Issue38 【加州阳光】第二次作业 请拍 ★from 叶子★

leaf99UID: 2174003

38"In the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was. People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books."
基本上不同意作者观点。电视在某些方面有特定的优势。但书一定是学习的主要方式。
1、电视能够使教育更加vivid, visual，特别是教育儿童，教授表演艺术等方面。
2、但是电视的商业、盈利导向，娱乐的目的使得电视不适合于用于学习。
3、书本是知识的积淀。学生能够得到语言的锻炼，这是文明传承的基础。同时，书更便于携带，便宜，不受信号影响。
more than 1h, 字数 624

Television emerges as a relatively new form of learning that poses a continuous threat to books that have dominated mankind's educational history since their birth. Though many hold the viewpoint that reading books is of less importance in this fast-changing era since what we learn from books can easily be acquired from television. However, such intolerance toward books and blind adoration of television in terms of learning do not make any sense to me. Though television possesses some obvious advantages for learning, books, due to their exclusive features, provides the major channel to creation and accumulation of knowledge.

Admittedly, television is more visual and eye-catching than books, which enables its application to some specific educational cases. One widespread use of watching television is in child education. Children tend to be attracted by moving images in TV programs which provide abundant useful knowledge and powerful models for children to imitate. One successful example is the child TV program called Sesame Street, which teaches children not only alphabets and words but also life lessons through the stories of animals. Besides child teaching, television is also very effective in spreading news among people. Thanks to television, important news which used to take days or even months to be popularized will be immediately known to the whole world when it is broadcasted on television. Even in colleges, teaching of some visual subjects requires the assistance of television. For instance, the opera professor will choose to show the complete and vivid records of Cat and Notre Dame on television, rather than rely on explanations of opera books. In some cases such as teaching children, spreading news and learning visual arts, television has proved to be a more powerful and effective method of learning.

Despite some useful application, television still cannot take the place of books in educating people due to its nature of entertainment and its dominant commercial purposes. It is important to notice that television programs are largely produced by TV stations that were set up to gain profit. By taking advantage of people's instinctive preference to be entertained rather than to be educated, television stations tend to introduce entertaining programs that can attract most eyeballs to raise profitability. Today's television is dominated by fancy programs, profitable commercials and soap opera whose educational implications are insufficient and even misleading. To attract more audience, some programs even contain violence, sex, leaving a negative effect on the society. It is the nature and purpose of television that forbids its application to education to a larger extent.

Unlike television, books are published to restore knowledge with educational purposes. Books lead readers to a world of galloping imagination and creative reproduction. While reading between lines, readers could have enough space to visualize the images and reinterpret the books. Moreover, by reading books, readers can improve literacy and enhance the ability to write, reason, argue and analyze, all of which are essential to reproduce and accumulate knowledge for the next generation. A typical case is the use of textbooks in teaching. Students are encouraged to learn them and apply what they learn from textbooks to real life. It is these advantages of books that make them irreplaceable for centuries in educating human beings and accumulating knowledge, which can never be realized by fast-moving TV images.  Besides, people can read books at any time, any place, but they couldn't watch TV unless they buy the expensive TV sets and receive TV signals.

In conclusion, though television as a visual medium is effective in some educational areas, it cannot replace books as the dominant means of learning. Through reading books, readers can improve literacy and enhance ability to write, reason, argue and analyze which are essential to reproduce and accumulate knowledge in the human history.

[ 本帖最后由 leaf99 于 2006-6-10 11:45 编辑 ]

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Television emerges as a relatively new form of learning that poses a continuous threat to books that have dominated mankind's educational history since their birth. Though many hold the viewpoint that reading books is of less importance in this fast-changing era since what we learn from books can easily be acquired from television. However, such intolerance toward books and blind adoration of television in terms of learning do not make any sense to me. Though television possesses some obvious advantages for learning, books, due to their exclusive features, provides （provide） the major channel to creation and accumulation of knowledge.

Admittedly, television is more visual and eye-catching than books, which enables its application to some specific educational cases. One widespread use of watching television is in child education. Children tend to be attracted by moving images in TV programs which provide abundant useful knowledge and powerful models for children to imitate. One successful example is the child TV program called Sesame Street, which teaches children not only alphabets and words but also life lessons through the stories of animals. Besides child teaching, television is also very effective in spreading news among people. Thanks to television, important news which used to take days or even months to be popularized will be immediately known to the whole world when it is broadcasted on television. Even in colleges, teaching of some visual subjects requires the assistance of television. For instance, the opera professor will choose to show the complete and vivid records of Cat and Notre Dame on television, rather than rely on explanations of opera books. In some cases such as teaching children, spreading news and learning visual arts, television has proved to be a more powerful and effective method of learning.

