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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television has destroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific examples to support your opinion.

With the significant development of technology, televisions, in the modern society, have slipped into everyone’s home noiselessly. While at the same time, problems raised by television are becoming more and more apparent. Many people believe television has enlarged the distance among friends and family. I am one of the people who highly agree with the opinion. Considering the problems from three aspects, conclusion can be drawn naturally.
From the perspective of children, it has become a common scene that children rush back to home, motivated by the desire of watching television, after a whole day class. Cartoon movies have a strong power for little children. However, a tremendous number of parents are worried about their children, because watching TV has been a main part for the children’s daily life, as a result, seldom of them are willing to go out of house participating games with their friend.
From the perspective of adults, the problem appears to be the same. Ending a day of busy work, all the adults are full of anxiety to have a good relax, getting away from the huge pressure and burden of living. Naturally, sitting in front of TV, focusing their eyes on the screen, is a vivid description of every family. What’s more, couples can be separated by TV. Only watching the program, couples have few opportunities to communicate with each other. All they remember is watching. No emotional talks, no funny jokes, no warm care, all the house can be heard only voice from TV. It is quite cool and horrible.
What’s more, no matter to the children or adults, watching TV waste an enormous amount of time. During the time, people would have the opportunities to go travelling, visit friends, join a ball, accompany relatives and spend a wonderful time together. However, as a real fact, people do nothing but watching television.
In conclusion, we can clearly understand how television destroys people’s relationships among family and friends. I highly suggest everyone spend less time on watching TV, more time on friends and family. Only in this way, can we make more friend, strengthen emotional relationship with our family, and make our life colorful.