Issue50 [Smile]第一次作业

xinxinwUID: 2144273

TOPIC: ISSUE50
- "In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach."

Outline:
+: Faculty with professional experience can bring students practical examples to better explain contents in the text book and incite student’s interest (engineering is industry oriented).
+: Faculty who are active engaged in works can give students up-to-date information about job market (students in basic disciplines are often at lost what career to take in).
-: Required working time would distract faculty from research which are of the top importance to faculty's academic lives and might result in loss of outstanding faculty.


Whether faculty at the college and university should spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach to improve the quality of instruction have always come with controversy. I fundamentally agree what the speaker claims for experience in profession world benefits both in-class and outside-class instructions of the faulty. But it is also important to keep balance between professional work and teaching.

In the first place, faculty who are active in professional fields will bring their students fruitful background in real world. It is especially the case when we are referring to academic areas such as engineering, which are industry-oriented from the time they came into being. For example, the science of optimization and scheduling are inspired from the increasingly lager scale and complexity of the manufacturing and delivery systems. Faculty in this area who are actively engaged in professional world are able to bring students practical and real-world examples to better explain and verify the principles and theories discussed in the text books. In my experience as a student, these examples always arouse my interest and excitement to dedicate into study, through which I gain more profound understanding about the field.

Secondly, experienced faulty can provide up-to-date instructions to students who are serious in seeking a career in that field. It is especially necessary fot students major in basic science fields such as mathematics and physics who want to lead a career in professional world, because these areas are so widely applied in almost every disciplines that the students are often at lost where to go. Keeping pace with the changing demands of work as a professional, faculty can give students insightful information about present job market and what work in the field entails form them to make informed decision, which college career consultants who are not equipped with such experience and specific knowledge in the area can not provide.

However, spending much time outside the academic world would, to be sure, distract faculty's attention from their research and teaching on which they ought to concentrate. Although facilitating faculty to impart more attractive and practical knowledge, theories and technologies, professional experience itself does not make up for any successful instruction, aside from some complement. Excellent teaching of the course is rooted in thorough research in that field which is most closely related to academic lives of faculty and always comes in the first for faculty in college and university to devote their time and energy. The obliged working time outside academic areas might cause the university to lose outstanding faculty member and thus result in declined level in course instructions. It is the duty of faculty to keep balance between professional work and teaching.

In conclusion, it is generally helpful for faculty to be engaged in professional work related to the course they teach because it would enrich students' insight of the vocation and the career. However, compulsory working time of professional work, as the speaker suggests, is far from necessity and would do harm to the instruction of the course. College and university should encourage, rather than require, faculty to involve in professional work and give their attentions to the tradeoff between teaching, research and professional work.


欢迎来拍！

smiles11UID: 2232631

TOPIC: ISSUE50
- "In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach."

Outline:
+: Faculty with professional experience can bring students practical examples to better explain contents in the text book and incite student’s interest (engineering is industry oriented).
+: Faculty who are active engaged in works can give students up-to-date information about job market (students in basic disciplines are often at lost what career to take in).
-: Required working time would distract faculty from research which are of the top importance to faculty's academic lives and might result in loss of outstanding faculty.


Whether faculty at the college and university should spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach to improve the quality of instruction have always come with controversy.---我自己写的时候也是，第一句话一直提醒自己要改短一些，不要抄原文，但是还是没有成功，呵呵！不过你已经比我好多了！ I fundamentally agree what the speaker claims for experience in profession world benefits both in-class and outside-class instructions of the faulty. But it is also important to keep balance between professional work and teaching.

