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发表于 2009-7-11 21:16:12 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
2009.7.11今天写了 第一篇 综合写作

定时写的

如下:
One theory explain the disappearence of Anasazi is the Drought Theory, which concluds three main reasons leading to the sunden vanishing, that is to say, global warming, shortage of water and the stravation owing to the overngrowing population.
However, recently a new rearch found this theory might not be just hypothesis, and the ture cause of the Anasazi  collapsing should be more complicated.
Firstly, traced back around 1130 A.D, the trees survived in New Mexico's Chaco Canyon near the Anasazi provide a solid evidence to refute the "global warming" . How could the peopel starved to death, but the tree survived? What's more, we all know the global warming could only appear in some district in the earth, not the whole world.
Secondly, the presence of irrigation systems, such as dams and canals, not as an evidence of drought , tell the turth that the Anansazi had been fully awared about the shortage of water and developed sufficient advanced techology to solve the problem.
Finally, more possible factors should be taken into consideration, such as the attacking by another tribe, disease or overusing  of the farmland. We could never account an disappearance of a floushingly developed  and highly  intelligent tribe to just one simple reason, that is to say, drought.
In conlusion, when consider about the Anasazi's vanishing, we should take more factors and evidence into deliberation, rather than counting on only one theory.


修改后:
One theory explain the disappearence of Anasazi is the big summer drought theory, which supported by three main evidence , that is to say, global warming, shortage of water and the stravation owing to the overgrowing population.
However, recently a new rearch found that this theory might  be just an hypothesis, and indicated that the authentic cause of the Anasazi's migration should be more complicated.
Firstly, traced back around 1130 A.D, the trees survived in New Mexico's Chaco Canyon where the Anasazi used to live provide a solid evidence to refute the evidence of global warming.  How could the people starved to death, but the trees survived? In other words, if there were gobal warming in that area, the trees could never saved. In sum, although the global warming might effect some districts and cause sever drought, luckily the Chacao Canyon is not one of those areas.
Secondly, the presence of irrigation systems, such as dams and canals, instead of  an evidence proping the drought theory, tells us the turth that the Anasazi had been fully awared about the shortage of water and developed sufficient advanced techology to solve the problem as a result. The irrigation systems helped them to watering the crops and the depository of crops assited to fighting against the drought, all those intelligent devices created by the Anasazi showed that they could not be driven to abondon their homeland simply by the  drought.
Finally, some other possible factors should be taken into consideration, such as the attacking by another tribe who is good at fighting and winning, some major diasterable disease and the overuse of the farmland. We could never account an disappearance of such a booming and highly  intelligent tribe to just one simple reason, that is to say, drought.
In conlusion, when consider about the Anasazi human's vanishing, we should take more factors and evidence into deliberation, rather than just count on only one theory- the big summer drought.


求拍!!



另外总结今天学习的杨鹏长难句。

1.That sex ratio will be favored which maximizes the number of descendants an individual will have and hence the number of gene copies transmitted. (难度系数5,下同)
难句类型:倒装、省略

A(that ratio) will be favored(advocated\ backed\endorsed\sanctioned\opposed\countered\chanllenged\combated\attacked etc.)which maximizes(influences\control\sway\impact on\colour) B(the number of...) and hence C(the number of ...) .

i.e. A wich influnce B and hence C will be favored.

2.This is A desire to throw over reality a light
that never was might give away abruptly to the desire on the part of what we might consider a novelist-scientist to record exactly and concretely the structure and texture of a flower .(5++)
复杂+倒装+省略;


A give way to B,是A让位于B,而A be given way to B, 则是A取代B

This is A (a desire to throw over a. b.  that never was might give way abruptly to B (the desire )on the part of what we might consider C.

解释某个事情--- B, 某种意义上可以认为是。。。。(on the part of what we might consider..)


3.
1.
Hardy’s weakness derived from his apparent inability to control the comings and goings of these divergent impulses and from his unwillingness to cultivate and sustain the energetic and riskyones.



1.
难句类型:复杂修饰、省略、抽象词


Sb’s weakness derived from his apparent inability to control the comings and going of
A and from his unwillingness to culitivate and sustainB.



The weakness(feebleness\ puiniess\shakiness\defect\ weak point \foible\blemish\imperfection\\ \forte\ bent\ long suit\ speciality\bonus\convenience\)  derived from its apparent inability to do A and from its unwillingness to do B.