Despite some useful application, television still cannot take the place of books in educating people due to its nature of entertainment and its dominant commercial purposes. It is important to notice that television programs are largely produced by TV stations that were set up to gain profit. By taking advantage of people's instinctive preference to be entertained rather than to be educated, television stations tend to introduce entertaining programs that can attract most eyeballs to raise profitability. Today's television is dominated by fancy programs, profitable commercials and soap opera whose educational implications are insufficient and even misleading. To attract more audience, some programs even contain violence, sex, leaving a negative effect on the society. It is the nature and purpose of television that forbids (forbid?) its application to education to a larger extent.

Unlike television, books are published to restore (store?) knowledge with educational purposes. Books lead readers to a world of galloping imagination and creative reproduction. While reading between lines, readers could have enough space to visualize the images and reinterpret the books. Moreover, by reading books, readers can improve literacy and enhance the ability to write, reason, argue and analyze, all of which are essential to reproduce and accumulate knowledge for the next generation. A typical case is the use of textbooks in teaching. Students are encouraged to learn them and apply what they learn from textbooks to real life. It is these advantages of books that make them irreplaceable for centuries in educating human beings and accumulating knowledge, which can never be realized by fast-moving TV images.  Besides, people can read books at any time, any place, but they couldn't watch TV unless they buy the expensive TV sets and receive TV signals.

In conclusion, though television as a visual medium is effective in some educational areas, it cannot replace books as the dominant means of learning. Through reading books, readers can improve literacy and enhance ability to write, reason, argue and analyze which are essential to reproduce and accumulate knowledge in the human history.

论证相当成功，无可挑剔！
1.正面说电视，让步，欲擒故纵
2.反面论电视，从侧面支持书籍
3.正面写书籍，正反结合，论证有力
总之，PERFECT ! 佩服楼主！

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我的作文总帖，帮支持一下，呵呵
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[ 本帖最后由 joey.liu 于 2006-6-10 13:59 编辑 ]

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38"In the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was. People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books."
基本上不同意作者观点。电视在某些方面有特定的优势。但书一定是学习的主要方式。
1、电视能够使教育更加vivid, visual，特别是教育儿童，教授表演艺术等方面。
2、但是电视的商业、盈利导向，娱乐的目的使得电视不适合于用于学习。
3、书本是知识的积淀。学生能够得到语言的锻炼，这是文明传承的基础。同时，书更便于携带，便宜，不受信号影响。
more than 1h, 字数 624

Television emerges as a relatively new form of learning that poses a continuous threat to books that have dominated mankind's educational history since their (对应television觉得应该用its？) birth. Though many hold the viewpoint that reading books is of less importance in this fast-changing era since what we learn from books can easily be acquired from television. However, such intolerance toward books and blind adoration of television in terms of learning do not make any sense to me. Though television possesses some obvious advantages for learning, books, due to their exclusive features, provides (provide) the major channel to creation and accumulation of knowledge.  （转折多次，感觉不太好，第一个though可以去掉，而且though可以换种说法）

Admittedly, television is more visual and eye-catching than books, which enables its application to some specific educational cases. One widespread use of watching television is in child education. Children tend to be attracted by moving images in TV programs which provide abundant useful knowledge and powerful models for children to imitate. One successful example is the child TV program called Sesame Street, which teaches children not only alphabets and words but also life lessons through the stories of animals. Besides child teaching, television is also very effective in spreading news among people. Thanks to （用在这里总觉得与上文不连贯，或者是少了过度）television, important news which used to take days or even months to be popularized will be immediately known to the whole world when it is broadcasted on television. Even in colleges, teaching of some visual subjects requires the assistance of television. For instance, the opera professor will choose（觉得用would like比较流畅） to show the complete and vivid records of Cat and Notre Dame on television, rather than rely on explanations of opera books.（加个连词会不会更好些） In some cases such as teaching children, spreading news and learning visual arts, television has proved to be a more powerful and effective method of learning.

Despite some useful application, television still cannot take the place of books in educating people due to its nature of entertainment and its dominant commercial purposes. It is important to notice that television programs are largely produced by TV stations that were set up to gain profit. By taking advantage of people's instinctive preference to be entertained rather than to be educated, television stations tend to introduce entertaining programs that can attract most eyeballs to raise profitability. Today's television is dominated by fancy programs, profitable commercials and soap opera whose educational implications are insufficient and even misleading. To attract more audience, some programs even contain violence, sex, leaving a negative effect on the society. It is the nature and purpose of television that forbids its application to education to a larger extent.