In the first place, faculty who are active in professional fields will bring their students fruitful background in real world. It is especially the case when we are referring to academic areas such as engineering, which are industry-oriented from the time they came into being. For example, the science of optimization and scheduling are inspired from the increasingly lager scale and complexity of the manufacturing and delivery systems. Faculty in this area who are actively engaged in professional world are able to bring students practical and real-world examples to better explain and verify the principles and theories discussed in the text books. In my experience as a student, these examples always arouse my interest and excitement to dedicate into study, through which I gain more profound understanding about the field.---这一段没得说，挺好的，而且用词丰富！就是那个such as 后面最好列出两到三个吧，当然一个也可以的。但是我觉得前面列几个，然后具体举例一个领域的比较好！


Secondly, experienced faulty can provide up-to-date instructions to students who are serious in seeking a career in that field. It is especially necessary fot students major in basic science fields such as mathematics and physics who want to lead a career in professional world, because these areas are so widely applied in almost every disciplines that the students are often at lost where to go. Keeping pace with the changing demands of work as a professional, faculty can give students insightful information about present job market and what work in the field entails form them to make informed decision, which college career consultants who are not equipped with such experience and specific knowledge in the area can not provide.---这么能写长句子，一段话就三句话！ 不过我们都是将纯理论的这些学科作文不好出去工作的，你这样讲挺有道理的，考官看了肯定比较开心。

However, spending much time outside the academic world would, to be sure, distract faculty's attention from their research and teaching on which they ought to concentrate. Although facilitating faculty to impart more attractive and practical knowledge, theories and technologies, professional experience itself does not make up for any successful instruction, aside from some complement. Excellent teaching of the course is rooted in thorough research in that field which is most closely related to academic lives of faculty and always comes in the first for faculty in college and university to devote their time and energy. The obliged working time outside academic areas might cause the university to lose outstanding faculty member and thus result in declined level in course instructions. It is the duty of faculty to keep balance between professional work and teaching.--用词真的很丰富，无限羡慕！---但是你这样写算是均衡观点呢？还是算基本同意，感觉你这一段将前面的有否定了

In conclusion, it is generally helpful for faculty to be engaged in professional work related to the course they teach because it would enrich students' insight of the vocation and the career. However, compulsory working time of professional work, as the speaker suggests, is far from necessity and would do harm to the instruction of the course. College and university should encourage, rather than require, faculty to involve in professional work and give their attentions to the tradeoff between teaching, research and professional work.

用词没得说，这是我缺乏的。就是逻辑结构上，再看看！

applehattieUID: 2195344

Whether faculty at the college and university should spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach to improve the quality of instruction have always come with controversy. I fundamentally agree what the speaker claims for experience in profession world benefits both in-class and outside-class instructions of the faulty. But it is also important to keep balance between professional work and teaching.（开头不错简单有力，开门见山，我的观点和lz的差不多，但是就是最后一句话表达不出来）

In the first place, faculty who are active in professional fields will （用would会不会比较好）bring their students fruitful background in real world. It is especially the case when we are referring to academic areas such as engineering, which are industry-oriented from the time they came into being. For example, the science of optimization and scheduling are inspired from the increasingly lager scale and complexity of the manufacturing and delivery systems. Faculty in this area who are actively engaged in professional world are able to bring students practical and real-world examples to better explain and verify the principles and theories discussed in the text books. In my experience as a student, these examples always arouse my interest and excitement to dedicate into study, through which I gain more profound understanding about the field.（真羡慕能想出这种例子，和lz的一比，感觉自己写的很空洞，只是举的例子支持你的论点吗？工程学是指那些优化科学的吗？我好像不是很清楚）

Secondly, experienced faulty can provide up-to-date instructions to students who are serious in seeking a career in that field. It is especially necessary fot （for）students major in basic science fields such as mathematics and physics who want to lead a career in professional world, because these areas are so widely applied in almost every disciplines that the students are often at lost(the students often got lost个人意见呵呵) where to go. Keeping pace with the changing demands of work as a professional, faculty can give students insightful information about present job market and what work in the field entails form (这里是不是for啊？)them to make informed decision, which college career consultants who are not equipped with such experience and specific knowledge in the area can not provide.（觉得TS后面还可以解释一下，然后再来一个especially会不会比较好，长句和词汇都很棒）