Comings and goings of the divergent .....
control-----cultivate and sustain......


4.
1.
Virginia Woolf’s provocative statement about her intentions in writing Mrs. Dalloway has regularly been ignored by the criticssince it highlights an aspect of her literary interests very different from the traditional picture of the "poetic" novelist concerned with examining states of reverie and vision and with following the intricate pathways of individual consciousness. 5
难句类型:复杂修饰、省略、抽象词

A’s provocative statement about her intention in doing sth. has regularly been ignored by othersthe critics, since it highlights an aspect of sth. very different from the traditional picture of B concerned with doing…and with doing……


The provocative statement(declaration\expression\assertion\proclaimation) about A has regularly been ignored by B, since it highlights an aspect of sth very different from the traditional picture of C concerned with ......
非常好的表达!!

5.
1.
As she put it in The Common Reader , “It is safe to say that not a single law has been framed or one stone set upon another because of anything Chaucer said or wrote ; and yet , as we read him , we are absorbing morality at every pore .”5-
抽象词、抽象词组、比喻

It is safe to say that not A has been done or B done because of Canything Sb. said or wrote; and yet, as we read himC, we are absorbing D.at every pore.


A 虽然没有导致B和C,但是却让我感受到了D。
absorb sth at every  pore( 完全感受到什么。。)

6.

2.
With the conclusion of a burst activity , the lactic acid level is high in the body fluids , leaving the large animal vulnerable to attack until the acid is reconverted , via oxidative metabolism , by the liver into glucose , which is then sent (in part )back to the muscles for glycogen resynthesis .4+
难句类型:复杂修饰、插入语、专有名词

出题者是一定会在文章中把它在文章中所乃至的词义解释清楚的,所以读者遇到文章中做了解释的专有名词,应该力求把解释看懂。

With the conclusion of a activity,the level of A is high in B, leaving C

vulnerable to attack until
A is reconverted
, via D, by E into F, which is then sent back to G for H resynthesis.



表述过程!! leaving ---=leading           A be reconverted into F, via D, by E===A be done, via D,byE into F



7.

1.
Although Gutman admits that forced separation by sale was frequenthe shows that the slaves’ preferencerevealed most clearly on plantations where sale was infrequentwas very much for stable monogamy. 3+
难句类型:插入语

Although Sb. admits that A was frequent, he shows that B(sb’s preference) ,revealed most clearly on sp.where C was infrequent, was very much for sth.

关键在插入语

B,revealed most clearly( phenomenally拼写\stuning\astonishing\remarkable\exceptional\breathtaking) on sp. where( in some aspect which..)


8.
2.
Gutman argues convincingly that the stability of the Black family encouraged the transmission of-and so was crucial in sustaining-the Black heritage of folkloremusicand religious expression from one generation to anothera heritage that slaves were continually fashioning out of their African and American experiences. 4
难句类型:复杂修饰、插入语


Sb. argues convincingly that A encouraged B(doing sth) , and so was crucial in C(doing sth).+同位语修饰。  


encourage---导致--也有因果关系的含义
enbolden\ incite\ stir\whip up\ uplife\ hearten\animate




9.
1.
This preference for exogamyGutman suggests may have derived from West African rules governing marriagewhichthough they differed from one tribal group to anotherall involved some kind of prohibition against unions with close kin. 3+
难句类型:复杂修饰、插入语

The preference for …., sb. suggests, may have derived from….., which, though they(it) differed from one…to another, all involved some kind of

A may be derived from B, which, thought B differed from one to another, all involved some kind of C.

A 来源于B。虽然这些B多多少少有些差异,但它们都含有C。--B 的共性是C

10.

2.
His thesis works relatively well when applied to discrimination against Blacks in the United Statesbut his definition of racial prejudice as "racially-based negative prejudgments against a group generally accepted as a race in any given region of ethnic competition" can be interpreted as also including hostility toward such ethnic groups as the Chinese in California and the Jews in medieval Europe. 4+
难句类型:复杂修饰、插入语、抽象词

考试现场如无法读懂,宜用合理化原则中的取非读法but之前的分句说的是其论点对美国黑人的种族歧视是较为管用,转折后的内容就应该说其理论对华人和犹太人相对无用。

A works relatively well when applied to C, but the definition of sth. as “ D ” can be interpreted as also including hostility toward such… as…..and ….