Unlike television, books are published to restore knowledge with educational purposes. Books lead readers to a world of galloping imagination and creative reproduction. While reading between lines, readers could have enough space to visualize the images and reinterpret the books. Moreover, by reading books, readers can improve literacy and enhance the ability to write, reason, argue and analyze, all of which are essential to reproduce and accumulate knowledge for the next generation. A typical case is the use of textbooks in teaching. （教科书的例子很好，可是感觉没讲清楚它的好处，叶子只用了一句没体现出它优势的话概括了啊）Students are encouraged to learn them and apply what they learn from textbooks to real life. It is these advantages of books that make them irreplaceable for centuries in educating human beings and accumulating knowledge, which can never be realized by fast-moving TV images.  Besides, people can read books at any time, any place, but they couldn't watch TV unless they buy the expensive TV sets and receive TV signals.

In conclusion, though television as a visual medium is effective in some educational areas, it cannot replace books as the dominant means of learning. Through reading books, readers can improve literacy and enhance ability to write, reason, argue and analyze which are essential to reproduce and accumulate knowledge in the human history.

写得很好啊，不论从遣词造句还是论证上，很佩服叶子！有一些建议，供叶子参考，错了请见谅:D

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Television emerges as a relatively new form of learning that poses a continuous threat to books that have dominated mankind's educational history since their birth. Though many hold the viewpoint that reading books is of less importance in this fast-changing era since what we learn from books can easily be acquired from television. However, such intolerance toward books and blind adoration of television in terms of learning do not make any sense to me. Though television possesses some obvious advantages for learning, books, due to their exclusive features, provides the major channel to creation and accumulation of knowledge. （好佩服叶子驾驭长句的能力）
Admittedly, television is more visual and eye-catching than books, which enables its application to some specific educational cases. One widespread use of watching television is in child education. Children tend to be attracted by moving images in TV programs which provide abundant useful knowledge and powerful models for children to imitate. One successful example is the child TV program called Sesame Street, which teaches children not only alphabets and words but also life lessons through the stories of animals. Besides child teaching, television is also very effective in spreading news among people. Thanks to television, important news which used to take days or even months to be popularized will be immediately known to the whole world when it is broadcasted on television. Even in colleges, teaching of some visual subjects requires the assistance of television. For instance, the opera professor will choose to show the complete and vivid records of Cat and Notre Dame on television, rather than rely on explanations of opera books. In some cases such as teaching children, spreading news and learning visual arts, television has proved to be a more powerful and effective method of learning. 精彩！

Despite some useful application, television still cannot take the place of books in educating people due to its nature of entertainment and its dominant commercial purposes. It is important to notice that television programs are largely produced by TV stations that were set up to gain profit. By taking advantage of people's instinctive preference to be entertained rather than to be educated, television stations tend to introduce entertaining programs that can attract most eyeballs to raise profitability. Today's television is dominated by fancy programs, profitable commercials and soap opera whose educational implications are insufficient and even misleading. To attract more audience, some programs even contain violence, sex, leaving a negative effect on the society. It is the nature and purpose of television that forbids its application to education to a larger extent.

Unlike television, books are published to restore knowledge with educational purposes. Books lead readers to a world of galloping imagination and creative reproduction. While reading between lines, readers could have enough space to visualize the images and reinterpret the books. Moreover, by reading books, readers can improve literacy and enhance the ability to write, reason, argue and analyze, all of which are essential to reproduce and accumulate knowledge for the next generation. A typical case is the use of textbooks in teaching. Students are encouraged to learn them and apply what they learn from textbooks to real life. It is these advantages of books that make them irreplaceable for centuries in educating human beings and accumulating knowledge, which can never be realized by fast-moving TV images.  Besides, people can read books at any time, any place, but they couldn't watch TV unless they buy the expensive TV sets and receive TV signals.

In conclusion, though television as a visual medium is effective in some educational areas, it cannot replace books as the dominant means of learning. Through reading books, readers can improve literacy and enhance ability to write, reason, argue and analyze which are essential to reproduce and accumulate knowledge in the human history.
叶子啊叶子，我好佩服你的说……
有一点小意见，我的习惯是把admittedly放在body的最后一段，因为我倾向于把主要的观点写在前面
不过范文里也有你这样写的
没有关系得把
我纯粹是找不出毛病来了

leaf99UID: 2174003

飞飞说的很有道理，难怪互改时发现很多都是最后一段 Admittedly
issue是我的大难题，不过你们让我重新有了信心
在互改的路上，我们要一起互帮互助，坚持到最后。

[ 本帖最后由 leaf99 于 2006-6-11 12:02 编辑 ]

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Television emerges as a relatively new form of learning that poses a continuous threat to books that have dominated mankind's educational history since their birth. Though many hold the viewpoint that reading books is of less importance in this fast-changing era since what we learn from books can easily be acquired from television. However, such intolerance toward books and blind adoration of television in terms of learning do not make any sense to me. Though television possesses some obvious advantages for learning, books, due to their exclusive features, provides the major channel to creation and accumulation of knowledge. [PFPF!]