However, spending much time outside the academic world would, to be sure, distract faculty's attention from their research and teaching on which they ought to concentrate. Although facilitating faculty to impart more attractive and practical knowledge, theories and technologies, professional experience itself does not make up for any successful instruction, aside from some complement. Excellent teaching of the course is rooted in thorough research in that field which is most closely related to academic lives of faculty and always comes in the first for faculty in college and university to devote their time and energy. The obliged working time outside academic areas might cause the university to lose outstanding faculty member and thus result in declined level in course instructions. It is the duty of faculty to keep balance between professional work and teaching.（最后一句话显得有点唐突，展开说会不会比较好，感觉其实这是你对整个第三段的总结，但是上面又没有提到，）

In conclusion, it is generally helpful for faculty to be engaged in professional work related to the course they teach because it would enrich students' insight of the vocation and the career. However, compulsory working time of professional work, as the speaker suggests, is far from necessity and would do harm to the instruction of the course. College and university should encourage, rather than require, faculty to involve in professional work and give their attentions to the tradeoff between teaching, research and professional work.（觉得全文是不是还应该加一段，可以是关于提高教育和知道水平的其他的方法，呵呵，当然只是在下拙见）
看了lz的文章感觉自己真的是菜鸟，要好好学习啊～

imzxzUID: 2138612

Whether faculty at the college and university should spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach to improve the quality of instruction have always come with controversy. I fundamentally agree what the speaker claims for experience in profession world benefits both in-class and outside-class instructions of the faulty. But it is also important to keep balance between professional work and teaching.

In the first place, faculty who are active in professional fields will bring their students fruitful background in real world. It is especially the case when we are referring to academic areas such as engineering, which are industry-oriented from the time they came into being. For example, the science of optimization and scheduling are inspired from the increasingly lager scale and complexity of the manufacturing and delivery systems. Faculty in this area who are actively engaged in professional world are able to bring students practical and real-world examples to better explain and verify the principles and theories discussed in the text books. In my experience as a student, these examples always arouse my interest and excitement to dedicate into study, through which I gain more profound understanding about the field.【好文笔！！！将engeering这个学科的特点写得很清楚，赞啊！】

Secondly, experienced faulty can provide up-to-date instructions to students who are serious in seeking a career in that field. It is especially necessary fot students major in basic science fields such as mathematics and physics who want to lead a career in professional world, because these areas are so widely applied in almost every disciplines that the students are often at lost where to go. Keeping pace with the changing demands of work as a professional, faculty can give students insightful information about present job market and what work in the field entails form them to make informed decision, which college career consultants who are not equipped with such experience and specific knowledge in the area can not provide.【论证得太棒了！我的那个类似的例子就写得面目可憎，受教了】

However, spending much time outside the academic world would, to be sure, 【语气太绝对】distract faculty's attention from their research and teaching on which they ought to concentrate. Although facilitating faculty to impart more attractive and practical knowledge, theories and technologies, professional experience itself does not make up for any successful instruction, aside from some complement. Excellent teaching of the course is rooted in thorough research in that field which is most closely related to academic lives of faculty and always comes in the first for faculty in college and university to devote their time and energy. The obliged working time outside academic areas might cause the university to lose outstanding faculty member and thus result in declined level in course instructions. It is the duty of faculty to keep balance between professional work and teaching.【说理说得很清楚，真的很佩服。。。。】

In conclusion, it is generally helpful for faculty to be engaged in professional work related to the course they teach because it would enrich students' insight of the vocation and the career. However, compulsory working time of professional work, as the speaker suggests, is far from necessity and would【用may应该会好些】 do harm to the instruction of the course. College and university should encourage, rather than require, faculty to involve in professional work and give their attentions to the tradeoff between teaching, research and professional work.

lz强人啊！！一定要向你好好学习！

枫晰UID: 2123661

lz写的的太精彩了,
好好学习ing

monica98UID: 2124796

刚看完你的issue，再说一次我很pf你，拜读了^_^
用词，举例很好，以后请多指教！你改我的意见也很到位，我在努力修改当中，发现改自己文章是最难的，要突破自己的局限性啊！

yxjessieUID: 194526

观点很清晰，印象最深刻的是你的句式变化和长句子。能否介绍一下写长句子的心得？比如说你自己是怎么练习的？
谢谢指教。