A works relatively well when applied to B, but the definition of sth from A as.......can also be interperted as including hostility toward sth such as...and....


such as 的倒装: be hostile toward ethnic groups such as...and....=====be hostile toward such groups as....and...
interperte=definite
have hostility toward==be hostile to

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我也是八月八号考      比较郁闷上一次考试是86       但是都是3月份考的 今天我在从新准备的时候  
从做BARRON 听力无加试基本上是错4-5个     阅读也是错4-5个  一直觉得我口语不错但是今天一说的时候理由总是说的不好           写作就不用提了       至今没个思路

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我的听力和阅读现在还老错10个呢 很郁闷的~~要多训练啊!!看来还是要题海战术!

口语还没开始呢~觉得作文是口语的基础!作文能快速反应出来 应该能说出来~

今晚要写一篇独立写作!

吸取教训,所以开楼监督自己~

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发表于 2009-7-12 11:36:48 |只看该作者
7.11 独立写作 --规定用时内没完成    原因:结构没有掌握好,要多练习议论文的结构!每句话都有他的存在意义的!
7.12 修改(2小时)时间过长 ,似乎有点偏题!下回先写好每段TS,再写 。 原因:过于扣文字,注意!要点是结构和句式,还有连贯性!(不要学歪了)

712 独立写作   参照戴云教主讲义中的范文结构写的。
题目:
Does modern technology help students to learn more information and learn it more quicky?



Today students in campus can reach almost all the resource they want by internet, and single out effective information for their own use. The modern technology with the first advent in the early 20th centrury had dramaticaly influenced the way people learn by broadening the amount and boosting the speed. Like any advanture in history, these advancment might cause some backdarws, but as long as convience, cost, and the diversity of knowledge are taken into consideration, the long suit of the modern techology is much more obvious.

Firstly, some slight disadvantages accompanied the merits includes both pushing details and lacking of first hand information. For instance, every minute we are receiving indiscriminately sended spam, the most hated product of Internet commerce, such as advertisments, promotion sheets and sometimes even a swindle, which almost buries e-mail of significance. Another drawback involves the possiblity that we might be submerged by rumors or falisfied facts. For example, the news we obtained by tiwtter or facebook, creation of morden technology, in a large way, is nothing but just rumor and gossips, hampered communication.

Even though there might be some minor defects, the advantages are far outweight them. With the utilization of modern technology, we can reach to the destinated information much more easily and smoothly, revealed more distinctively when we are stuck with the massive reading load, so as analyze the data, than the predecesor did decades ago. For example, when my father in colleage, he may find himself encircled by piles of documents or generic materials, which might be as tall as his height, and exhausted of transcripting, operating and rummaging the entire summer. What a trouble! Luckily, today favoured by the computer-based information storage and retrieval systems, conveniencly and powerfully we done all of those job by accessing to the data bank online or the reference sections of the university liberary, checking out the index or dowenloading some crucial data, then calculating with the high-speed computer. Besides the convenience, modern technology enabled us to spare much more money and time, therefore improve the efficiency, which is one of the most important charateristics of success, the goal of everyone, especially in today’s intensively competing society.

Another benefit contributed by these “wonder tool” is that students are in an ideal environment to acquire and reflect what they learned. For example, backed by the internet thought the world, the diversities of information students can reach nowadays are beyond imaging, such as the latest periodicals, books, collections and papers of reputed experts or organizations , sometimes even the recorded music and vedio material. And what’s more cheerful is that the lectures in many universities aound the world are now exposed to students, equipped with certain devices, no matter a computer or a cellphone, to get access to the website. In addition, the various source prevent the corruption and prejudice. For instance, not so easily been cheated by some unilateral explanation or bidding, thanks at least partly to the morden techonlogy, we are surrounding with catholic information; and the facts no longer withhold or disguised.

It is safe to say that couple of disadvantages concerning learning has been done because of the modern technology, and yet, as we reflect on the way we grasp information, we are aborbing convience and diveristy at every pore. Backed by these wonder tools, the student can learn about knowledge in the most effective way possible. In addition, he will find himself in an atmosphere in which his sight will certainly widen. In my opinion, these are the two most important aspects to appraise the learning process, and applying modern technolgy is the best way to achieve them .



