as example principals and teachers who know difference between right and wrong, good and bad, and who themselves exemplify high moral purpose. Thus, certain must be said, certain limits lay down and certain examples set. There is no other way. In this sense, we cannot always meet their undesirable needs and interests.  

  To sum up, it's not only necessary but also dispensable to design education to meet the individual needs and interests of most students to make it truly effective. But we would never realize the aim that satisfy the demands of all students for limited resources and complicated conditions, meanwhile, we risk disturbing normal educational system and resulting in chaos in education to winking at students' unreasonable desires blindly.

诚招战友互改文章， Thanks！

lixiaomin046400UID: 2207959

谢谢楼上给的建议，已帮你改好，发在你上面给的链接里:)

[ 本帖最后由 lixiaomin046400 于 2006-6-2 20:08 编辑 ]

lastpearlUID: 2119955

When it comes to education, whether it should meet each student's individual needs and interests is a controversial issue. The speaker asserts that only when education meets each student's individual needs and interests（为避免和前面的重复，可以适当的换一种表达） it will be effective. While I agree that inner interests and individual needs acts as impetus and catalyst in the process of achieving individual success and social progress, I insist that the speaker's idea is ideal and parochial.  

Admittedly, each student whose intellect, character and interests are quite different from others is unique. The same curriculum, schedule, teacher and the method teacher used cannot suit for each student. That is to say if teacher didn't（cannot,书面语中好像不能用缩写） teach students in accordance of(with) their aptitude(aptitudes?), education would be inefficient. Take, (逗号是不是要去掉) the whiz kids (also called a child prodigy) who endow with high intelligence quotient, extraordinary curiosity and self-absorption for example, they always cannot adapt to the common education so that the teachers and students around them consider them as eccentric. Thus, the whiz kids sometimes will be neglected. What is more, interests are the best teacher, the inner needs and interests impel the students to devote, strive and endeavor for achieving success. As we cast a look back at the history of technology and science, it is possible to find that inner interests and curiosity play a significant role （＋in education）.（提纲中提及的是“承认专门设计来满足每个学生个人需求和兴趣的教育是有效和有益的” 举神通的例子是否过于片面）
However, implementing the policy to meet each student's needs and interests is utopian. Firstly, when education becomes a public service provided by the government, it should serve all the students of the country. How enormous the work is to explore each student's interests and needs. More and more teachers will be needed, more and more apparatus will be used, more and more efforts should be made, more and more money should be invested, yet the fund used in education is limited. Secondly, interests and needs are variable factor（factors）. （When an infant--the future student was born, he came to the world without any innate interests to the outward surroundings. The infant only receives some external stimulation to recognize the world which is strange to him. His interests are influenced by the people around him and surroundings. He may be interested in astronomy at six years old, while at twelve years old he was wild about math. ）（时态是不是有点乱，一般现在时？过去时？）As his knowledge became richer and richer, his interests changed unceasingly. Therefore it is ridiculous to design some special programs to meet his needs and interests in education.

Furthermore, why I assert that the speaker's thought is parochial dues to the education's purpose and efficiency. The aim of education is to cultivate students' moral sense and value system, to give them essential courses such as math, art, literature. Provided that one student's curriculum schedule is only designed to meet his interests and needs, this student cannot make great achievement (achievements) because of limited knowledge. Even if he achieves great success, without regard to morality he can (would) become destructive to our society. A computer virus can better illustrate this point: some people intend to program computer virus to infringe on others’ computer (computers), in 1988 the computer virus designed by an American student resulted in economic loss about one million dollars. Consequently, how can we say that this form of education is effective?(例子中要适当说明，教育给予要设计病毒的人一定的帮助)

In sum, educators cannot deny the advantages of education designed to meet each student's needs and interests, whereas they should place more emphasis on foundational and moral education. Based on this, educators can provide kinds of courses for students to choose according to their needs and interests. This style of education, I think, is most efficient.