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本帖最后由 tequilawine 于 2010-2-20 21:38 编辑
In our author's opinion, the utilization of this land which means there will be a school will still make it serve us well in future. Except the less reasoning, we still can find several causal flaws in this arbitrary decision.
In the first place, take a look at the beginning of the passage, what we can know is just about the fact that five years ago, we made a decision to leave the land as an underdeveloped place in order to benefit ourselves, but what we can not conclude is that whether we really get the interest from the action or not. The result of it still being a puzzle for us, i think it's a little bit too early to argue about the further action, because we know no matter it comes out better or worse, yet, it will can not support the conclusion deriving from itself.
That is second point we need to figure it out. Under the assumption is either being better, maybe the most effective way is just to remain the policy without any change, if not, or the other, which means being worse, further more, we need to reconsider it if what we do can revive the place and make the most of it. The discreet stance bases on two stances. What is the reason that cause it brings no more to us, will it still exist, were it to turn into a school? Hasty it maybe without digging more into inner reason. Second come from the new transform. Is it really better for us?
Sometimes, we just can not only focus on the short term income, we need squeeze some room for future that means, although we can not meet the red sheet at the end, what we got at last is much more worthwhile than it, not even to measure it by money. From this point, i think we can subvert all the author plausible evidence, which is so pale and feeble in front of further probe.
At last, i want to say, to modify the conclusion, we need to put much more surveys in sight, and integrate all the possible factors that may affect that may affect the result.
遇到的难题: 1 感觉写作文的时候,总是怕自己写跑题,同时担心没有抓到重点。
2 还有就是在论点的表达上,感觉没有ISSUE自如,不知道怎么回事。
3 最后就是对于结构的清晰度不知道怎样把握,是否和ISSUE有共同点。
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