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总结:
1、常用词汇:

Consider\ponder\appraise\examine\judge\weight up\reflect on \chew over\meditate on\ruminate over\

Consider\deem\regard as\gauge\count\rate\reckon\suppose\

Learn\gain an understanding\grasp\master\absorb\pick up\become competent in

Minor\slight\of little account\inconsequential\petty\footling\trivial\trifling\peripheral(拼写!)

Easily=effortlessly=straightforwardly\with ease\smoothly\

Easy=facile\painless\manageable\biddable\

laborious\demanding\chanllenging\exacting\gruelling\relentless\burdensome\exhausting\taxing\wearisome\tedious\back-breaking

Effective\efficacious(拼写)\effectual\productive\constructive\frutiful\potent\powerful\beneficial\

search\look up\rummage in sp. for sth =fish about\explore\scrabble\forage\pursue\ferret\probe\

Help\support\contribute to\boost\back\favour==帮助=支持


Related\parallel\corresponding\correlated\

2.主题相关词汇

indiscriminately sended spam

Internet commerce

generic materials\ piles of documents \ the latest periodicals\ books\ collections \papers \recorded music and vedio materials


transcirpting, operating and rummaging 抄写、运算和翻找


computer-based information storage and retrieval systems (听力中学到的!听力的对话是例子的好来源)


data bank

reference sections


先到这里,吃饭去了,吃完了。再贴上 3. 句式和小结构

然后要做阅读和听力去了。。。

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长难句 11-30

11.
1.
Such variations in size shapechemistry conduction speed excitation thresholdand the like as had been demonstrated in nerve cells remained negligible in significance for any  possible correlation with the manifold dimensions of mental experience.5

难免类型:复杂修饰

Such variations inA as had been demonstrated( above\by sb.\in sth.) remained negligible in significance for any possible correlation with
C


The variations had been demonstrated ( above\by sb.\in sth.)
, such as the variations in….and…, remained negligible in significance for any possible relation with ….C


FOR作介词――目的地、表对象(领域,即在什么方面)、表用途、表支持、表倾向、
表对比、比例\表寻找、期待的目的、表爱好、表特长所在(an ear for music\a stickler for detail.
Bulk by bulk, water is heavier than oil.
The commentators all say it is not practical but I am for him trying.
The weather report was for clear and sunny.

12.
2.
It was possible to demonstrate by other methods refined structural differences among neuron types ; however , proof was lacking that the quality of the impulse or its condition was influenced by these differences , which seemed instead to influence the developmental patterning of the neural circuits .(5)
有可能通过其他方法来证明神经元种类间的细微的结构差异;可是,这样的证据是缺乏的,即神经冲动的性质或者状态是受这些差异所影响的,而这些差异看起来却能影响神经网络的发育模式。



It was possible to demostrate by other methods refined differences among..; however, proof was lacking that ....was influenced by these differences, which seemed instead to influence ....


It was possible to demostrate A ; however, proof was lacking that B was influenced by A, which seemed instead to influence C

A 可以证实,但A 不能影响B A 能影响C
同位语、定语、倒装


13.
Although qualitative variance among nerve energies was never rigidly disproved
the doctrine was generally abandoned in favor of the opposing viewnamelythat nerve impulses are essentially homogeneous in quality and are transmitted as "common currency" throughout the nervous system. 4




难句类型:复杂修饰、双重否定

Although qualitative variance among .....was never rigidly disproved, the doctrine was generally abandoned infavor of the opposing views, namely, that ..... are essentially homogeneous in quality and are transmitted as “common currency” throughout the….system.

Although A was never rigidly disproved, the doctrine was generally abandoned in favour of the opposing views, transimitted as "common currency" throughout the country.


Namely,to be specific, specifically, that is to say,in other words,
so to speak----eg:Therefore I think we must, so to speak, resort to more extreme measures.

The doctrine \belief\ conviction\creed\credo\dogma\tenet\notion\precept\
common currency\prevalence\acceptance\popularity\ the opposing views

The doctrine be never rigidly disproved
<> be generally abandoned in favour of the opposing views

然而被当作—and are transmitted as…
Qulitative variance
质的差异

Be essentially homogeneous in quality本质相同的

In favor of
1. to be replaced by
He stepped down as leader in favor of his rival.

