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Learing Fact Takes Priority



Nowadays, students dedicate themselves in learning abstract ideas and concepts as well as pure fact. Some people put understanding ideas and concepts in the first way; however, in my opinion, fact is of the greatest importance for students, since fact is the source of all wisdom and for students, fact is easily to perceive.

First of all, we need to bear in mind that fact is the foundation of all the wisdom in human beings. Wise heads develop deep and profound ideas from the bare fact. Examples abound in history that Newton discovered the law of gravity when he saw an apple falling down onto the ground; Socrates established the primitive outlook from his daily observation of the life. What’s more, only in accordance with the changing fact can ideas and concept survive, that is to say, facts not only solidify theory but also keep the theory afresh. So essentially, facts are more important than ideas and concepts.

Secondly, facts are easy to perceive, and further, are more practical to learn. Compared with the easily-acceptable fact, you cannot deny that understanding ideas and concepts really lay heavy burdens on students. And what on earth are the serious ideas and concepts apply for? Is it practical enough for our social reality? Learning facts seems to giving students more acquaintance of the world.

In conclusion, I think it's far better idea to emphasize more on learning fact instead of understanding ideas and concept. Thus, students will be as flexible and creative as the ancient scholars who uncover wisdom from simple fact.





哈~拍吧。时间长不写作文,手生~
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发表于 2009-1-30 23:25:51 |只看该作者
1# ibt9.12

Nowadays, students dedicate themselves in learning abstract ideas and concepts as well as pure fact. Some people put understanding ideas and concepts in the first way; however, in my opinion, fact is of the greatest importance for students, since fact is the source of all wisdom and for students, fact is easy to perceive.觉得都该用facts

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First of all, we need to bear in mind that fact is the foundation of all the wisdom in human beings. Wise heads develop deep and profound ideas from the bare fact. Examples abound in history that Newton discovered the law of gravity when he saw an apple falling down onto the ground; Socrates established the primitive outlook from his daily observation of the life. What’s more, only in accordance with the changing fact can ideas and concept survive, that is to say, facts not only solidify theory but also keep the theory afresh. So essentially, facts are more important than ideas and concepts./ M( f$ i! Z# Q' o. c& \# r) W

Secondly, facts are easy to perceive, and further, are more practical to learn. Compared with the easily-acceptable fact, you (students) cannot deny that understanding ideas and concepts really lay heavy burdens on students. And what on earth are the serious ideas and concepts apply for? Is it practical enough for our social reality? Learning facts seems to giving students more acquaintance of the world.



In conclusion, I think it's far better idea to emphasize more on learning fact instead of understanding ideas and concept. Thus, students will be as flexible and creative as the ancient scholars who uncover wisdom from simple fact.

嗯。都用了牛顿啃苹果一个facts一个ideas,长见识了~
注意下文章内部人称的统一,我觉得上面那里用you就不好。
我觉得呐,理由二最好再长点~这样才不显得到后面无话可说、
最后一句很精彩~
No more words. No more comments.

我想离开。这个浮华的世界。

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发表于 2009-1-31 12:51:51 |只看该作者

Learning Fact Takes Priority

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Nowadays,students dedicate themselves in learning abstract ideas and concepts aswell as pure fact. Some people put understanding ideas and concepts inthe first way; however, in my opinion, fact is of the greatestimportance for students, since fact is the source of all wisdom and forstudents, (and)fact is easy to perceive.) a9 F  u# {6 t6 |$ A! U/ d/ F
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Firstof all, we need to bear in mind that fact is the foundation of all thewisdom in human beings. Wise heads develop deep and profound ideas fromthe bare facts. Examples abound in history that Newton discovered thelaw of gravity when he saw an apple falling down onto the ground; (我觉得这个例子有点勉强)Socrates established the primitive outlook from his daily observationof the life. What’s more, only in accordance with the changing fact canideas and concepts survive, that is to say, facts(fact 还是 facts是不是应该统一一下) not only solidifytheory but also keep the theory afresh. So essentially, facts are moreimportant than ideas and concepts.

Secondly,facts are easy to perceive, and further, are more practical to learn.Compared with the easily-acceptable fact, you cannot deny thatunderstanding ideas and concepts really lay heavy burdens on students.And what on earth are the serious ideas and concepts apply for? Is itpractical enough for our social reality? Learning facts seems to givingstudents more acquaintance of the world.

Inconclusion, I think it's far better idea to emphasize more on learningfact instead of understanding ideas and concepts. Thus, students will beas flexible and creative as the ancient scholars who uncover wisdomfrom simple fact.

还有第二个分论点展开的好像少了点。:lol
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发表于 2009-1-31 13:35:41 |只看该作者
谢两位拍啦~:p

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