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0710G同主题写作第四期——难题的真相之Argument50

"真相"系列之二终于憋出炉了!

这次无夏要给大家做一道曾经让无夏彻底崩溃的阿狗-地球诞生与彗星, 相信这次做活动的同学数目会锐减(抹额头|||). 而本打算参加的同学陡然停止了手中的鼠标点击, 然后心中暗骂数声BT...

我对A50的理解有四个阶段, 第一是崩溃阶段. 第二是瓦解阶段. 第三是顿悟阶段. 第四是ace阶段. 因此无夏有理由相信, 通过这道典型的解析, 会让我们对Argument的一系列难题产生一个全新的, 崭新的, 涣然一新的obversation.

从而可以推理出所有Argument难题的真相将会是万众瞩目的---(登登登登)

纸老虎. [参阅. <也谈纸老虎的来历> http://www.huayuqiao.org/articles/yuwenjianshetongxun/8205.htm]

So now let us go with this topic:

50.From a draft textbook manuscript submitted to a publisher. "As Earth was being formed out of the collision of space rocks, the heat from those collisions and from the increasing gravitational energy of the planet made the entire planet molten, even the surface. Any water present would have evaporated and gone off into space. As the planet approached its current size, however, its gravitation became strong enough to hold gases and water vapor around it as an atmosphere. Because comets are largely ice made up of frozen water and gases, a comet striking Earth then would have vaporized. The resulting water vapor would have been retained in the atmosphere, eventually falling as rain on the cooled and solidified surface of Earth. Therefore, the water in Earth's oceans must have originated from comets."

当地球在太空岩石的撞击作用下形成的时候，撞击产生的热量和行星越来越大的重力能量使整个行星融化，甚至包括表面。当时存在的任何水分都会蒸发并消失在太空。然而，当行星接近现在的大小的时候，它的重力强到了足以保持其周围的气体和水蒸气来形成大气层。由于彗星主要是由冻结的水和气体组成的冰，撞击地球的彗星将会蒸发。产生的水蒸气将被留在大气层，最终以降雨的形式落在地球已冷却而且坚硬的表面。因此，地球海洋的水分一定是来自彗星。

Step one: Reading the passage.

The major destination in this part is to distinguish which is the reality and which is the reasoning during it.

Because I guess our biggest problem in the tough Arguments' topics are similar-we even do not know the meaning of Chinese, how can I examine if the evidence is correct or incorrect?

That is really insteresting. At the beginnning, I had discussed this topic ever with a friend who learning in physics. He appreciated me to read something articles about the earth originating. As he said, we have no choice, or we would have no basical standard to judge whether those sentences are genuine or not.

Furthermore, there are two major problems we had to solve--how the earth birth and whether it generated the water in this process at the end. I fundementally refered to this website to read the data of them, the link is following:

http://netroom.hbu.edu.cn/personal/gene2000/life-qiyuan.htm

Meanwhile I also read several other similar references, finally I realized that if you use those data to compare to this Argument, you will find the author is totally wrote a scientific fiction. Because of the human beings had not decided which one could be the absolute right way for the earth beginning. Most of the professional experts were just provided a vague answers of their assumptions. On other words, this author created a background of his reasoning, and that was reasonable.

Getting here you can see, once the topic related to a extremely complicated subject, it had to make a describtion which was more dedail than other general topics. If he did not make such summary, the whole reasoning of this process won't be limited. That is to say, one consequence will have lots of fairlly causes from every other reasonable angels.

And that just hits me like a very good news. The more such of these "background" the topic had, the less reasoing of the writer we need to attest! And that is eventuelly the truth of tough topics in Argument wrtitng.

Step two: Classifying the passage.

When you caught this light our for the tough topic, you must to pick up the portion of describtion and thereby to list the reasoning one by one. I quoted the passage again:

"As Earth was being formed out of the collision of space rocks, the heat from those collisions and from the increasing gravitational energy of the planet made the entire planet molten, even the surface. Any water present would have evaporated and gone off into space. As the planet approached its current size, however, its gravitation became strong enough to hold gases and water vapor around it as an atmosphere. Because comets are largely ice made up of frozen water and gases, a comet striking Earth then would have vaporized. The resulting water vapor would have been retained in the atmosphere, eventually falling as rain on the cooled and solidified
surface of Earth. Therefore, the water in Earth's oceans must have originated from comets."

In my opinion, I tend to make this pink part as the whole background of the Earth being. Rests of it is the real reasoning of this author stated his own minds. So you just to be believed to this process and leave the REALISITY alone. Based on this evidence the author given to turn your argument out.

Setp three: Analyzing the reasoning.

Untill now, whatever you had be surprising or raptured, the fact is apparent standing in here, which is a simple structure he done. You can see clearly the err and the how caused to them.

Firstly, this is a series of unfairly causalities. And that is also the major vice the author appeared. I will detail it from three aspects.

With the construction of comets, the author did not provide any evidence to demonstrate the frozen water and gases are the major substances made up in it. For the metter, vapor may be the one consequence of all possibilites of comets cracked to the Earth.

Therefore, how the water had being generated and droped down the earth is a unconvincing assumption.

With the parttern of raindrop, even though we accknowledged the foregoing point is alright, the author still were short of the evidence and nesassary intruduction of other partterns the water formed in our Earth.

And it also could be doubted because the author did show us the definite information of this raindrop. What the amounts of the water came from raining was? Are there other space rocks have such kinds substances which can produce the water? Lacking these information, the author can not point out his final study.

Note: Obviously, I omited several details of the exact demonstrating. Those are the tasks which you had achieved from this mission. And I will polish it after you handed in your work below here.

External links:

Earth: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Earth#Hydrosphere

Comet: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Comet

Atmospheric Circulation and More: http://www.antiessays.com/free-essays/1216.html

The Chemistry of Natural Water: http://www.antiessays.com/free-essays/1352.html

Astronomy - A Model of Heaven: http://www.antiessays.com/free-essays/1541.html

The Importance of Water to Life on Earth: http://www.antiessays.com/free-essays/1368.html

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