2. in support or to the advantage of
Menmbers have to voted in favor of..
The judge decided in favor of the defendant.



14.
Other experiments revealed slight variations in the sizenumber,  arrangementand interconnection of the nerve cellsbut as far as psycho neural correlations were concernedthe obvious similarities of these sensory fields to each other seemed much more remarkable than any of the minute differences. 4 -




Sth. revealed slight variation in ….., but as far as….were concerned, the obvious similarites of …to each other seemed much more remarkable than any of the minute difference.

Homogeneous in quality\Similarity
Distinction\variation\difference\disparity\

Interconnection\corelation\

Remarkable \striking\outstanding\impressive\signal\considerable\distinctive\notable
\exceptional\marvellous\astounding\astonishing\sensational\outstanding\arresting\
Minute\minor\slight\

Obvious\plain\transparent\conspicous\patent\apparent\demostrable


15.


        Although some experiments show that, as an object becomes familiar, its internal representation becomes more holistic and the recognition process correspondingly more A , the weight of evidence seems to support
the serial hypothesis,
at least for objects that are not notably simple and familiar. 4+



Although studys show that, as A becomes.......,
B becomes more……and C
correspondingly more……, the weight of evidence seems to support D, at least for E .



investigations\inspections\study\research\survey\probe\observation

Corresponding\relative\proportional\commensurate\parallel\equivalent\

Representation\depiction\rendering\sketch\statue\illustration\ 表现.形象
Recognition\ idenification\recollection 识别

Hypothesis\theory\conjecture\speculation\postulation\supposition\surmise\premise\assumption\concept

16.

6.
In large part as a consequence of the feminist movement
historians have focused a great deal of attention in recent years on determining more accurately the status of women in various periods. 3+


In large part as a consequence of A, people have focused a great deal of attention in recent years on determining more accurately the status of B in various perious.

Focused a great deal of attention in recent years on sth.
In large part \in large mearsure\to a great extent\
As an consequence\outcome\product\fruits\ of …,
Derived from\ originated in\
Obtain\derive\procure\attain\glean\extract\



17.
7.
If one begins by examining why ancients refer to Amazons , it becomes clear that ancient Greek descriptions of such societies were meant not so much to represent observed historical fact –real Amazonian societies – but rather to offer “moral lessons” on the supposed outcome of women’s rule in their own society . (4)


If one begins by examining why we refer to A, it becomes clear that our description of A were meant not so much to represent observed fact- real A- but rather to offer “moral lessons” on the supposed outcome of B.

If one begins by doing sth.\from sth, it becomes clear that our description of A was meant not so much to represent B, but rather to offer C.

Observed fact—staged authenticity---supposed outcome
Represent\offer\show\delineate\depict\display\sketch\render\maintain\claim\
Offer\provide\propose\suggest\submit\put forward\present\
Description\explanation\interpretation\elucidation\



18.
8.
Thusfor instance
it may come as a shock to mathematicians to learn that the Schrodinger equation for the hydrogen atom is not a literally correct description of this atombut only an approximation to a somewhat more correct equation taking account of spinmagnetic dipoleand relativistic effectsand that this corrected equation is itself only an imperfect approximation to an infinite set of quantum field-theoretical equations. 5


Thus, for instance, it may come as a shock to sb. to learn that A is not a literally correct description of B, but only an approximation to a somewhat more correct equation taking account of C.; and that this corrected equation is itself only an imperfect approximation to an infinite set of D.



Thus, for instence, it may come to a shock to those, who hold the idea that…, that A is not B, but C taking account of D; and thatC is E.

Literally- verbatim\exactly\precisely\strictly\accurately\
Loosely\imprecisely\
Approximation\estimate\conjecture\rough calculation\
Resemblance\similarity\semblance\likeness\
Correct\veracious\strict\presice\flawless\meticulous\proper\seemly\decorous\decent\
conventional\accepted\

19.
9.
The physicist rightly dreads precise argumentsince an argument that is convincing only if it is precise loses all its force if the assumptions on which it is based are slightly changedwhereas an argument that is convincing though imprecise may well be stable under small perturbations of its underlying assumptions. 5+



Sb. rightly dreads A, since A that is convincing only if it is …. losed all its force if the assumptions on which it is based are slightly changed, whereas B that
is
….though….may well be stable under small perturbations of its underlying assumptions.