Admittedly, television is more visual and eye-catching than books, which enables its application to some specific educational cases. One widespread use of watching television is in child education. Children tend to be attracted by moving images in TV programs which provide abundant useful knowledge and powerful models for children to imitate. One successful example is the child TV program called Sesame Street, which teaches children not only alphabets and words but also life lessons through the stories of animals. Besides child teaching, television is also very effective in spreading news among people. Thanks to television, important news which used to take days or even months to be popularized will be immediately known to the whole world when it is broadcasted on television[感觉这个例子不太好，这个说是更新率高，时效性和visual and eye-catching 还是有差别的吧~]. Even in colleges, teaching of some visual subjects requires the assistance of television. For instance, the opera professor will choose to show the complete and vivid records of Cat and Notre Dame on television, rather than rely on explanations of opera books. In some cases such as teaching children, spreading news and learning visual arts, television has proved to be a more powerful and effective method of learning. [在一段里面从不同的角度举例论证一个问题，牛牛，学习。。。

Despite some useful application, television still cannot take the place of books in educating people due to its nature of entertainment and its dominant commercial purposes[感觉这里用AND不好，他的娱乐性是由商业利益产生并扩大的]. It is important to notice that television programs are largely produced by TV stations that were set up to gain profit. By taking advantage of people's instinctive preference to be entertained rather than to be educated[有点牵强因为这不是真理性的，最好从一个什么地方引出来，什么牛人拉，调查拉], television stations tend to introduce entertaining programs that can attract most eyeballs to raise profitability. Today's television is dominated by fancy programs, profitable commercials and soap opera whose educational implications are insufficient and even misleading. To attract more audience, some programs even contain violence, sex, leaving a negative effect on the society. It is the nature and purpose of television that forbids its application to education to a larger extent. 太精彩了！

Unlike television, books are published to restore knowledge with educational purposes. Books lead readers to a world of galloping imagination and creative reproduction. While reading between lines, readers could have enough space to visualize the images and reinterpret the books. Moreover,[考虑前后关系这里用因果性连词就超超精彩了] by reading books, readers can improve literacy and enhance the ability to write, reason, argue and analyze, all of which are essential to reproduce and accumulate knowledge for the next generation. A typical case is the use of textbooks in teaching. Students are encouraged to learn them and apply what they learn from textbooks to real life. It is these advantages of books that make them irreplaceable for centuries in educating human beings and accumulating knowledge, which can never be realized by fast-moving TV images.  Besides, people can read books at any time, any place, but they couldn't watch TV unless they buy the expensive TV sets and receive TV signals.

In conclusion, though television as a visual medium is effective in some educational areas, it cannot replace books as the dominant means of learning. Through reading books, readers can improve literacy and enhance ability to write, reason, argue and analyze which are essential to reproduce and accumulate knowledge in the human history.
PFPF叶子 文笔这么流畅:O
帮看看我写的东西吧，
语言总把握不好，自己看得都难受
从哪些地方需要改进呢？？
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[ 本帖最后由 kejia0422 于 2006-6-12 18:56 编辑 ]

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Unlike television, books are published to restore knowledge with educational purposes. Books lead readers to a world of galloping imagination and creative reproduction. While reading between lines, readers could have enough space to visualize the images and reinterpret the books. Moreover, by reading books, readers can improve literacy and enhance the ability to write, reason, argue and analyze, all of which are essential to reproduce and accumulate knowledge for the next generation. A typical case is the use of textbooks in teaching. Students are encouraged to learn them and apply what they learn from textbooks to real life. It is these advantages of books that make them irreplaceable for centuries in educating human beings and accumulating knowledge, which can never be realized by fast-moving TV images.  Besides, people can read books at any time, any place, but they couldn't watch TV unless they buy the expensive TV sets and receive TV signals.

In conclusion, though television as a visual medium is effective in some educational areas, it cannot replace books as the dominant means of learning. Through reading books, readers can improve literacy and enhance ability to write, reason, argue and analyze which are essential to reproduce and accumulate knowledge in the human history.

除了结尾段最后1个句子跟第四段的一个句子过于类似而稍嫌重复之外，我对整篇文章看不出任何不好、不妥当或者不达意之处。赞叹～～
请叶子给我指导一下我的issue38吧，虽然写得很菜:(
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