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标题: 0810G文以载道小组大帖(第二轮) [打印本页]

作者: lisheng19881108    时间: 2008-7-15 16:39:43

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第十五次作业 issue43 https://bbs.gter.net/thread-858410-1-1.html  第一篇望猛拍 改#50 joans
                   issue56 https://bbs.gter.net/thread-859352-1-1.html  第二篇         改#50 joans

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作者: anderysw    时间: 2008-7-20 15:50:53

8月18日 厦门 请问现在能否让我加入这个小组,万分感激啊:handshake
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作者: dynamicboyustc    时间: 2008-8-2 21:04:18

0810G 南京 852796223
作者: saavedro    时间: 2008-8-3 12:01:54

呵呵 好熟悉啊,, 当初一起来的
作者: piaopiao_0512    时间: 2008-8-3 12:45:54

昨天下载了楼上的压缩包,很多材料,来不及看了 可惜啊,楼上很强,楼主 第二轮互改,我参加,
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2008.8.4    I51    https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=865589&extra=page%3D1
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2008.8.5    I144  https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=866139&extra=page%3D1
2008.8.5    A65   https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=866140&extra=page%3D1

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作者: greatsong2007    时间: 2008-8-4 21:16:43     标题: 阿波罗8.27 帮忙拍拍啊XDJM

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作者: dynamicboyustc    时间: 2008-8-4 22:29:29

第二篇习作 望多拍多拍
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ARGUMENT 10
The argument recommends that regulation should be taken to retail milk prices in order to ensure  both lower prices and and an adequate supply of milk for consumers.To justify the assertion,the author cites a report that the number of diary farms are 25 percent greater than before throughout the country. The speaker also points out that the price of milk have doubled compared to that of ten years ago. However ,these evidences fail to lend strong support to the recommendation.
  One problem with the argument is that the increase of the number of dairy farms does not necessarily indicates the production of milk.Since the speaker are not able to provide sufficient evidence,it is quite possible that the average of all dairy farms suffer from a decline while the total number does augment.For this matter ,it is just aslikely that the whole production of milk in the market decrease rather than 增加.

Even if the milk supply does increase ,the author unfairly assumes that farmers receive excessive profits .Yet the author cannot convince me without providing a cost and revenue analysis for it is a well-known fact that the success of one business is the function of revenue and expenses .It is entirely possible that the cost of operating each farm grow faster than that of the prices and therefore farmers make less profits instead than they do in the past.

  Even assuming that excessive profits are received by the farmers ,the speaker overlooks the fact that there is no certain correlation between the supply and prices .A series of factors may contribute to the up and down of milk prices, for instance inflation ,thus the whole circumstances of the market needed to be considered when considering whether the local prices is beyond the normal standard.
  Given constraining of the milk prices are to be taken up ,the result may be that farmers choose to decrease their daily production to ensure gaining profits. If this is true , obviously the final goal to ensure an adequate supply of milk for consumers can not be fulfilled .
   To sum up ,the conclusion reached in this argument is invalid and misleading. To make the recommendation more convincible , the author should provide a thorough analysis of cost and revenue of the milk market. To bolster the recommendation we need more information to  ensure that an adequate supply of milk for consumers will not be affected as s result of the suggestion .
Increase修改意见:将通货膨胀写入农民获利,就是说通货膨胀导致成本增加,然后是农民获利减少




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