Sb opposes A, since A that is convincing only if it is A1 losed all its force if A2 are changed, whereas B that is convincing though not A1 may well be stable under minor perturbation of A2.

A 只在某条件下可信,条件改变,A不可信。
B虽然。。。但当条件稍微改变时,B仍可信。
Since A losed all its force, whereas B may well be stable.
Since A that is convicing only if it is….losed all its force, whereas B that is convincing though imprecise may well be stable.
Since A losed all its force if C changed, whereas B may well be stable under perturbation of C.

rightly dreads
Change\perturbation\variation\transformation\evolution\mutation\ 转变
Alternation\modification\revision\amendment\ 修改
Substitution\alternation\rotation\swap\exchange\switch\ 替换
Perturbation
perturb


20.

10.
Howeveras they gained cohesion
the Bluestockings came to regard themselves as a women’s group and to possess a sense of female solidarity lacking in the salonniereswho remained isolated from one another by the primacy each held in her own salon. 4-


However, as they gained.. , they came to regard themselves as A and to possess a sense of B lacking in the others, who remained

Cohesion \solidarity\ intergrate
Isolated from one another by sth
Isolate\detach\separate\insulate\segregate \seclude\

21.

AA       As  my own studies have advancedI have been increasingly impressed with the functional  similarities between insect and vertebrate societies and less so with the structural differences that seemat first glanceto constitute such an immense gulf between them. 5



As the studies have advanced, I have been increasingly impressed with the functional similarities between ….and….. and less with the structural differences that seem, at first glance, to consititute such an immense gulf between them.

As sth. have advanced, I have been increasingly impressed with A and less with B that seem to……
Functional similarities between… and …..
Structural difference that seem to consititute such an immense gulf between … and ….

Consititue an immense gulf between

难句类型:复杂修饰、插入语、省略


1.
Although fiction assuredly springs from political circumstancesits authors react to those circumstances in ways other than ideologicaland talking about novels and stories primarily as instruments of ideology circumvents much of the fictional enterprise.4

Although A assuredly springs from B, A react to B in ways other than….,.and talking about D primarily as instruments of B,
circumvents much of C


Other than= not
React to sth. in ways other than…
Circumvent of sth
Find a way around an obstacle\Outwit\Prevent、使失效
Eg: Circumvant a scheme(制止阴谋)
The burglar used an electronic device to circumvent the alarm.




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发表于 2009-7-13 17:20:45 |只看该作者
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23..
Is this a defector are the authors working out ofor trying to forgea different kind of aesthetic
3
  Is



24.

1.
In addition, the style of some Black novels, like Jean Toomer’s Cane, verges on expressionism or surrealism ; does this technique provide a counterpoint to the prevalent theme that portrays the fate against which Black heroes are pitted , a theme usually conveyed by more naturalistic modes of expression ? 5

In addition, the style of sth, like…., verges on …..or…..; does this technique provide a counterpoint to the prevalent theme that portarys the fate against which sb. are pitted, a theme usually conveyed by …?


provide a counterpoint to......





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Black Fiction surveys a wide variety of novelsbringing to our attention in the process some fascinating and little-known works like James Weldon Johnson’s Autobiography of an Ex-  Colored Man. 4)注意:bring A to B ——bring to B A



Sth. surveys a wide variety of …., bringing to our attention in the process some fascinating and little-known things like…



26.
16.
Although these molecules allow radiation at visible wavelengths where most of the energy of sunlight is concentratedto pass throughthey absorb some of the longer-wavelength,  infrared emissions radiated from the Earth’s surfaceradiation that would otherwise be transmitted back into space. (4)

难句类型:复杂修饰、抽象词

Although these things allow A at sp, where most of …., to do, they aborb some of A, something that would otherwise ……

otherwise是副词作状语,表示如果后面的分句所说的they absorb some of the longer-waverlength, infrared emissions不发生时的后果。


动词和介词的拆看很常见!要注意。特别是固定搭配。

27.
The role those anthropologists ascribe to evolution is not of dictating the details of human behavior but one of imposing constraints—ways of feelingthinkingand acting that  "come naturally" in archetypal situations in any culture. 4


难句类型:复杂修饰省略
The role of doing sth!!
Is not the role of dictating
But is one role of imposing constraints
The role A abscibe to B is not of doing……
A对于B的作用不是


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Which of the following most probably provides an appropriate analogy from human morphologyfor the “details” versus “constraints” distinction made in the passage in relation to human behavior?
5

An analogy for….aganist ……from …..

