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标题错了，写成241了

这篇是我想得最多的。。观点竟然和楼主差不多。。呵呵

先占个位阿。。

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It can be traced back to the last century that among several countries in the world, there came into being a new sort of education called "elite education" which project is carried by some schools, always some famous schools, their（这里用whose分开吧，两个句子一起？） task is to choose some students who have been thought hold some special talents and abilities and begin training them at an early age so that they can eventually excel in their areas of ability. Whether this form of education will bring benefit to both society and these talents themselves have been debated for years. 其实开头还是提出一点观点好的。而且不要用太长的句子了，很难保证不出错的。一上来句子有问题给人影响就会差点了。

To begin with, I have regret to（这怎么这么别扭） say that this education is to some extent improper, or even cruel to the students who will be choose to take those special courses.（我觉得过于肯定了，应该说得更完整一些，对于那些不愿意的，或者有其他爱好的孩子才是这样。） Have educators ever consider the sense of the students? What should they do at this age if they are only ordinary children? What will they think of their childhood when they grow up? How will these talents feel those courses provide them? However, it seems that educators have not take（taken） these problems into consideration when they identified these children and begin training them. In fact, these unfathomed problems have become bombs, which will eventually crack someday. （在这个后面讲的又是另外一个关于不平衡发展的理由了，是否考虑再把上面论述清楚一些，下面再起一段呢？）In fact, some information has already confirmed what I dispute above. When these talents grow up, they always suffer from drawbacks, which those special educations leave them. They are prone to isolated, and have difficulty in communicating with others. Moreover, their extremeness, selfish, arrogant all of these characteristics block them to be mature persons and finally become barriers for them to excel in theirs areas. Even some reports say that this students' suicide rate is much more higher（去掉more） than common people. So we should think over what these special education's real significance, whether it is bless or curse for our society.（我想这个关于难以保持平衡和精神健康的可以展开多一点。）

Not only these special education will cause some psychological problem of these children, further more,（用but also） educator should consider that children may have no interesting in the realms they have special abilities and are not willing to make further study in these subjects.（这个观点我觉得和上面一段前半部分是可以整合起来的，就是这样早期的教育并没考虑孩子的意愿，是社会或家长单方面的意志） One of my friends is a case in point. He was only eight years old when he was pitched on to （去掉on吧）enter a special class in a famous school in my hometown, for he has an outstanding talent in mathematics. Three years later, he graduated and studied in a college in math. Unluckily, math was not his favorite subject and his ultimate dream is to learn music and became a musician. All what the education give him is a waste of time（这用法怪怪的） and a terrible memory. From this case, it is obviously that choosing a major for a child so early is impractical since in that age child has no recognition of his/her plan of the future and has not build up one's philosophy, value ethics yet, so it is entirely possible that they will change mind in the future when they grow up.

After reading these, some people may argue that if these children are not begin training at an early age, their talents are likely to remain undeveloped. （很好的回应了题目的后半部分）In fact, these worries are unnecessary. Gold will shine even if buried in mud. In the long river of history, we can see many brilliant individuals who have not get any special training or education at an early age but achieve great success though his/her own endeavor. For example, Edison, who is the most outstanding inventor in 19th century, did not got any special education and only got a three month formal education even worse, he was seem as an idiot from teacher's eyes. Whereas, via his own diligent and special talent in the field of invention, he made great contribution to the society and his name is deemed to be a symbol of an era.（我觉得例子是可以的，但是可以换一个说法，很多科学家小时候并没有被发掘出天赋，但是我们可以说他们没有天赋吗？一定要在很小的时候培养才能发展吗？相反，催化一种能力的提高是否有是合理呢？也许会拔苗助长）

In sum, although this issue will continue be discussed and haven’t got a final idea right now, what I assert is that these students should not be identified in such an early age. They need share a happy childhood just like their common companies and determine their destiny on their own.（我个人很赞同最后这句，个人的命运不应该是由别人决定的，这是剥夺了孩子们的权利！）
我是觉得抱这个观点的时候理论很重要，应该是一种有条件的否定。不能一概而论，否则给人觉得过于偏激，而且难以自圆其说。呵呵，你和我的观点几乎如出一辙阿，就是放的位置不一样。

楼主是限时的吗？？已经很不错了，，给自己信心，考前不要太紧张了，，虽然我和你一样觉得步履维艰。呜呜，，