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19.
A low number of algal cells in the presence of a high number of grazers suggested
but did not prove that the grazers had removed most of the algae. 3+


Suggest\插入语


30.


20.
Perhaps the fact many of these first studies considered only algae of a size that could be collected in a net (net phytoplankton), a practice that overlooked the smaller phytoplankton (nannoplankton) that we now know grazers are most likely to feed on , led to a de-emphasis of the role of grazers in subsequent research. 5



层层修饰结构。



Perhaps the facts that many researchs considered only A of one kind that could be collected, a practice that overlooked other kinds of A that we find out B are most likely to related with, led to a de-emphasis of B in subsequent resreach.


只关注到可观察到或容易收集的A,而低估了已被证实和C有关的B,这个事实导致了C在实验中的重要性下降。

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发表于 2009-7-13 23:17:11 |只看该作者
7.13 综合写作 223 时间到时,有一点漏写:shutup:

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回头修改比多些几句话重要,先把话说明白.在修改!! 检查和修改很重要.合理安排时间。


多看范文,多用句式,多加状语\定语\同位语


没用用并列结构\倒装\插入语

The giant-impact theory manifested in the reading might be questionable concerning the absence of trace, the differnce of material and the desnsity between earth and moon. However, those supposed evidence may lose their force if the following reasons are taken into consideration.

First,
the movement of earth's plant, which dramatically changed the map of earth, would have erase the trace of the giant impact happend nearly four billions years. So, the trace could be negligenable in significance for the possible correlation with existence of the smacking.


Second, considerated the heat generated by the collision, the water originally contained in the moon as a part of its composition would evoperated in such a high temperate. Therefore, the fact that the Moon rocks lacking in volatile susbstences now do not stand that the absence of water in the very begin.

Finally, the big piece of earth mantle evolved into the Moon was coming from the surface of earth, therefore the Moon's density should been compared between with the that of earth surface, rather with the terrestrial core. And solid statistics suggest that the surface density of the Moon is higher compared with the core, which perfectly matched the giant-impact theory.

In conclusion, with the claritication mentioned about, the disparities based on shacky evidence can not weaken the giant-impact theory, as long as the formation of the Moon taken into attention.


明天再修改~

估计很多病句。

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今天研究了OG的综合写作部分
发现之前写的文章,光写了LECTURE的内容没有突出两者关系!!
听了戴云教主的课件后 ,瞬间有了思路。逻辑结构的顺接还是很重要的。

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The giant-impact theory manifested in the reading material might be questionable concerning the absence of trace, the differnce of material and the desnsity between earth and moon. However, according to the professor those supposed evidence may lose their force if the following reasons are taken into consideration.

First, the lecture suggests that the trace which the passage believes should be found if the giant-impace theory stands itself might possibly be wiped out. Because of the movement of earth's plante, which dramatically changed the map of earth and the landscape, the trace of the giant impact happend nearly four billions years would have been erased. So, the trace could be negligenable in significance for the possible correlation with existence of the smacking.This directly contradicts what the writing indicates.

Besides, the professor refutes the passage regarding the disapperance of water in the Moon. Considerated the heat generated by the collision, the water originally contained in the moon as a part of its composition would definitely evoperate in such a high temperate when the impact happened. Therefore, the fact that the Moon rocks lacking in volatile susbstences now does not represent the absence of water in the very begin.

Finally, the reading and the listening material differs about the desity of the two objects. As the professor hold the view,demostrated by solid statistics which shows that the surface density of the Moon is higher compared with the core, perfectly matched the giant-impact theory,that the big piece of earth mantle, which evolved into the Moon came from the surface of earth. Therefore the Moon's density should be compared with that of earth surface, rather with the terrestrial core, which the passage suggested.

In conclusion, the lecturer clarifies that the disparities based on shacky evidence believed by the author can not weaken the giant-impact theory, as long as the formation of the Moon taken into attention.

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今天看了OG的 writer's handbook, 修改了文章。
发现自己几个常范的错误:
冒号的使用
1、N1,N2, and N3
2、adj1,adj2+ N
3、in conclusion, .....
经常把作文题的关键词,例如 Information 和 modern techonolgy, 反复使用,而且不变词
依照ETS的话,那就是WORD REPETITION=immature style=boring.
要注意!!!!
句子不要太长--ETS说了长句子正常长度应该是15-10字。要长短结合。特别要在几个长句子后加一个短句子,来起到强调作用。

千万不要用And...开头,不要用一切并列连词开头,eg: so, and, but.      ETS说了,这样很choppy.

ETS还说必须要用transistions来连接,因为topic sentence is an engine, sentences are cars。 How could the paragraph, i.e. the train, operate without the links between the cars?

ETS还说PERSASION中要deal with opposing views, think of good arguments from the opponents. How could you respond to them?

最后ETS反复说的,也是我必须做到的@PRACTICE! AND REVISE!

Does modern technology help students to learn more information and learn it more quicky?


Today students in campus can reach almost all the resource due to the benefits of emerging technology, and single out effective information for their own use. [introduction]
//
These modern technology with the first advent in the early 20th centrey had dramaticaly influenced the way people learn by broadening the amount and boosting the speed.
Like any advanture in history, these advancment might cause some backdarws, but as long as convience, cost, and the diversity of knowledge are taken into consideration, the long suit of the current techology is much more obvious.


Firstly, some slight disadvantages accompanied the merits include both pushing irrelevant messages and confusing matters.[TS] // [Mainidea+examples]
For instance, every minute we are receiving indiscriminately sended spam, the most hated product of Internet commerce, such as advertisments, promotion sheets and sometimes even a swindle, which almost buries e-mail of significance. /
[Mainidea+examples] Another drawback involves the possiblity that we might be submerged by rumors or falisfied facts. For example, some news we obtained by creations of the latest technology, such as tiwtter and facebook, creations that is nothing but just rumor and gossips, hampered our study.

Even though there might be some minor defects, the advantages are far outweight them. [Transition] [TS] With the utilization of modern technology, we can reach to the destinated information much more easily and smoothly, so as analyze the data, than the predecesor did decades ago. That might be revealed more distinctively when we are stuck with some massive reading loads.
[personal experience\comparison ]For example, when my father was in colleage, he found himself encircled by piles of documents or genetic materials, which might be as tall as his height, and exhausted of transcripting, operating and rummaging the entire summer. What a trouble! Luckily, nowadays favoured by the computer-based information storage and retrieval systems, practically and powerfully we done all of those job by accessing to the data bank online or the reference sections of the university liberary, checking out the index or dowenloading some crucial data, and then calculating the data with high-speed computer software. [TS] Besides the convenience, modern technology enabled us to spare much more money and time, therefore improve the efficiency, which is one of the most important charateristics of success, the goal of everyone, especially in today’s intensively competing society.

Another benefit contributed by these “wonder tool” is that students are in an ideal environment to
acquire and reflect what they learned. [Mainidea+examples] Backed by the internet or telecomminication, the diversities of information students can reach nowadays are beyond imaging, such as the latest periodicals, books, collections, and papers of reputed experts or organizations. Sometimes even the latest recorded music and vedio material are avilable. What’s more, one of the most cheerful thing is that the lectures in many universities aound the world are now exposed to students. As soon as equipped with certain devices, no matter a computer or a cellphone, to get access to the website, they can enjoy the fruits of current technology. [Mainidea+examples]In addition, the variety of the source prevent the corruption and prejudice, and hence shapen our minds. For instance, thanks at least partly to the advenced techonlogy, individuals, who are surrounded by more catholic information, are not easily been frauded by some unilateral explanation or bidding; and the facts no longer withhold or disguised.

In conclusion, it is safe to say that couple of disadvantages concerning learning has been done because of the modern technology, and yet, as we reflect on the way we grasp information, we are aborbing convience and diversification at every pore.
Backed by these “wonder tools”, the student can learn about knowledge in the most effective way. In addition, he will find himself in an atmosphere in which his sight will certainly widen. In my opinion, these are the two most important aspects to appraise the learning process, and applying modern technolgy is the best way to achieve them .

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